Thank you all for your positive comments! I figure I'll make a part three just because I'm bored, but part II isn't done yet, so don't get too excited.
I changed the topic name because I don't enjoy arguing with trolls and haters.
Anywho, I'm glad you all like this section better. I expected you all would, as I do as well...but you should see part three. It's going to be damn exciting.
...fine, I'll give you one hint.
+ + vs. [Ghast]
Counterattack. It's going to be awesome.
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Greeat job on this story. Love it soo much, and very fast-paced.
BTW, i want yer base. My base is basically a hole in the ground with a 2 layer overhead cover. That's basically it. Your base makes the paranoid side of me go 'OMGWTF YES PLOXZORZ' I mean, a sectioned Quarantine system? Hundreds (or so it seems) of traps? Multiple sneaky entrances? Obsidian panic room? So...much....win.
I just read half, love it so far. However, I'm in a hurry so I'll give you the full report when I am finished later. You should put a link to this in your first thread. :smile.gif:
I just read half, love it so far. However, I'm in a hurry so I'll give you the full report when I am finished later. You should put a link to this in your first thread. :smile.gif:
I did...although I put it at the BOTTOM of the story. Perhaps I should re-position it.
Anyhow, once I write Part III (which I'm now pretty convinced I want to), I'll just condense all of it into one super-effing-large story.
If any mods read this: Why did you rename my thread title? Putting [Story] in front makes it look a lot less exciting, for whatever reason.
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I'm going to be honest. I will read it when I have the time, but I personally think there are way to many of these stories. But from the feedback I will read it.
I'm going to be honest. I will read it when I have the time, but I personally think there are way to many of these stories. But from the feedback I will read it.
It's worth your time...start with Part 1.
Anyhow, it's been updated, folks. Just a small one.
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Someone once told me you could actually use the eggs and bucket of milk to make a cake. Turns out it was just a lie...
I just read half, love it so far. However, I'm in a hurry so I'll give you the full report when I am finished later. You should put a link to this in your first thread. :smile.gif:
I did...although I put it at the BOTTOM of the story. Perhaps I should re-position it.
Anyhow, once I write Part III (which I'm now pretty convinced I want to), I'll just condense all of it into one super-effing-large story.
If any mods read this: Why did you rename my thread title? Putting [Story] in front makes it look a lot less exciting, for whatever reason.
Ah, sorry. I failed to notice it XD. I did read part one again as soon as you edited it, however.
I read the rest of the story, nice job so far.
You can shorten some of the passages and remove some of the redundant words (there are some cases where the same word was used twice in a sentence). And possibly more descriptive/less common words. (I understand you may have been tired whilst writing this lol).
Anyway, good job. I like how it all fits together.
I just read half, love it so far. However, I'm in a hurry so I'll give you the full report when I am finished later. You should put a link to this in your first thread. :smile.gif:
I did...although I put it at the BOTTOM of the story. Perhaps I should re-position it.
Anyhow, once I write Part III (which I'm now pretty convinced I want to), I'll just condense all of it into one super-effing-large story.
If any mods read this: Why did you rename my thread title? Putting [Story] in front makes it look a lot less exciting, for whatever reason.
Ah, sorry. I failed to notice it XD. I did read part one again as soon as you edited it, however.
I read the rest of the story, nice job so far.
You can shorten some of the passages and remove some of the redundant words (there are some cases where the same word was used twice in a sentence). And possibly more descriptive/less common words. (I understand you may have been tired whilst writing this lol).
Anyway, good job. I like how it all fits together.
Thanks.
Yeah, my word choice is FAILING...something unusual for my writing. I'll go fix it some day.
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Someone once told me you could actually use the eggs and bucket of milk to make a cake. Turns out it was just a lie...
Yeah, my word choice is FAILING...something unusual for my writing. I'll go fix it some day.
I know how you feel lol.
Just look up synonyms for the common words on an online thesaurus. That's what I do when my mind goes blank while writing.
Plus, not only would you be writing a creative story, you would be expanding your vocabulary. :3
If you want to, you can check out my story. It's based on a dream I had many years ago. Link is in my signature.
(Written in cantos, each canto gradually increases in size as the story goes it.)
It originally was meant to be a description of a dream I had for a friend of mine.
Yeah, my word choice is FAILING...something unusual for my writing. I'll go fix it some day.
I know how you feel lol.
Just look up synonyms for the common words on an online thesaurus. That's what I do when my mind goes blank while writing.
Plus, not only would you be writing a creative story, you would be expanding your vocabulary. :3
If you want to, you can check out my story. It's based on a dream I had many years ago. Link is in my signature.
(Written in cantos, each canto gradually increases in size as the story goes it.)
It originally was meant to be a description of a dream I had for a friend of mine.
I know HOW to improve this story's word choice, it's that I'm too lazy to actually do that.
And I want to finish Part II and write Part III first.
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Someone once told me you could actually use the eggs and bucket of milk to make a cake. Turns out it was just a lie...
Yeah, my word choice is FAILING...something unusual for my writing. I'll go fix it some day.
I know how you feel lol.
Just look up synonyms for the common words on an online thesaurus. That's what I do when my mind goes blank while writing.
Plus, not only would you be writing a creative story, you would be expanding your vocabulary. :3
If you want to, you can check out my story. It's based on a dream I had many years ago. Link is in my signature.
(Written in cantos, each canto gradually increases in size as the story goes it.)
It originally was meant to be a description of a dream I had for a friend of mine.
I know HOW to improve this story's word choice, it's that I'm too lazy to actually do that.
And I want to finish Part II and write Part III first.
Just don't rush yourself, wouldn't want that.
If I rush myself, I usually get burnt out easily then proceed to pick it back up months later.
is impatient. If you complete Part II and wait for 75 likes, wil be angry. The topic will fall to the second or third page and then nobody will vote on the poll. does not like this prospect. Therefore, you must continue writing until it is completed or will get you.
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awesome story. i want to see more stuff like this, diary of a creeper, and miners eternity.
such epicness :ohmy.gif:
I changed the topic name because I don't enjoy arguing with trolls and haters.
Anywho, I'm glad you all like this section better. I expected you all would, as I do as well...but you should see part three. It's going to be damn exciting.
...fine, I'll give you one hint.
+ + vs. [Ghast]
Counterattack. It's going to be awesome.
Epic Pig-Zombie army? Oh. Hell. Yeah.
You'll see...
It mostly depends on whether or not I win the first war. I doubt I will, but...Well, you'll see.
Either way, it'll blow your mind. I've still got some tricks up my sleeve.
Congratulations, you have leveled up your Writing skillz!
Greeat job on this story. Love it soo much, and very fast-paced.
BTW, i want yer base. My base is basically a hole in the ground with a 2 layer overhead cover. That's basically it. Your base makes the paranoid side of me go 'OMGWTF YES PLOXZORZ' I mean, a sectioned Quarantine system? Hundreds (or so it seems) of traps? Multiple sneaky entrances? Obsidian panic room? So...much....win.
Keep on going!
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I did...although I put it at the BOTTOM of the story. Perhaps I should re-position it.
Anyhow, once I write Part III (which I'm now pretty convinced I want to), I'll just condense all of it into one super-effing-large story.
If any mods read this: Why did you rename my thread title? Putting [Story] in front makes it look a lot less exciting, for whatever reason.
It's worth your time...start with Part 1.
Anyhow, it's been updated, folks. Just a small one.
Ah, sorry. I failed to notice it XD. I did read part one again as soon as you edited it, however.
I read the rest of the story, nice job so far.
You can shorten some of the passages and remove some of the redundant words (there are some cases where the same word was used twice in a sentence). And possibly more descriptive/less common words. (I understand you may have been tired whilst writing this lol).
Anyway, good job. I like how it all fits together.
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Thanks.
Yeah, my word choice is FAILING...something unusual for my writing. I'll go fix it some day.
I know how you feel lol.
Just look up synonyms for the common words on an online thesaurus. That's what I do when my mind goes blank while writing.
Plus, not only would you be writing a creative story, you would be expanding your vocabulary. :3
If you want to, you can check out my story. It's based on a dream I had many years ago. Link is in my signature.
(Written in cantos, each canto gradually increases in size as the story goes it.)
It originally was meant to be a description of a dream I had for a friend of mine.
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[Minecraft] Earth on Hell
I know HOW to improve this story's word choice, it's that I'm too lazy to actually do that.
And I want to finish Part II and write Part III first.
Just don't rush yourself, wouldn't want that.
If I rush myself, I usually get burnt out easily then proceed to pick it back up months later.
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Also, I don't know if I'm just skipping over it, but is the protagonist a boy or girl?
He likes it too.
Part II is done-ish. Just have to edit and upload it.
I've changed the vote to 50 or 60 votes.