I like this! It's a fast-paced story with funny characters. Also, don't worry about how many characters there are in your story; just use however many it takes to get your story across.
I like this! It's a fast-paced story with funny characters. Also, don't worry about how many characters there are in your story; just use however many it takes to get your story across.
Sorry, I meant main characters :3
Ahhh characters D:
And thanks for the complement. I realized this story is quite fast-paced, but hey, the maximum page is three so I gotta cram everything in. Else it'd take forever.
The Lich Lord and his four Lich Counts approve of this!! Awesome story, except for some grammar/spelling errors.
If you read the bottom of the post with the first few chapters, you'll notice that he explains why those errors are there. If you can't find it, read this quote:
Just to let you know, I am a dedicated writer and my usual chapters are 6+ pages. But since this is a fanfic, I'll attempt to write only 1 - 3 pages And I have bad grammar. It's instilled into my writing style, I'm so sorry. I also write original stories.
Hide the fooooooood! Hoorah! Welcome back again. Even though I don't know you all that much... Welcome!
Woot woot! Yeah, well, just don't read the fanfiction. It's crap :L lol
I'm currently rewriting it. I kind of realize I took this a bit too much on the comedy side when I was going for more of a serious side story, but still somewhat funny.
Why does the golden apple have an undying temptation aura? ._.
But still, epic storyz.
Just editing but,
That does not seem to be a prologue, rather, it's straight out chapter one.
Prologue would be an interestig scene that grasps a reader's attention so they will read the story to learn the meaning of the prologue.
Or something like that.
Why does the golden apple have an undying temptation aura? ._.
But still, epic storyz.
Just editing but,
That does not seem to be a prologue, rather, it's straight out chapter one.
Prologue would be an interestig scene that grasps a reader's attention so they will read the story to learn the meaning of the prologue.
Or something like that.
But i'm not forcing you to change or anything.
I think we all have different mindset of what a prologue is xD since I usually write prologues as the past before the starting of the story.
The fact that it's something that Maximus has never seen in his life and that fact that it gives this forbidden temptation (like how he wasn't supposed to eat it) kind of attracted him toward it. Also, the garden of Eden.
Sorry, I meant main characters :3
Ahhh characters D:
And thanks for the complement. I realized this story is quite fast-paced, but hey, the maximum page is three so I gotta cram everything in. Else it'd take forever.
Maximus and Markus are coming back to the Overworld. What can possibly go wrong? :]
XD Everything
I promise you... the next chapter is going to be long. And by long, I mean more than three pages LOL
I'm telling you the truth D:
TT2000, you are genius.
Woot woot! Yeah, well, just don't read the fanfiction. It's crap :L lol
I'm currently rewriting it. I kind of realize I took this a bit too much on the comedy side when I was going for more of a serious side story, but still somewhat funny.
Oh darn it :L
EDIT: Well, now you can read it lol.
But still, epic storyz.
Just editing but,
That does not seem to be a prologue, rather, it's straight out chapter one.
Prologue would be an interestig scene that grasps a reader's attention so they will read the story to learn the meaning of the prologue.
Or something like that.
But i'm not forcing you to change or anything.
I think we all have different mindset of what a prologue is xD since I usually write prologues as the past before the starting of the story.
The fact that it's something that Maximus has never seen in his life and that fact that it gives this forbidden temptation (like how he wasn't supposed to eat it) kind of attracted him toward it. Also, the garden of Eden.
It's like one paragraph xD