The Meaning of Life, the Universe, and Everything.
Join Date:
3/22/2012
Posts:
111
Minecraft:
KnightPlutonian
Member Details
Out of Character Information
IGN: XzXThanatosXzX
Real-Life Age:16
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): XzXThanatosXzX (same name as IGN)
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing an action upon another character
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Knowing something that your character shouldn't, ie someone you "know" died in chat, but you're underground mining and suddenly come out for revenge.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Taking a persona within the game, enhancing the lore
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: No one
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: When they agree to it
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: When using ( )
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yes
Who is allowed to use magic?: Mages and Priests
Who are the Fallen?: A race that makes numerous allusions to "The Father"
When and how did our current government come to be?: 169 AR by defeating the previous empire, the Linyera Monarchy
Who are the Order of Aradin?: A group of people dedicated to defending the Chancellor which has fallen into disrepair.
What are the Net and Essence? The Net is a magical force that saves people from falling into nonexistence, and sometimes their items as well. Essence is something that is gained from hunting beasts that can be put into Emeralds and sold which prevents the loss of items when falling into the Net.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: I've popped on a few servers, but nothing too serious
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: I don't remember any names, just that I never stayed long because something else caught my eyes.
Character Information
Name: Than Atos
Age:23
Class: Ranger
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Citizen of the Chancellory
Physical description: Dark hair, red eyes, with a black cloak and dark pants.
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.):
Than was born to family on the outskirts of the Chancellory’s territory. Sent as a settlement group, Than’s early life was dedicated to clearing out more room for the Chancellory to expand. However, as the Chancellory’s power declined, supplies eventually stopped coming and Than was expected to gather resources from his island in order to survive. It was then that he learned how to run across the trees, and aim his bow steadily. His family survived for several years on their resources, but it did not last. Pirates came, and burnt the settlement down to the ground. Than’s father, mother, sister, and many others died in the attack and when the pirates left, only Than. He made a small shelter and, unable to find any other survivors, decided to return to the Chancellory to tell them of the outpost’s destruction. He spent several months building a serviceable airship, and by the time Than turned 17, the ship was finally finished.
He started the month-long voyage soon after the boat was completed, after collecting enough resources to successfully complete the trip. Throughout his childhood, he had taken several excursions to the nearest islands, but even those were weeks away. When he finally arrived at the closest one, he was unused to the hectic environment of the city. Though the empire had not officially recognized them as a city, the trade passing through from the interior of the empire to the exterior of the outposts had turned it into a major port. Stumbling through the city, Than was finally able to locate a man who gave him directions to the capital. A shipping captain, the man told him all of the supply chains that would help restock him for the long, treacherous journey back to the heart of the empire.
After leaving the city, Than followed the man’s directions which lead him well, bringing him to several friendly islands which made repairs and upgrades to his ship, as well as giving him supplies and information about the next leg of the trip. It took half a year, but the Capital was finally in sight. Than, by now, was a veteran flyer, able to navigate through storm and hail, fight off pirates by bow, and able to flee from the wild animals in the jungles he rested at.
As he docked at the port, other people looked at his ship curiously. Than walked off the ship, observed on all sides by curious onlookers. He came up to the Throne, walking past the large line in front of him to speak to the Chancellor. When he got to the front of the line, he loudly announced “Outpost 18 has fallen,” disrupting the Chancellor’s conversation with the man in front of him. The Chancellor looked up for a moment, then back down and continued his conversation. Than was furious. He stomped over, shoved the man aside, and stared angrily at the Chancellor. “Did you hear me?” Than asked loudly. The Chancellor replied, “Yes, now get out of my sight. We abandoned the Outposts years ago.” Than shouted, “So what about the citizens living there?” The Chancellor said, “To hell with them, they don’t matter, they can die there.”
Than couldn’t believe it. The Chancellor didn’t care what happened to the outpost. He pulled back his fist, and shot it forwards to punch the Chancellor. His fist was stopped by an iron shield which crossed in front of the Chancellor by his guards. Than was tackled by the rest of the Order or Aradin. He was held to the floor while the Chancellor’s laugh grew, eventually filling the hall with demonic echoes.
-Several Year Later-
Than stepped into the open air. It was nice finally being free. Now he could finally set the plan he made in prison into motion. First he needed some followers…
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): Create an empire built on honor to rival the Chancellory and destroy it.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Expert archer and parkourist, an expert escapist (able to lose trackers quickly), and has a tendency to be too involved with his thoughts to help anyone else.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.):
Honor code binds him to helping other people, but at the same time is sometimes ignorant of those in need of help which causes people to question his
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): No.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
Than is busy thinking about his life as he strolls past the alleyway. He stops when he hears a muffled scream coming from the narrow corridor. He turns, and upon seeing the men attacking the girl charges in, pulling his sword from its sheath.
“Just stay quiet, missy, and we won’t have to hurt you too much,” said the bandit. He reached into the front of her blouse as she struggled to get away. Suddenly, the hand was ripped away and the man was sent flying down the alley. In front of her is a new man with dark black hair, wearing a darker cloak and leaning into where the raider had just been. In his hand is a sword, which he swings at the other surprised robber. He ducks just in time to avoid the blade and pulls out his own sword, parrying the next strike and returning with a jab. Than sidestepped the jab and pulled the bandit’s arm, smashing his armored head into the wall with terrific force.
He slides to the ground as the first raider props himself against the wall several feet away, shaking his head. Than looks at the second raider’s much bulkier stature and grabs the girl’s arm, gently but firmly pulling her away from the alley. The pair sprints through the streets until Than is sure that no one is following. They duck into another alley where Than sets the girl gently down, leaning her against the wall of the alley. She stares at the opposite wall in shock of what just happened. Than looks at her torn shirt and sets some money on the floor next to her.
“Do you know the way home?” asks Than. The girl nods, tears beginning to form in her eyes. Than turns around and begins to leave the alley. A weak voice says, “Thank you.” Than nods and leaves.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
“What could you need from Bloodstone?” Than asks the man. With a desperate look in his eye, he says, “I need some money for a ransom. Bandits have my wife. They’re going to kill her unless I give them what they want.”
Than replied, “I won’t go to Bloodstone, but I will help you. How much do you need?”
“$1000.”
Than checked in his pocket. He had just received his pay for the week, and was going to get a better home. This was a more noble use. He pulled out his money and counted out $1000. He handed the money to the man.
With a relieved look on his face, the man took the money saying, “Aneria bless you, thank you so much.”
Than placed the few remaining bills in his pocket and nodded at the man as he continued down the road.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
“Spare some change?” the old man said.
Than pulled the remnants of his paycheck and split them, giving the man enough for a month of meals.
“Aneria bless you, sir,” said the man. Than nodded and continued walking. There was always time to do a good deed. In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
“It’s not worth it, it’s not worth it, it’s not worth it,” Than thought as the drunk approached.
The drunkard continued insulting his family, “Yer mother sure knows *hic* how to’ please a man eh? Her and I *hic* sure got to some fun last night *hic*. Or maybe it was yer sister *hic*. She was…” The man flew across the room, hitting the wall. He slid down it as Than stood by his chair, shaking with anger. Everything in the bar had stopped and all the people were looking at him.
He threw down some money, and quickly sped out the door, ignoring the whispers that erupted behind him. He stepped out into the rain which hid the tears beginning to slide his face.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
“That is a beautiful necklace.” Than said. The young woman blushed and smiled. Than continued, “Where did you buy it? I would like to purchase it for my mother. The woman replied, “I bought it at the store over there,” indicating a small shop several yards away.
Than thanked the woman and walked into the store. He found the store clerk who found the type of necklace and sold it to Than.
*That Night*
“Happy Birthday Mum. I got you this great necklace at the store. It cost me a pretty penny, but it was worth it for you.” Than stroked the photo sitting on the box. He opened the drawer and put the necklace inside.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?
I don’t have any questions, but perhaps add a rebel group to the lore.
Other notes: After reviewing some of the other apps that got accepted/rejected, I've decided to more carefully edit my app. By all means, read this one and, if it passes, accept it and that will be that. But if you don't accept it, simply do a normal rejection (quote and add rejected) and I shall post the new app.
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot):no skype
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: yes, yes, and yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: being over-powered and doing stuff that is to OP Ex: "I slice off your head in one blow"
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: using OOC info in IC Ex: hearing about a event in ooc chat then immediately having you char know about even though there was no way he could know about it
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: playing as a char as if it was real life
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: staff/no one
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: CvC
When are you allowed to speak out of character?:When not in combat ( I really don't know :/ )
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: yesh
Who is allowed to use magic?: mages
Who are the Fallen?: People that have been secluded from the other nations and prefer peace over war
When and how did our current government come to be?: In 169 A.R the chancellery spanned all across the world (my best knowledge)
Who are the Order of Aradin?: in 170 A.R the Order of Aradin was created to protect the chancellery from attacks
What are the Net and Essence? The net is something that when you fall out of the world lets you respawn at the nearest safe spot, but you lose your stuff. The Essence if the stuff you get for killing monsters, smelting and mining (its XP) and is used by mages
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: TO many servers to count
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: lets see about 10. 8 was because the server shut down and the other two just has 0 people for 21 hours a day
Character Information
Name: Joule
Age: 23
Class:Labaror
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: CHancellory
Physical description: (quick note: I can not change my skin because when I try the comp crashes) His body can not be seen due to the cloak that conceals his entire body. He has red eyes, which end up making people not trust at all not matter what he does.
Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Joule was a ordinary Joe in the Chancollery and worked for a large company. He was a laborer, so he was put to work digging out plots of land, help in building construction, and helped build airships and what not. One night while he was working, he noticed a glow in the night sky. He had no idea what it was, so, out of curiosity, he went outside of his crumbling shack and went towards the direction of the glow. After walking what he guessed was ten miles he finally reached the glow, which had turned different colors and heights as he was heading towards it. When what was making the glow finally came into view, he saw a mage practicing magic. He was doing all sorts of spells. He was obviously showing off, making flame birds and doing backflips with the wind, even making obsidian by combining water and lava. Joule was absolutely amazed by the mage's performance. He wanted to take a closer look but he was afraid that he would fall and roll down the hill or something like that, giving away his position. So he just stood there, watching. After maybe a hour or so the mage finally stopped practicing and traveled in the opposite direction of Joule. Joule went home as well, memorized by the performance. When he finally got home it was becoming dawn and he was very tired. He went to bed and dreams that he was a mage, doing all sorts of neat tricks and spells. He imagined he was making a obsidian eagle then blasting it apart. His dreamed was interrupted by a loud bang. It was his little helper, who always comes in the morning to wake him up so he wont be late for his job. He had no idea who his little helper was, all he knew was that he helped wake up in the morning, or she. He went to work and was given the task to help clear a site for construction. All he could think about was the mage he saw last night and how that he would love to do that sort of stuff. That night, after arguing with himself for about an hour, he finally decided he to, would become a mage and maybe finally quit his awful job as a laborer. He had no idea what it would take to become a mage, but he knew it wasn't going to be easy, but he didn't care. He was going to become a master mage, maybe even become a arch mage. He promised himself he won't let anything come in the way from learning the art of magic.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): He want's to become a master mage. Motivation: a mage practicing in the middle of the night.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Physical: He is very fast. Mental: He is highly intelligent and always determined to reach goals
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): Physical: kinda weak. Mental: none
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.):none
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
I study the situation, and decided that if he confronted the group of armed men he would no doubt lose. He walks along ahead trying to forget about the entire situation.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
"Bloodstone!? Are you mad very little people go there and return alive and even less return un-injured. Even if you have to best equipment and skills you still have a very low chance of surviving that place!" I yell.He looks around, then turns back to me. "well, say I have a couple thousand gold pieces. Would you go then?" He offers. "absolutely not! My life is much more important that even a billion gold pieces!" I yell. And with that, I march away.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. I sigh, then give him 10 gold pieces. "it's not much, but it should get you a decent meal" I say. "Thank you, sir." He says with a weak voice then, gets up and goes to the butcher shop. I smile felling very good for myself then walk away with a very good mood.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. Ignore him, he his probably drunk. I walk away. "hey!" He says in a slurred voice. "to afraid for a fight, or are you a chicken like your mom!" I continue to ignore him. He continues yelling a bunch of things at me, and I really start to get annoyed, but I continue to ignore him. After a while a guard comes and takes him away from the tavern. I sigh with relief and order a drink.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. I look at it then stop the women. "excuse me, were can I buy a necklace like that?" She looks at her necklace then at me. "Oh, this? I got it from a jewelry shop not far from here. Its about 3 blocks to the south." I thank her, then look at the sun to see which way south is. then head to the jewerly shop
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?
Other notes: I tend to powergame without even realizing it.
lmfaodeeman/XzXThanatosXzX- There were many things wrong with your app. Let's both go over them.
- "Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner." This is said specifically in the app. Your character really only seems to have one ambition - to get revenge on the Chancellery for screwing over Than and his family. Now seems a good time to move to the next problem.
- There is no empire. We also don't know if the government will be an oppressive one as of yet, seeing as the server hasn't opened. There also is no Outpost 18. Your character may be from one of four (possibly 5) locations: The Capitol, The Medori Island (He'll have to be a Medori/Fallen in order to be from there), the town of Brightwater - Controlled by the Church, or the small town - for characters who don't wish to be from anywhere specific (The fifth town would be the Mining Outpost on a nearby island, though I can't recall if players can't start from there or not.. Though I believe they can - Don't quote me on it).
- Characters may not start out with knowledge on how to pilot airships. They must be taught how to pilot either by the Admiral or by a different tutor possibly in the future.
- Your character is WAYYYY Overpowered. Your strenghts: "Expert archer and parkourist, an expert escapist (able to lose trackers quickly), and has a tendency to be too involved with his thoughts to help anyone else." He's an expert archer, an expert parkourist, an expert escapist, and day dreams a lot. Now.. Let's take a look at your weaknesses, "Honor code binds him to helping other people, but at the same time is sometimes ignorant of those in need of help which causes people to question his" First off.. This sentence doesn't even make any sense. But more importantly, this is NOT a weakness - Atleast not a good one, anyway. Give your character some real weaknesses. Make him fast but not the strongest, or really strong but not the fastest. Give him a bum arm or leg which stunts his combat. Perhaps his time in jail stunted his growth and caused him to be out of shape (Which probably would happen, seeing as your bio your character is fresh out of jail).
- Now, I realize I'm telling you to rip and add a lot of things out and into your bio, which I am, but allow me to tell you something.. Once you're IC and on the server, if you wanna get a following and try and overthrow the government, you can do that. Sure, it'd be hard but hey, you technically CAN do that. You wanna set up an outpost on a random wilderness island and call him home to yourself and a group of settlers? You can do that. You wanna throw a punch at the current Chancellor, hell, YOU CAN DO THAT (Though.. It wouldn't end very well.)! But first.. You need to have a balanced, fair character - Preferably with a less cliche and more detailed backstory.
(Edit: Also, try to add more detail to your ICRs and make them a bit more realistic. What I mean by that is.. Would a guy recently released from prison REALLY be carrying around 1000 bucks on him? And where would he get this 'paycheck' from? On a brighter note, I did like your Necklace ICR.)
Please take these notes and use them to edit the next app you post. Thanks for your cooperation. Good luck!
Rejected:
catlover12345- I'm sorry, but you've been rejected. Please do not apply again or message staff members about your application. Anyway, here are the main reasons you were rejected.
- Poor spelling and grammar.
- Pretty bad backstory..
- Poor ICRs.
- Many things were wrong in the OOC portion of your app.
Sorry, not going into a whole lot of detail seeing as it's really late where I am.. Thanks for taking the time to try and apply and checking us out.
After walking what he guessed was ten miles he finally reached the glow, which had turned different colors and heights as he was heading towards it.
This actually brings up an interesting point about the islands. Many of them aren't that large. In fact, most of them are only a few chunks across. Obviously, then island the Capital rests on is one of the bigger ones, but it wouldn't be possible to walk ten miles out from the city, especially since the Slums (Where I'm assuming your char would have lived (Crumbling shack)) are pretty much a few meters away from the edge of the island. The more you know.
Does it make me a bad person if i only come here to read the referred apps?
You're the last one that should be judging any deferred or rejected apps, Dere. Just saying.
Anyway, no one ought to be shy or self conscious about posting an application. As long as you fill out the entire thing, read the directions and all information in the OP, try your best, and do so in a polite manner, you'll receive no grief from myself or the rest of the WL team.
Just saying, the staff are still waiting for our classes plugin / looking for any possible substitutes! We are working hard to try and open this server as soon as possible!
The Meaning of Life, the Universe, and Everything.
Join Date:
3/14/2011
Posts:
77
Minecraft:
DeadlyInsanaty
Member Details
Hello there,
Over the past two or three days and after reading the lore and applications of the server and players I must say that my interest was 'piqued'. I had discovered this server through an old friend that I unfortuanetely haven't been able to contact for quite some time. Although I knew I wouldn't really be able to play on the server even if I was accepted (Do to the fact that my compter runs on Windows 2000 and I have yet to get a new one) I decided to put myself to the challange and began filling out your application. Needless to say the application went smoothly as I looked up your lore and found if very original and enjoying to read. Unfortunately, I may have gotten a bit carried away with my character's bio and before I knew it I was writing a whole short story about this character and how he goes on to become part of this world ain a strange way. In total my app is 12 pages long (MS Word standards) and while I would very like to get your opinion on my writing skills and app filling I didn't wantto clog up the forums page just for a player who woundnt be able to play for some time.
Please know that I have a deep love for RP and I have enjoyed my time on every server I've been on. Know also, that I am offering to privately message my app (More of a short story, don't want to clog the forums) to any OP or Mod that would be willing to read it. This is a completely optional thing and I wont be hurt if people dont message me back. I simply want a little critic on my work. I look forward to any reply.~Sincearly, DeadlyInsanaty
Hello there,
Over the past two or three days and after reading the lore and applications of the server and players I must say that my interest was 'piqued'. I had discovered this server through an old friend that I unfortuanetely haven't been able to contact for quite some time. Although I knew I wouldn't really be able to play on the server even if I was accepted (Do to the fact that my compter runs on Windows 2000 and I have yet to get a new one) I decided to put myself to the challange and began filling out your application. Needless to say the application went smoothly as I looked up your lore and found if very original and enjoying to read. Unfortunately, I may have gotten a bit carried away with my character's bio and before I knew it I was writing a whole short story about this character and how he goes on to become part of this world ain a strange way. In total my app is 12 pages long (MS Word standards) and while I would very like to get your opinion on my writing skills and app filling I didn't wantto clog up the forums page just for a player who woundnt be able to play for some time.
Please know that I have a deep love for RP and I have enjoyed my time on every server I've been on. Know also, that I am offering to privately message my app (More of a short story, don't want to clog the forums) to any OP or Mod that would be willing to read it. This is a completely optional thing and I wont be hurt if people dont message me back. I simply want a little critic on my work. I look forward to any reply.~Sincearly, DeadlyInsanaty
I'd be happy to read over your app, and if you'd like, you can come onto our enjin forum at http://aneria.enjin.com/home and post your character's bio/short story in our campfire section, where our players post their own stories and works (This community has a lot of writers in it that would be happy to critique your work, including myself). You can also stay updated on news about the server, read some of the other lore we have that isn't posted in the OP, and just hang out. While I cannot technically accept you when you don't have an MC account, I may be able to put you on a sort of wait list. You can just message me on our enjin or on the MC forums here once you've updated your computer and obtained a MC account, and I'll post your app's verdict (most likely accepted, right? ) for all to see and you'll be given access to the server.
Anyways, I'll keep brief and short, some of you might remember me from the RP server before this months ago. I recently stumbled upon you guys again, and I remember hearing about this in development beforehand. At the time, I wanted a break from Minecraft RPing due to me trying to *adapt* into that type of RPing. Being a forum RPer for several years now, it's kind of hard at times to switch over even with my countless amounts of servers that I've played with this concept.
So, I'll try my shot again, might take me awhile to get myself familiar, but except a CS...sometime :).
Anyways, I'll keep brief and short, some of you might remember me from the RP server before this months ago. I recently stumbled upon you guys again, and I remember hearing about this in development beforehand. At the time, I wanted a break from Minecraft RPing due to me trying to *adapt* into that type of RPing. Being a forum RPer for several years now, it's kind of hard at times to switch over even with my countless amounts of servers that I've played with this concept.
So, I'll try my shot again, might take me awhile to get myself familiar, but except a CS...sometime .
Long time no see. If you ever feel like dropping by and saying hey to everyone: http://aneria.enjin.com/
Official opening date has been set for May 25th! More info to follow, including times and details, both here and on our forums. Be sure to alert any friends of yours who may have been accepted! Cyall server-side!
Official opening date has been set for May 25th! More info to follow, including times and details, both here and on our forums. Be sure to alert any friends of yours who may have been accepted! Cyall server-side!
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Yes I do, I made it when I was 11 and the username is MegaZOMGkitteh
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: I agree to the terms and conditions
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Powergaming is a style of interacting with games or roleplays with the aim of maximising progress towards specific goals to the exclusion of other considerations such as: storytelling, atmosphere and camaraderie.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Metagaming is a term usually used to define any strategy, action or method used in a game which transcends a prescribed rule set. An example of metagaming would be this (all characters in the following are completely fictional, and not associated with the server in any way): Leader of the Medori: We shall attack the Capitol tonight! Someone in OOC: The Medori are going to attack the Capitol tonight! CAN BE PRIVATE MESSAGED ALSO.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Roleplaying means to act or "take on" the role of a fictional character, or a historical figure in a play, game, or movie. It also means (from the Oxford Dictionary) "the changing of one's behaviour to fulfill a social role"
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: No one. Not even the admins as it gives an unfair and distinct advantage over other players.
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: YOU are only allowed to cause the death of another player, if the other player you are fighting decides to make a fatal mistake while you are attacking. They cannot however, stated in rule 3. Dodge tons of swordstrikes, make an amazing escape, or come back from the dead through Necromancy. (Just a question, if you were an ASSASSIN hired to assassinate someone, could you like, attempt to push rocks or boulders down onto them while giving them the chance to dodge it?)
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: You can speak out of character when using the OOC chat, or by PMing people. You can also do this by putting parentheses around a sentence, like so. (So how is everyone tonight) Hello John!
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yes I have read the primary server lore.
Who is allowed to use magic?: Mages, and Priests. Priests can only use healing, buff, and debuff spells though, while Mages have a wide variety of spells to chose from.
Who are the Fallen?: The Fallen (also known as the Medori) are Nomads. They generally stay away from other civilizations, liking the secluded side of life instead of the loud, noisy one. They also prefer peace over violence when solving issues.
When and how did our current government come to be?: The Chancellory came to power in the year 169 A.R. after the defeat of the old Linyera Monarchy in 167 A.R. on the Planes of Raun.
Who are the Order of Aradin?: The Order of Aradin are the knights who are sworn to protect the Capitol at the cost of their lives. They reside in the Knight's Hall.
What are the Net and Essence? The Net is essentially a invisible barrier that protects you from death. When you fall off of one of the many islands. You get teleported back to the nearest island without your equipment or gear. However, for the cost of Essence (XP) you can reclaim your gear from the Net. Essence is the XP of the Roleplay, which you can use for many things, such as enchanting and reclaiming gear from the net.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: This is my first RP, and I hope I get accepted into it very much. It has been something I have wanted to try out for 1 month now!
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: I haven't.
Character Information
Name: Daniel Gallant
Age: 18
Class: Ranger
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Citizen of the Chancellory
Physical description: 6' 4", Well Built, Blue Eyes, Blonde Hair, Sturdy, Grimy (Dirty) looking face, scar on his knee.
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Daniel was born in the Capitol. He was a very curious young boy. He got into lots of trouble. He climbed things he shouldn't have, and even as a baby, was very energetic. When he turned 5 years old, he fell and scraped his knee. Leaving a scar he would never forget. Whenever he saw it, he remembered vividly what happened. When he turned 7, his Father let him shoot his first bow, he had a true shot. Of course, it needed practice, but he was still weak, and hadn't matured yet for his age. But he hit the target, sure it was out of the circle, but it hit it.
When he turned 10, he got into trouble with the guards of the city. He stole an apple. A simple apple. Something that would be so easy to replace. The cost of the apple was 1 (whats the currency of the rp?) and he had to pay 250 for the fine. His father did, and he was upset. When Daniel turned 11, he wanted to be a Knight, he had wanted to be a Knight since he first held that bow in his hand. He had wanted to help protect the Capitol against the foes of the Chancellory. He had to wait though, till he was eligible to apply. The years slowly went by, and when he turned 18, he was ecstatic. He was an adult. A man of the city, and finally, hopefully, his dreams could come true. He could hopefully become a ranger finally.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): To become a part of the Order of Aradin, a bowman specifically. If he could not become that he would like to train at the academy.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): He knows how to climb things, and is the first one to do anything. That can be bad though too. He can hold a bow in his hands, and knows how to hold it properly thanks to his Father. His personality you ask? Well, he is very curious, and he is open-minded, he loves to hear other peoples opinions while expressing his own. He is also very kind. He would buy an apple for someone in need, while some may not. There are more people like him though, he is not the only one, thus not making him unique in doing so.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): He can not wield a sword well, as it is too heavy for him. A bow is light, a sword, steel, is not. He is loud on his feet, and you can hear him coming a mile away. Personality: He can be cruel sometimes, he has anger issues. If you anger him he may throw a fit and break something of great importance to you, so be careful. He also has a vivid fear of spiders. Not the small, friendly kinds. But the big kinds that you would find in your dream. They aren't real though, or are they?
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Nope
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl. I look at the men harassing the girl. I continue walking on, and go to find some guards that can deal with the situation. When I return I find they are gone, so I give the guards a description of what the men look like, and they return to their duties.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. I think about it for a moment. Then I think again, Bloodstone? The place where many bad things are? Well, most of these are myths, so I agree to his deal, curious as to what lies ahead of me. Good, or evil?
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. I have a kind heart, and walk down to the market to buy him some bread. My family is not wealthy, but this I can provide. Something so good, for someone so unhappy and unfortunate. I comeback with the bread, and give it to him, but not a word of thanks come out. Angered, I continue home
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. I tell him to back off, slowly getting more infuriated at this fellow who so rudely insulted her. He does something unexpected, he insults her again, so I throw a punch at him. It hits him square in the jaw, and he throws a punch that hits me in the head. I back off, turn around and tell my mother we should leave, so we do.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. I continue walking, I am not of the villainous type, and I would not take something from someone else. Not something so expensive looking. It may be close to her, something from someone who passed away possibly, or a gift from a close friend. I continue to walk on.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? No, other than it is very well made an original
Other notes: I would like to ask what the currency of the RP is? I might have missed it in the lore if it was there, and I apologize for doing so.
I leave the actual review of applications to my Whitelisters, I just hang around to answer questions Your app ought to be properly reviewed within 24 hours.
First off, sorry for the wait. I was away and was hoping that one of the other Whitelisters would tend to your app. Anyway, I'll just handle this. ((Also, I had already written a response earlier but accidentally deleted it all.. So, here we go again. ))
There are a few problems in the OOC portion of your application. Your powergaming definition is copied from wikipedia and is incorrect. We define what powergaming and metagaming are in the OP, please get your definition from there. Also, try and put things in this OOC portion of the app into your own words. This includes the lore questions.
Now, onto the IC portion of your app. There were many things wrong. Your bio was wayyy short. It was also written rather poorly. This is your first time RPing, so it's understandable. Just try and make things longer and add more to your character. Give him more life experiences, show us more about what he's like and why he is the way he is. The second problem is your character's main goal/motivation. "To become a part of the Order of Aradin, bowman specifically. If he cannot join, he'd like to get into the Academy." This is a problem, seeing as nowhere in your bio do you mention that your character had any interest in going to the Academy or magic in general. Change this, please. Add something like.. "If he cannot get into the Order, he'll try to join the local guard or a mercenary outfit." Something that actually makes sense for your character to pursue, given the skills he has. Next up, your character's strengths and weaknesses. He has none. It says specifically "Not knowing how to do something outside of your class is not a weakness." So your character not being able to wield a sword is NOT a weakness. He'll need something better, I'm afraid. A bum arm or leg. A blind eye. Perhaps he is just physically weak ((Which wouldn't make sense as in your description you describe him as "well-built," but hey, you can always change that.)). He needs something, there's lots of stuff you could do. The other thing wrong with them is you represent Daniel as a kind, good-hearted individual who is nice to everyone and loves hearing other's opinions.. But in his weaknesses you wrote the following.. "He can be cruel sometimes and has anger issues." This makes no sense, and will need fixing. You seem to have thrown this character together haphazardly. You need to think things through.. What is his story? What experiences has he had? What is he really like? Not just what he's like on the outside, but what he's like on the inside. What he thinks about when nobody is around. What are his dreams? His nightmares? What little quirks does he have? What is his relationship with his parents? When and where was he at his highest and lowest? You need to really think about his life so far, and then, continue it. You say he got into trouble a lot when he was little, going places he shouldn't have and stealing apples. What exactly made him want to be a knight, opposed to a thief? What knight did he see that made him think, "That's who I wanna be when I'm older." What kept him going to wanna become who he's becoming, and why?
*takes a deep breath* Anyway, your ICRs need brushing up aswell. Make them more extensive. Act as if you're actually RPing out the situation. Give those two armed men dialogue, give them actions, and do the same for your character. Treat it like an actual moment of roleplay on the server.
Seeing as this is your first time applying to an RP server, I'm trying to be pretty lenient. There are many great RPers in our community that can help you learn to RP, and I'm sure you'd enjoy your time here. But first, you have to fix up your app, friend.
Phew, anyway. Goodluck! If you need any help, you may message me here on the minecraft forums, incase you have a question about something I didn't explain clearly enough.
IGN: XzXThanatosXzX
Real-Life Age:16
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): XzXThanatosXzX (same name as IGN)
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing an action upon another character
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Knowing something that your character shouldn't, ie someone you "know" died in chat, but you're underground mining and suddenly come out for revenge.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Taking a persona within the game, enhancing the lore
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: No one
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: When they agree to it
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: When using ( )
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yes
Who is allowed to use magic?: Mages and Priests
Who are the Fallen?: A race that makes numerous allusions to "The Father"
When and how did our current government come to be?: 169 AR by defeating the previous empire, the Linyera Monarchy
Who are the Order of Aradin?: A group of people dedicated to defending the Chancellor which has fallen into disrepair.
What are the Net and Essence? The Net is a magical force that saves people from falling into nonexistence, and sometimes their items as well. Essence is something that is gained from hunting beasts that can be put into Emeralds and sold which prevents the loss of items when falling into the Net.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: I've popped on a few servers, but nothing too serious
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: I don't remember any names, just that I never stayed long because something else caught my eyes.
Character Information
Name: Than Atos
Age:23
Class: Ranger
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Citizen of the Chancellory
Physical description: Dark hair, red eyes, with a black cloak and dark pants.
Screen capture of your skin: Go to link http://www.flickr.co.../in/photostream
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.):
Than was born to family on the outskirts of the Chancellory’s territory. Sent as a settlement group, Than’s early life was dedicated to clearing out more room for the Chancellory to expand. However, as the Chancellory’s power declined, supplies eventually stopped coming and Than was expected to gather resources from his island in order to survive. It was then that he learned how to run across the trees, and aim his bow steadily. His family survived for several years on their resources, but it did not last. Pirates came, and burnt the settlement down to the ground. Than’s father, mother, sister, and many others died in the attack and when the pirates left, only Than. He made a small shelter and, unable to find any other survivors, decided to return to the Chancellory to tell them of the outpost’s destruction. He spent several months building a serviceable airship, and by the time Than turned 17, the ship was finally finished.
He started the month-long voyage soon after the boat was completed, after collecting enough resources to successfully complete the trip. Throughout his childhood, he had taken several excursions to the nearest islands, but even those were weeks away. When he finally arrived at the closest one, he was unused to the hectic environment of the city. Though the empire had not officially recognized them as a city, the trade passing through from the interior of the empire to the exterior of the outposts had turned it into a major port. Stumbling through the city, Than was finally able to locate a man who gave him directions to the capital. A shipping captain, the man told him all of the supply chains that would help restock him for the long, treacherous journey back to the heart of the empire.
After leaving the city, Than followed the man’s directions which lead him well, bringing him to several friendly islands which made repairs and upgrades to his ship, as well as giving him supplies and information about the next leg of the trip. It took half a year, but the Capital was finally in sight. Than, by now, was a veteran flyer, able to navigate through storm and hail, fight off pirates by bow, and able to flee from the wild animals in the jungles he rested at.
As he docked at the port, other people looked at his ship curiously. Than walked off the ship, observed on all sides by curious onlookers. He came up to the Throne, walking past the large line in front of him to speak to the Chancellor. When he got to the front of the line, he loudly announced “Outpost 18 has fallen,” disrupting the Chancellor’s conversation with the man in front of him. The Chancellor looked up for a moment, then back down and continued his conversation. Than was furious. He stomped over, shoved the man aside, and stared angrily at the Chancellor. “Did you hear me?” Than asked loudly. The Chancellor replied, “Yes, now get out of my sight. We abandoned the Outposts years ago.” Than shouted, “So what about the citizens living there?” The Chancellor said, “To hell with them, they don’t matter, they can die there.”
Than couldn’t believe it. The Chancellor didn’t care what happened to the outpost. He pulled back his fist, and shot it forwards to punch the Chancellor. His fist was stopped by an iron shield which crossed in front of the Chancellor by his guards. Than was tackled by the rest of the Order or Aradin. He was held to the floor while the Chancellor’s laugh grew, eventually filling the hall with demonic echoes.
-Several Year Later-
Than stepped into the open air. It was nice finally being free. Now he could finally set the plan he made in prison into motion. First he needed some followers…
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): Create an empire built on honor to rival the Chancellory and destroy it.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Expert archer and parkourist, an expert escapist (able to lose trackers quickly), and has a tendency to be too involved with his thoughts to help anyone else.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.):
Honor code binds him to helping other people, but at the same time is sometimes ignorant of those in need of help which causes people to question his
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): No.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation. Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
Than is busy thinking about his life as he strolls past the alleyway. He stops when he hears a muffled scream coming from the narrow corridor. He turns, and upon seeing the men attacking the girl charges in, pulling his sword from its sheath.
“Just stay quiet, missy, and we won’t have to hurt you too much,” said the bandit. He reached into the front of her blouse as she struggled to get away. Suddenly, the hand was ripped away and the man was sent flying down the alley. In front of her is a new man with dark black hair, wearing a darker cloak and leaning into where the raider had just been. In his hand is a sword, which he swings at the other surprised robber. He ducks just in time to avoid the blade and pulls out his own sword, parrying the next strike and returning with a jab. Than sidestepped the jab and pulled the bandit’s arm, smashing his armored head into the wall with terrific force.
He slides to the ground as the first raider props himself against the wall several feet away, shaking his head. Than looks at the second raider’s much bulkier stature and grabs the girl’s arm, gently but firmly pulling her away from the alley. The pair sprints through the streets until Than is sure that no one is following. They duck into another alley where Than sets the girl gently down, leaning her against the wall of the alley. She stares at the opposite wall in shock of what just happened. Than looks at her torn shirt and sets some money on the floor next to her.
“Do you know the way home?” asks Than. The girl nods, tears beginning to form in her eyes. Than turns around and begins to leave the alley. A weak voice says, “Thank you.” Than nods and leaves.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
“What could you need from Bloodstone?” Than asks the man. With a desperate look in his eye, he says, “I need some money for a ransom. Bandits have my wife. They’re going to kill her unless I give them what they want.”
Than replied, “I won’t go to Bloodstone, but I will help you. How much do you need?”
“$1000.”
Than checked in his pocket. He had just received his pay for the week, and was going to get a better home. This was a more noble use. He pulled out his money and counted out $1000. He handed the money to the man.
With a relieved look on his face, the man took the money saying, “Aneria bless you, thank you so much.”
Than placed the few remaining bills in his pocket and nodded at the man as he continued down the road.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
“Spare some change?” the old man said.
Than pulled the remnants of his paycheck and split them, giving the man enough for a month of meals.
“Aneria bless you, sir,” said the man. Than nodded and continued walking. There was always time to do a good deed.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
“It’s not worth it, it’s not worth it, it’s not worth it,” Than thought as the drunk approached.
The drunkard continued insulting his family, “Yer mother sure knows *hic* how to’ please a man eh? Her and I *hic* sure got to some fun last night *hic*. Or maybe it was yer sister *hic*. She was…” The man flew across the room, hitting the wall. He slid down it as Than stood by his chair, shaking with anger. Everything in the bar had stopped and all the people were looking at him.
He threw down some money, and quickly sped out the door, ignoring the whispers that erupted behind him. He stepped out into the rain which hid the tears beginning to slide his face.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
“That is a beautiful necklace.” Than said. The young woman blushed and smiled. Than continued, “Where did you buy it? I would like to purchase it for my mother. The woman replied, “I bought it at the store over there,” indicating a small shop several yards away.
Than thanked the woman and walked into the store. He found the store clerk who found the type of necklace and sold it to Than.
*That Night*
“Happy Birthday Mum. I got you this great necklace at the store. It cost me a pretty penny, but it was worth it for you.” Than stroked the photo sitting on the box. He opened the drawer and put the necklace inside.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?
I don’t have any questions, but perhaps add a rebel group to the lore.
Other notes: After reviewing some of the other apps that got accepted/rejected, I've decided to more carefully edit my app. By all means, read this one and, if it passes, accept it and that will be that. But if you don't accept it, simply do a normal rejection (quote and add rejected) and I shall post the new app.
IGN:catlover12345
Real-Life Age: 13
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot):no skype
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: yes, yes, and yes
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: being over-powered and doing stuff that is to OP Ex: "I slice off your head in one blow"
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: using OOC info in IC Ex: hearing about a event in ooc chat then immediately having you char know about even though there was no way he could know about it
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: playing as a char as if it was real life
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: staff/no one
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: CvC
When are you allowed to speak out of character?:When not in combat ( I really don't know :/ )
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: yesh
Who is allowed to use magic?: mages
Who are the Fallen?: People that have been secluded from the other nations and prefer peace over war
When and how did our current government come to be?: In 169 A.R the chancellery spanned all across the world (my best knowledge)
Who are the Order of Aradin?: in 170 A.R the Order of Aradin was created to protect the chancellery from attacks
What are the Net and Essence? The net is something that when you fall out of the world lets you respawn at the nearest safe spot, but you lose your stuff. The Essence if the stuff you get for killing monsters, smelting and mining (its XP) and is used by mages
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: TO many servers to count
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: lets see about 10. 8 was because the server shut down and the other two just has 0 people for 21 hours a day
Character Information
Name: Joule
Age: 23
Class:Labaror
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: CHancellory
Physical description: (quick note: I can not change my skin because when I try the comp crashes) His body can not be seen due to the cloak that conceals his entire body. He has red eyes, which end up making people not trust at all not matter what he does.
Screen capture of your skin:
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Joule was a ordinary Joe in the Chancollery and worked for a large company. He was a laborer, so he was put to work digging out plots of land, help in building construction, and helped build airships and what not. One night while he was working, he noticed a glow in the night sky. He had no idea what it was, so, out of curiosity, he went outside of his crumbling shack and went towards the direction of the glow. After walking what he guessed was ten miles he finally reached the glow, which had turned different colors and heights as he was heading towards it. When what was making the glow finally came into view, he saw a mage practicing magic. He was doing all sorts of spells. He was obviously showing off, making flame birds and doing backflips with the wind, even making obsidian by combining water and lava. Joule was absolutely amazed by the mage's performance. He wanted to take a closer look but he was afraid that he would fall and roll down the hill or something like that, giving away his position. So he just stood there, watching. After maybe a hour or so the mage finally stopped practicing and traveled in the opposite direction of Joule. Joule went home as well, memorized by the performance. When he finally got home it was becoming dawn and he was very tired. He went to bed and dreams that he was a mage, doing all sorts of neat tricks and spells. He imagined he was making a obsidian eagle then blasting it apart. His dreamed was interrupted by a loud bang. It was his little helper, who always comes in the morning to wake him up so he wont be late for his job. He had no idea who his little helper was, all he knew was that he helped wake up in the morning, or she. He went to work and was given the task to help clear a site for construction. All he could think about was the mage he saw last night and how that he would love to do that sort of stuff. That night, after arguing with himself for about an hour, he finally decided he to, would become a mage and maybe finally quit his awful job as a laborer. He had no idea what it would take to become a mage, but he knew it wasn't going to be easy, but he didn't care. He was going to become a master mage, maybe even become a arch mage. He promised himself he won't let anything come in the way from learning the art of magic.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): He want's to become a master mage. Motivation: a mage practicing in the middle of the night.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Physical: He is very fast. Mental: He is highly intelligent and always determined to reach goals
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): Physical: kinda weak. Mental: none
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.):none
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
I study the situation, and decided that if he confronted the group of armed men he would no doubt lose. He walks along ahead trying to forget about the entire situation.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded.
"Bloodstone!? Are you mad very little people go there and return alive and even less return un-injured. Even if you have to best equipment and skills you still have a very low chance of surviving that place!" I yell.He looks around, then turns back to me. "well, say I have a couple thousand gold pieces. Would you go then?" He offers. "absolutely not! My life is much more important that even a billion gold pieces!" I yell. And with that, I march away.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. I sigh, then give him 10 gold pieces. "it's not much, but it should get you a decent meal" I say. "Thank you, sir." He says with a weak voice then, gets up and goes to the butcher shop. I smile felling very good for myself then walk away with a very good mood.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. Ignore him, he his probably drunk. I walk away. "hey!" He says in a slurred voice. "to afraid for a fight, or are you a chicken like your mom!" I continue to ignore him. He continues yelling a bunch of things at me, and I really start to get annoyed, but I continue to ignore him. After a while a guard comes and takes him away from the tavern. I sigh with relief and order a drink.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. I look at it then stop the women. "excuse me, were can I buy a necklace like that?" She looks at her necklace then at me. "Oh, this? I got it from a jewelry shop not far from here. Its about 3 blocks to the south." I thank her, then look at the sun to see which way south is. then head to the jewerly shop
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?
Other notes: I tend to powergame without even realizing it.
lmfaodeeman/XzXThanatosXzX- There were many things wrong with your app. Let's both go over them.
- "Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner." This is said specifically in the app. Your character really only seems to have one ambition - to get revenge on the Chancellery for screwing over Than and his family. Now seems a good time to move to the next problem.
- There is no empire. We also don't know if the government will be an oppressive one as of yet, seeing as the server hasn't opened. There also is no Outpost 18. Your character may be from one of four (possibly 5) locations: The Capitol, The Medori Island (He'll have to be a Medori/Fallen in order to be from there), the town of Brightwater - Controlled by the Church, or the small town - for characters who don't wish to be from anywhere specific (The fifth town would be the Mining Outpost on a nearby island, though I can't recall if players can't start from there or not.. Though I believe they can - Don't quote me on it).
- Characters may not start out with knowledge on how to pilot airships. They must be taught how to pilot either by the Admiral or by a different tutor possibly in the future.
- Your character is WAYYYY Overpowered. Your strenghts: "Expert archer and parkourist, an expert escapist (able to lose trackers quickly), and has a tendency to be too involved with his thoughts to help anyone else." He's an expert archer, an expert parkourist, an expert escapist, and day dreams a lot. Now.. Let's take a look at your weaknesses, "Honor code binds him to helping other people, but at the same time is sometimes ignorant of those in need of help which causes people to question his" First off.. This sentence doesn't even make any sense. But more importantly, this is NOT a weakness - Atleast not a good one, anyway. Give your character some real weaknesses. Make him fast but not the strongest, or really strong but not the fastest. Give him a bum arm or leg which stunts his combat. Perhaps his time in jail stunted his growth and caused him to be out of shape (Which probably would happen, seeing as your bio your character is fresh out of jail).
- Now, I realize I'm telling you to rip and add a lot of things out and into your bio, which I am, but allow me to tell you something.. Once you're IC and on the server, if you wanna get a following and try and overthrow the government, you can do that. Sure, it'd be hard but hey, you technically CAN do that. You wanna set up an outpost on a random wilderness island and call him home to yourself and a group of settlers? You can do that. You wanna throw a punch at the current Chancellor, hell, YOU CAN DO THAT (Though.. It wouldn't end very well.)! But first.. You need to have a balanced, fair character - Preferably with a less cliche and more detailed backstory.
(Edit: Also, try to add more detail to your ICRs and make them a bit more realistic. What I mean by that is.. Would a guy recently released from prison REALLY be carrying around 1000 bucks on him? And where would he get this 'paycheck' from? On a brighter note, I did like your Necklace ICR.)
Please take these notes and use them to edit the next app you post. Thanks for your cooperation. Good luck!
Rejected:
catlover12345- I'm sorry, but you've been rejected. Please do not apply again or message staff members about your application. Anyway, here are the main reasons you were rejected.
- Poor spelling and grammar.
- Pretty bad backstory..
- Poor ICRs.
- Many things were wrong in the OOC portion of your app.
Sorry, not going into a whole lot of detail seeing as it's really late where I am.. Thanks for taking the time to try and apply and checking us out.
This actually brings up an interesting point about the islands. Many of them aren't that large. In fact, most of them are only a few chunks across. Obviously, then island the Capital rests on is one of the bigger ones, but it wouldn't be possible to walk ten miles out from the city, especially since the Slums (Where I'm assuming your char would have lived (Crumbling shack)) are pretty much a few meters away from the edge of the island. The more you know.
You're the last one that should be judging any deferred or rejected apps, Dere. Just saying.
Anyway, no one ought to be shy or self conscious about posting an application. As long as you fill out the entire thing, read the directions and all information in the OP, try your best, and do so in a polite manner, you'll receive no grief from myself or the rest of the WL team.
Over the past two or three days and after reading the lore and applications of the server and players I must say that my interest was 'piqued'. I had discovered this server through an old friend that I unfortuanetely haven't been able to contact for quite some time. Although I knew I wouldn't really be able to play on the server even if I was accepted (Do to the fact that my compter runs on Windows 2000 and I have yet to get a new one) I decided to put myself to the challange and began filling out your application. Needless to say the application went smoothly as I looked up your lore and found if very original and enjoying to read. Unfortunately, I may have gotten a bit carried away with my character's bio and before I knew it I was writing a whole short story about this character and how he goes on to become part of this world ain a strange way. In total my app is 12 pages long (MS Word standards) and while I would very like to get your opinion on my writing skills and app filling I didn't wantto clog up the forums page just for a player who woundnt be able to play for some time.
Please know that I have a deep love for RP and I have enjoyed my time on every server I've been on. Know also, that I am offering to privately message my app (More of a short story, don't want to clog the forums) to any OP or Mod that would be willing to read it. This is a completely optional thing and I wont be hurt if people dont message me back. I simply want a little critic on my work. I look forward to any reply.~Sincearly, DeadlyInsanaty
I'd be happy to read over your app, and if you'd like, you can come onto our enjin forum at http://aneria.enjin.com/home and post your character's bio/short story in our campfire section, where our players post their own stories and works (This community has a lot of writers in it that would be happy to critique your work, including myself). You can also stay updated on news about the server, read some of the other lore we have that isn't posted in the OP, and just hang out. While I cannot technically accept you when you don't have an MC account, I may be able to put you on a sort of wait list. You can just message me on our enjin or on the MC forums here once you've updated your computer and obtained a MC account, and I'll post your app's verdict (most likely accepted, right? ) for all to see and you'll be given access to the server.
Anyways, I'll keep brief and short, some of you might remember me from the RP server before this months ago. I recently stumbled upon you guys again, and I remember hearing about this in development beforehand. At the time, I wanted a break from Minecraft RPing due to me trying to *adapt* into that type of RPing. Being a forum RPer for several years now, it's kind of hard at times to switch over even with my countless amounts of servers that I've played with this concept.
So, I'll try my shot again, might take me awhile to get myself familiar, but except a CS...sometime :).
Long time no see. If you ever feel like dropping by and saying hey to everyone: http://aneria.enjin.com/
Sounds great!
Keep those apps coming people!
IGN: dgallant
Real-Life Age: 14
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Yes I do, I made it when I was 11 and the username is MegaZOMGkitteh
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: I agree to the terms and conditions
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Powergaming is a style of interacting with games or roleplays with the aim of maximising progress towards specific goals to the exclusion of other considerations such as: storytelling, atmosphere and camaraderie.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Metagaming is a term usually used to define any strategy, action or method used in a game which transcends a prescribed rule set. An example of metagaming would be this (all characters in the following are completely fictional, and not associated with the server in any way):
Leader of the Medori: We shall attack the Capitol tonight!
Someone in OOC: The Medori are going to attack the Capitol tonight! CAN BE PRIVATE MESSAGED ALSO.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Roleplaying means to act or "take on" the role of a fictional character, or a historical figure in a play, game, or movie. It also means (from the Oxford Dictionary) "the changing of one's behaviour to fulfill a social role"
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: No one. Not even the admins as it gives an unfair and distinct advantage over other players.
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: YOU are only allowed to cause the death of another player, if the other player you are fighting decides to make a fatal mistake while you are attacking. They cannot however, stated in rule 3. Dodge tons of swordstrikes, make an amazing escape, or come back from the dead through Necromancy. (Just a question, if you were an ASSASSIN hired to assassinate someone, could you like, attempt to push rocks or boulders down onto them while giving them the chance to dodge it?)
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: You can speak out of character when using the OOC chat, or by PMing people. You can also do this by putting parentheses around a sentence, like so. (So how is everyone tonight) Hello John!
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yes I have read the primary server lore.
Who is allowed to use magic?: Mages, and Priests. Priests can only use healing, buff, and debuff spells though, while Mages have a wide variety of spells to chose from.
Who are the Fallen?: The Fallen (also known as the Medori) are Nomads. They generally stay away from other civilizations, liking the secluded side of life instead of the loud, noisy one. They also prefer peace over violence when solving issues.
When and how did our current government come to be?: The Chancellory came to power in the year 169 A.R. after the defeat of the old Linyera Monarchy in 167 A.R. on the Planes of Raun.
Who are the Order of Aradin?: The Order of Aradin are the knights who are sworn to protect the Capitol at the cost of their lives. They reside in the Knight's Hall.
What are the Net and Essence? The Net is essentially a invisible barrier that protects you from death. When you fall off of one of the many islands. You get teleported back to the nearest island without your equipment or gear. However, for the cost of Essence (XP) you can reclaim your gear from the Net. Essence is the XP of the Roleplay, which you can use for many things, such as enchanting and reclaiming gear from the net.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: This is my first RP, and I hope I get accepted into it very much. It has been something I have wanted to try out for 1 month now!
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: I haven't.
Character Information
Name: Daniel Gallant
Age: 18
Class: Ranger
Citizen of the Chancellory or a member of the Medori?: Citizen of the Chancellory
Physical description: 6' 4", Well Built, Blue Eyes, Blonde Hair, Sturdy, Grimy (Dirty) looking face, scar on his knee.
Screen capture of your skin: LINK http://www.planetmin...de-boy-1793861/
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Daniel was born in the Capitol. He was a very curious young boy. He got into lots of trouble. He climbed things he shouldn't have, and even as a baby, was very energetic. When he turned 5 years old, he fell and scraped his knee. Leaving a scar he would never forget. Whenever he saw it, he remembered vividly what happened. When he turned 7, his Father let him shoot his first bow, he had a true shot. Of course, it needed practice, but he was still weak, and hadn't matured yet for his age. But he hit the target, sure it was out of the circle, but it hit it.
When he turned 10, he got into trouble with the guards of the city. He stole an apple. A simple apple. Something that would be so easy to replace. The cost of the apple was 1 (whats the currency of the rp?) and he had to pay 250 for the fine. His father did, and he was upset. When Daniel turned 11, he wanted to be a Knight, he had wanted to be a Knight since he first held that bow in his hand. He had wanted to help protect the Capitol against the foes of the Chancellory. He had to wait though, till he was eligible to apply. The years slowly went by, and when he turned 18, he was ecstatic. He was an adult. A man of the city, and finally, hopefully, his dreams could come true. He could hopefully become a ranger finally.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): To become a part of the Order of Aradin, a bowman specifically. If he could not become that he would like to train at the academy.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): He knows how to climb things, and is the first one to do anything. That can be bad though too. He can hold a bow in his hands, and knows how to hold it properly thanks to his Father. His personality you ask? Well, he is very curious, and he is open-minded, he loves to hear other peoples opinions while expressing his own. He is also very kind. He would buy an apple for someone in need, while some may not. There are more people like him though, he is not the only one, thus not making him unique in doing so.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality. Not knowing how to do something that is outside of your class is not a weakness. IE not knowing how to use bows and magic, if you are a swordsman.): He can not wield a sword well, as it is too heavy for him. A bow is light, a sword, steel, is not. He is loud on his feet, and you can hear him coming a mile away. Personality: He can be cruel sometimes, he has anger issues. If you anger him he may throw a fit and break something of great importance to you, so be careful. He also has a vivid fear of spiders. Not the small, friendly kinds. But the big kinds that you would find in your dream. They aren't real though, or are they?
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Nope
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Capitol, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl. I look at the men harassing the girl. I continue walking on, and go to find some guards that can deal with the situation. When I return I find they are gone, so I give the guards a description of what the men look like, and they return to their duties.
A man approaches you with a proposition - Go to Bloodstone and retrieve something for him, and you will be well rewarded. I think about it for a moment. Then I think again, Bloodstone? The place where many bad things are? Well, most of these are myths, so I agree to his deal, curious as to what lies ahead of me. Good, or evil?
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food. I have a kind heart, and walk down to the market to buy him some bread. My family is not wealthy, but this I can provide. Something so good, for someone so unhappy and unfortunate. I comeback with the bread, and give it to him, but not a word of thanks come out. Angered, I continue home
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. I tell him to back off, slowly getting more infuriated at this fellow who so rudely insulted her. He does something unexpected, he insults her again, so I throw a punch at him. It hits him square in the jaw, and he throws a punch that hits me in the head. I back off, turn around and tell my mother we should leave, so we do.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears. I continue walking, I am not of the villainous type, and I would not take something from someone else. Not something so expensive looking. It may be close to her, something from someone who passed away possibly, or a gift from a close friend. I continue to walk on.
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore? No, other than it is very well made an original
Other notes: I would like to ask what the currency of the RP is? I might have missed it in the lore if it was there, and I apologize for doing so.
That'd be a lore-question We'll be using Coins and Bars - Gold nuggets and ingots - As our primary currency. I really ought to add that to the OP!
I leave the actual review of applications to my Whitelisters, I just hang around to answer questions Your app ought to be properly reviewed within 24 hours.
A whitelister should be reviewing your application shortly.
dgallant003-
First off, sorry for the wait. I was away and was hoping that one of the other Whitelisters would tend to your app. Anyway, I'll just handle this. ((Also, I had already written a response earlier but accidentally deleted it all.. So, here we go again. ))
There are a few problems in the OOC portion of your application. Your powergaming definition is copied from wikipedia and is incorrect. We define what powergaming and metagaming are in the OP, please get your definition from there. Also, try and put things in this OOC portion of the app into your own words. This includes the lore questions.
Now, onto the IC portion of your app. There were many things wrong. Your bio was wayyy short. It was also written rather poorly. This is your first time RPing, so it's understandable. Just try and make things longer and add more to your character. Give him more life experiences, show us more about what he's like and why he is the way he is. The second problem is your character's main goal/motivation. "To become a part of the Order of Aradin, bowman specifically. If he cannot join, he'd like to get into the Academy." This is a problem, seeing as nowhere in your bio do you mention that your character had any interest in going to the Academy or magic in general. Change this, please. Add something like.. "If he cannot get into the Order, he'll try to join the local guard or a mercenary outfit." Something that actually makes sense for your character to pursue, given the skills he has. Next up, your character's strengths and weaknesses. He has none. It says specifically "Not knowing how to do something outside of your class is not a weakness." So your character not being able to wield a sword is NOT a weakness. He'll need something better, I'm afraid. A bum arm or leg. A blind eye. Perhaps he is just physically weak ((Which wouldn't make sense as in your description you describe him as "well-built," but hey, you can always change that.)). He needs something, there's lots of stuff you could do. The other thing wrong with them is you represent Daniel as a kind, good-hearted individual who is nice to everyone and loves hearing other's opinions.. But in his weaknesses you wrote the following.. "He can be cruel sometimes and has anger issues." This makes no sense, and will need fixing. You seem to have thrown this character together haphazardly. You need to think things through.. What is his story? What experiences has he had? What is he really like? Not just what he's like on the outside, but what he's like on the inside. What he thinks about when nobody is around. What are his dreams? His nightmares? What little quirks does he have? What is his relationship with his parents? When and where was he at his highest and lowest? You need to really think about his life so far, and then, continue it. You say he got into trouble a lot when he was little, going places he shouldn't have and stealing apples. What exactly made him want to be a knight, opposed to a thief? What knight did he see that made him think, "That's who I wanna be when I'm older." What kept him going to wanna become who he's becoming, and why?
*takes a deep breath* Anyway, your ICRs need brushing up aswell. Make them more extensive. Act as if you're actually RPing out the situation. Give those two armed men dialogue, give them actions, and do the same for your character. Treat it like an actual moment of roleplay on the server.
Seeing as this is your first time applying to an RP server, I'm trying to be pretty lenient. There are many great RPers in our community that can help you learn to RP, and I'm sure you'd enjoy your time here. But first, you have to fix up your app, friend.
Phew, anyway. Goodluck! If you need any help, you may message me here on the minecraft forums, incase you have a question about something I didn't explain clearly enough.