Hello people, there is a 99% chance that you have never heared of me, so if you haven't then I would like it if you gave me a try. I have written fanfics before but never one
of minecraft so if you don't like it then tell me what I should change. I am going to
try to get out a chapter every week but if someone actually likes this then I will
Shorten the time it takes me to get it out. Before the prologue I will write a short
paragraph on the setting and character names.
Setting and Character Names:
Setting:
On top of the burj dubay in a sand storm.
Character Names:
Colby Canokin
Darren Sunshine
Angel ?
(When I introuce more characters into the story I will write them here)
Prologue:
"Come on Colby I need you to do this for the organization!"
"I know, but why me?"
"Because you are the only other person in the group who is well enough to do it!"
"What's in it for me?"
At this Darren thought for a second and them he replied "You will get a quarter of the
profits."
"What profits are there for me to get?!"
"Well... I'll give you... my car."
Colby stopped arguing for a second and hen said "Your laptop also?"
Darren's mourh got very thin but he managed to come out with an answer "Oh... oh alright"
Then as Colby started walking away the thought hit him "Am I brave enough to jump off of the Burj Dubay?"
Chapter 1: The Jumping
"It's almost time to zero hour." Darren said looking over the edge of the building. How he tricked me into this I will never know... maybe it was because of the car and laptop he gave me... "Goggles on!" The jumping instructor yelled. I pulled my goggles on over my eyes and put my hat over them. "We'll be jumping in 3... 2... 1!!!!" The instructor shouted as I jumped over the edge. I looked up and saw that Darren hadn't jumped and was staring at me as white as a ghost. Boy that... I hit an air bump which hurdled me towards the building and made me bounce off of a window breaking it in the process. I decided it was time for me to pull my parachute cord. I reached behind my head and grabbed for it but nothing was there. I tried the other side but it wasn't there either. Then it crossed my mind of what was in it for Darren. He would have me killed so that he could collect the money that my mom put in my trust fund. After all Darren was my only living relative. I reached for my emergency parachute cord but when I pulled it it just snapped. Oh come on Darren couldn't you have thought of a better way to kill me? I wasn't scared anyways because I had some weird thing where when I would be scared my heart didn't beat fast so my brain didn't produce a chemical that makes me scared. SO I tried to grab onto the side of the building but it is mostly window panes and very smooth. When I looked down I saw I was very close to the ground... and then I closed my eyes. I heard the pavement crack, or was it my bones?
Chapter 2: How It All Got Started
I awoke to the sound of moaning and hollow screaming. All around me were black glassy rectangles with purple stuff flowing like water in the center. Through them I could see scenes of fighting, car racing, and almost every other thing you could imagine. The one in front of me though had nothing but trees, hills and lakes. I didn't know what they were so I started brainstorming. After what seemed hours I figured that they might be windows to other dimensions but why were they big enough for just one person exactly his size to fit through? So they might be a door instead of a window. I figured I would give one a try. I went through the one with trees and lakes and hills and stuff. As soon as I went through I felt like I was smashed against the concrete over and over and then I was spat out of this misery right into a lake going unconscious in the process, boy was I dead.
. . .
I woke up in a small dirt hut with a fireplace, a crafting table, a furnace and a small chest. I was lying on a bed under covers with no clothes on but my underwear. Over near tending the fireplace was a girl about my age with brown hair that reached half-way down her back. She glanced over towards me and smiled, then she said something in what sounded like Russian and by the puzzled look on my face she must of guessed that I had no idea what she was saying. She then said something again in Spanish which I knew well enough to say "No." Then she slapped her forehead and said "I'm sorry but I thought you were Russian or Spanish by the way you looked without cl..." Her sentence trailed off. My face turned red and so did hers. "So what's your name?" She asked after an awkwardly long silence. "Colby." I said very quietly. "Mine is Angel." She replied looking down at the crafting table and cutting strips of cloth. "So a... Where are my clothes?" I asked a little louder than before. She blushed again. She picked up some pants and threw them to me. "I found you on the beach with all your clothes gone except for your underwear." My ears turned red. "How old are you? I'm 15." she said quite quickly. "15." I replied.
Chapter 3: How I nearly got killed
The next day I felt well enough to get even if my lungs were filled with water. After I got up I started walking around the house and touching everything wondering where I was. I turned towards the door but before I could open it Angel half yelled "Don't go outside yet!" I was so startled that I fell head first through the door and knocked myself out. Later that day I woke up in bed yet again but this time I was alone. I got up and looked around to see if anyone was watching, then I opened the chest, grabbed a stone pickax, a stone sword and some flint and steel and sprinted out the door.
The place was beautiful but something seemed wrong. Whatever it was I hoped it wouldn't kill me. I don't know where I got the urge and why I did it but I silently lit the wall of the house of fire. I didn't know it yet but Angel had left me to die in that house.
I walked for hours and hours until I came upon a tree good enough to break and make into boards. As I was working on building a crafting bench I heard an unnatural noise. I looked over my shoulder and saw a flash of color and then I felt a hand go over my mouth. Whatever it was it released me very quickly and and whispered a few words into my ear. The words sounded like "Don't look back or I'll kill you." I just did nothing for a few minutes and then I heard it say "Give me your clothes and I won't hurt you." I slowly took my clothes off, all except my underwear and threw it behind me. "All of 'em!" It said yet again. I gave them my underwear and looked back to see a streak of skin and it was gone.
So here I was naked at sunset. Really? Why the f*** did this guy just come and rob my clothes and not my pickax or sword? I don't know why but I just went with my instincts and sprinted off the way the whoever he was as fast as I could. By about midnight I reached what seemed to be a stone wall. There were slits at the top that I guessed were for guns or something that was not melee. I didn't know what to do and I was awfully tired so I just dug a a simple 1 x 2 hole, covered my self with dirt, and fell asleep.
The next day, I guessed about 7 o'clock, I dug myself out and looked at my surroundings. I seemed to be next to a wall about a hundred feet high with turret like things on top. I started pondering how I would get inside the wall for some unknown reason when I heard a shout. "Look! Down there! A Nudilairy!" I saw arrows emerge from the slits and at once I knew I would die. As I saw the arrows flying towards me I realized something. They must not take kindly to nudes. When the arrows hit I felt pains in my stomach, my legs, my arms, and especially my groin. Oh why am I always the one to have stuff happen to me?
As I fell on my face I felt the arrows stab in deeper and deeper and a few broke the skin on my back. I passed out. What else could I do? Run around in circles screaming "YAY!!!"
Chapter 4: How I lived
I woke up in an underground cave of some sort. To this day I still have no idea how I got there. There were bandages all over me, even on my face! I had the slight suspicion that I looked somewhat like a mummy. When I tried to get up I felt pain all over. Why am I the one who always has horrible stuff happen to me!? I eventually started walking with very much pain at that. After a while I came across a door. I opened it and walked into a hall with no doors at all except at the very end. When I finally got there I found a beaker full of some kind of liquid. It said "Healing Potion." Wow a healing potion just when I need one! It could of been poison for all I knew but I drank it anyways. I at once felt stronger and all the pain in my body went away. The first thought that crossed my mind? "I need to get out of here!" I started hitting the stone which surrounded the room with my hands forming a staircase. After hours and hours of hard hitting and knuckle bleeding I finally got to the surface. I came up just outside the same wall where I got shot to death with arrows.
This time I looked like a mummy and figured I should try to get in there again since I wasn't a Nudil er what ever they called me. I actually very simply punched through the really thick wall but I regretted that when I got inside!
Chapter 5: The King
In front of me stood oh maybe twenty soldiers armed with spears, knives and bows. Nice welcoming party isn't it? They took me to a place inside of a big castle and the place was undoubtedly a dungeon. But not a dungeon like the kind where you get locked up no it was a dungeon with a strange blue cage in the center. But what was it? And at that time I knew exactly what it was. A thing to make skeletons appear. But these skeletons had bows and that were alive. Moving around the room like they hadn't noticed me yet. And with that I flung my self out and started hitting the skeleton as hard as I could. He eventually died but where his pile of bones lay was bow with a purplish tint to it. I picked it up and grabbed some arrows I found on the ground. I pulled the quiver out of the pile of bones and waited for the guards. The next day a guard came to give me my lunch. As soon as he walked into the room I got my bow ready. He walked towards me with a bowl of soup or some s*** and sat it down on the floor. He turned his back to me which was a stupid move. But instead of shooting him I grabbed a arrow and stabbed him in the back. Oh no I had killed someone... I pulled the arrow out and switched his clothes with mine. I walked out with my quiver, bow and knife I pulled off his belt. After a while I found my way out of the dungeon and mad my way up to the ground floor. When my head emerged I was actually in the castle unlike before when they threw me down in a cellar just outside. I looked around at the perfect red carpet and gold walls. Then I heard a voice. "Guard some here." I looked over and I saw a guy oh maybe thirty years old with a golden crown on. I walked over thinking about how well my disguise had worked. "What took you so long?" The king asked. "Oh, uh I had a little trouble" I answered. "Yes a little trouble." He said dreamily. "Well, be about your duties then." He said again. I knew at once the he would eventually give me trouble so I spun around and shot as quick as that. But what I didn't know was that he was... Immortal.
Chapter 6: The Re-Kill
I ran out of the castle as fast as I could. I had no idea where I was going because it only took the guards a few minutes to drag me to the cellar. I started sprinting towards what I thought was the gate but turns out it was actually a prop for a play that the city was holding. I ran right into it and into the wall on the other side. Boy did that hurt. I got up after a few minutes and started running towards the real gate. I saw the guards who had brought me to the king and apparently they also saw me because as soon as I got outside the gate they were chasing me. They were right behind me but instead of running faster I stopped, pulled an arrow out of my quiver, turned around and let one guard run into the arrow. I pulled out of his stomach and put it in my bow. I pulled back my arm and shot them one by one until they were all on the ground. I ran over to them and pulled the arrows out of there dead bodies. But when I looked back towards the city gate I saw there whole army advancing. I knew that they must have figured out that I killed the king and sprinted the other direction.
After what seemed hours of running I stopped to rest. I noticed a small door leading into a small dirt shack. I went over to it and opened the door. In front of me was a very long staircase that turned left about six yards down. I closed the door and slowly walked down the staircase with my bow ready. I peaked around the corner and I saw a small room with two furnaces, a crafting table and a chest. I walked in a little farther and saw a short man in wizard clothes. "Hello young traveler." He said not even turning around to look at me. "How did you know I was here?" I asked. "Oh when one is as old as me they begin to examine their senses a little better since one is usually gone bad." he replied. At this I had nothing to say so I just walked slowly towards him. He turned around pointing a staff at me and shouted the words "Et formam!"
Chapter 7: The Resistance
My bow flew out of my hand along with my quiver off my back. The man still stood with his staff pointed at me and mouth ready to curse my very existence, why? I don't know. After a few minutes of staring I charged him but it had no affect.
Uh... I just want to know if anyone is actually reading this before I go on- 1/12/2014
Yay I am finally going to stared writing again! Problem is its 2:43 am where I am and I am trying to decide
if I should write now or tomorrow (er later today lol) Well if you actually care about this book than comment! So I know if anyone is actually reading this.
Ok I have decided to do it later today due to my Kindle Fire™ acting up and preventing me from scrolling all the way to the bottom of the story in the editor. Sorry but chances are you aren't even reading this in real time. Ok well getting some sleep now!
Uhhh hey I have a question to ask y'all. Are you reading this? Cause if I just said y'all to one person that
would really annoy me. So if you could give me 10 seconds of your time and leave a comment I would appreciate it! Thanks!
I haven'y read this, but looking at it it seems like it will be good. I want to make a suggestion. You should add more colors, bigger fonts and spoilers. It would make it look much nicer, and add some good style to your writing. I hope you continue to write more, even though I haven't read it yet(lol)! I will edit this post once I have read it with my rating.
Thank you for making a story! We need people like you in our Minecraft community!
of minecraft so if you don't like it then tell me what I should change. I am going to
try to get out a chapter every week but if someone actually likes this then I will
Shorten the time it takes me to get it out. Before the prologue I will write a short
paragraph on the setting and character names.
Setting and Character Names:
Setting:
On top of the burj dubay in a sand storm.
Character Names:
Colby Canokin
Darren Sunshine
Angel ?
(When I introuce more characters into the story I will write them here)
Prologue:
"Come on Colby I need you to do this for the organization!"
"I know, but why me?"
"Because you are the only other person in the group who is well enough to do it!"
"What's in it for me?"
At this Darren thought for a second and them he replied "You will get a quarter of the
profits."
"What profits are there for me to get?!"
"Well... I'll give you... my car."
Colby stopped arguing for a second and hen said "Your laptop also?"
Darren's mourh got very thin but he managed to come out with an answer "Oh... oh alright"
Then as Colby started walking away the thought hit him "Am I brave enough to jump off of the Burj Dubay?"
Chapter 1: The Jumping
"It's almost time to zero hour." Darren said looking over the edge of the building. How he tricked me into this I will never know... maybe it was because of the car and laptop he gave me... "Goggles on!" The jumping instructor yelled. I pulled my goggles on over my eyes and put my hat over them. "We'll be jumping in 3... 2... 1!!!!" The instructor shouted as I jumped over the edge. I looked up and saw that Darren hadn't jumped and was staring at me as white as a ghost. Boy that... I hit an air bump which hurdled me towards the building and made me bounce off of a window breaking it in the process. I decided it was time for me to pull my parachute cord. I reached behind my head and grabbed for it but nothing was there. I tried the other side but it wasn't there either. Then it crossed my mind of what was in it for Darren. He would have me killed so that he could collect the money that my mom put in my trust fund. After all Darren was my only living relative. I reached for my emergency parachute cord but when I pulled it it just snapped. Oh come on Darren couldn't you have thought of a better way to kill me? I wasn't scared anyways because I had some weird thing where when I would be scared my heart didn't beat fast so my brain didn't produce a chemical that makes me scared. SO I tried to grab onto the side of the building but it is mostly window panes and very smooth. When I looked down I saw I was very close to the ground... and then I closed my eyes. I heard the pavement crack, or was it my bones?
Chapter 2: How It All Got Started
I awoke to the sound of moaning and hollow screaming. All around me were black glassy rectangles with purple stuff flowing like water in the center. Through them I could see scenes of fighting, car racing, and almost every other thing you could imagine. The one in front of me though had nothing but trees, hills and lakes. I didn't know what they were so I started brainstorming. After what seemed hours I figured that they might be windows to other dimensions but why were they big enough for just one person exactly his size to fit through? So they might be a door instead of a window. I figured I would give one a try. I went through the one with trees and lakes and hills and stuff. As soon as I went through I felt like I was smashed against the concrete over and over and then I was spat out of this misery right into a lake going unconscious in the process, boy was I dead.
I woke up in a small dirt hut with a fireplace, a crafting table, a furnace and a small chest. I was lying on a bed under covers with no clothes on but my underwear. Over near tending the fireplace was a girl about my age with brown hair that reached half-way down her back. She glanced over towards me and smiled, then she said something in what sounded like Russian and by the puzzled look on my face she must of guessed that I had no idea what she was saying. She then said something again in Spanish which I knew well enough to say "No." Then she slapped her forehead and said "I'm sorry but I thought you were Russian or Spanish by the way you looked without cl..." Her sentence trailed off. My face turned red and so did hers. "So what's your name?" She asked after an awkwardly long silence. "Colby." I said very quietly. "Mine is Angel." She replied looking down at the crafting table and cutting strips of cloth. "So a... Where are my clothes?" I asked a little louder than before. She blushed again. She picked up some pants and threw them to me. "I found you on the beach with all your clothes gone except for your underwear." My ears turned red. "How old are you? I'm 15." she said quite quickly. "15." I replied.
Chapter 3: How I nearly got killed
The next day I felt well enough to get even if my lungs were filled with water. After I got up I started walking around the house and touching everything wondering where I was. I turned towards the door but before I could open it Angel half yelled "Don't go outside yet!" I was so startled that I fell head first through the door and knocked myself out. Later that day I woke up in bed yet again but this time I was alone. I got up and looked around to see if anyone was watching, then I opened the chest, grabbed a stone pickax, a stone sword and some flint and steel and sprinted out the door.
The place was beautiful but something seemed wrong. Whatever it was I hoped it wouldn't kill me. I don't know where I got the urge and why I did it but I silently lit the wall of the house of fire. I didn't know it yet but Angel had left me to die in that house.
I walked for hours and hours until I came upon a tree good enough to break and make into boards. As I was working on building a crafting bench I heard an unnatural noise. I looked over my shoulder and saw a flash of color and then I felt a hand go over my mouth. Whatever it was it released me very quickly and and whispered a few words into my ear. The words sounded like "Don't look back or I'll kill you." I just did nothing for a few minutes and then I heard it say "Give me your clothes and I won't hurt you." I slowly took my clothes off, all except my underwear and threw it behind me. "All of 'em!" It said yet again. I gave them my underwear and looked back to see a streak of skin and it was gone.
So here I was naked at sunset. Really? Why the f*** did this guy just come and rob my clothes and not my pickax or sword? I don't know why but I just went with my instincts and sprinted off the way the whoever he was as fast as I could. By about midnight I reached what seemed to be a stone wall. There were slits at the top that I guessed were for guns or something that was not melee. I didn't know what to do and I was awfully tired so I just dug a a simple 1 x 2 hole, covered my self with dirt, and fell asleep.
The next day, I guessed about 7 o'clock, I dug myself out and looked at my surroundings. I seemed to be next to a wall about a hundred feet high with turret like things on top. I started pondering how I would get inside the wall for some unknown reason when I heard a shout. "Look! Down there! A Nudilairy!" I saw arrows emerge from the slits and at once I knew I would die. As I saw the arrows flying towards me I realized something. They must not take kindly to nudes. When the arrows hit I felt pains in my stomach, my legs, my arms, and especially my groin. Oh why am I always the one to have stuff happen to me?
As I fell on my face I felt the arrows stab in deeper and deeper and a few broke the skin on my back. I passed out. What else could I do? Run around in circles screaming "YAY!!!"
Chapter 4: How I lived
I woke up in an underground cave of some sort. To this day I still have no idea how I got there. There were bandages all over me, even on my face! I had the slight suspicion that I looked somewhat like a mummy. When I tried to get up I felt pain all over. Why am I the one who always has horrible stuff happen to me!? I eventually started walking with very much pain at that. After a while I came across a door. I opened it and walked into a hall with no doors at all except at the very end. When I finally got there I found a beaker full of some kind of liquid. It said "Healing Potion." Wow a healing potion just when I need one! It could of been poison for all I knew but I drank it anyways. I at once felt stronger and all the pain in my body went away. The first thought that crossed my mind? "I need to get out of here!" I started hitting the stone which surrounded the room with my hands forming a staircase. After hours and hours of hard hitting and knuckle bleeding I finally got to the surface. I came up just outside the same wall where I got shot to death with arrows.
This time I looked like a mummy and figured I should try to get in there again since I wasn't a Nudil er what ever they called me. I actually very simply punched through the really thick wall but I regretted that when I got inside!
Chapter 5: The King
In front of me stood oh maybe twenty soldiers armed with spears, knives and bows. Nice welcoming party isn't it? They took me to a place inside of a big castle and the place was undoubtedly a dungeon. But not a dungeon like the kind where you get locked up no it was a dungeon with a strange blue cage in the center. But what was it? And at that time I knew exactly what it was. A thing to make skeletons appear. But these skeletons had bows and that were alive. Moving around the room like they hadn't noticed me yet. And with that I flung my self out and started hitting the skeleton as hard as I could. He eventually died but where his pile of bones lay was bow with a purplish tint to it. I picked it up and grabbed some arrows I found on the ground. I pulled the quiver out of the pile of bones and waited for the guards. The next day a guard came to give me my lunch. As soon as he walked into the room I got my bow ready. He walked towards me with a bowl of soup or some s*** and sat it down on the floor. He turned his back to me which was a stupid move. But instead of shooting him I grabbed a arrow and stabbed him in the back. Oh no I had killed someone... I pulled the arrow out and switched his clothes with mine. I walked out with my quiver, bow and knife I pulled off his belt. After a while I found my way out of the dungeon and mad my way up to the ground floor. When my head emerged I was actually in the castle unlike before when they threw me down in a cellar just outside. I looked around at the perfect red carpet and gold walls. Then I heard a voice. "Guard some here." I looked over and I saw a guy oh maybe thirty years old with a golden crown on. I walked over thinking about how well my disguise had worked. "What took you so long?" The king asked. "Oh, uh I had a little trouble" I answered. "Yes a little trouble." He said dreamily. "Well, be about your duties then." He said again. I knew at once the he would eventually give me trouble so I spun around and shot as quick as that. But what I didn't know was that he was... Immortal.
Chapter 6: The Re-Kill
I ran out of the castle as fast as I could. I had no idea where I was going because it only took the guards a few minutes to drag me to the cellar. I started sprinting towards what I thought was the gate but turns out it was actually a prop for a play that the city was holding. I ran right into it and into the wall on the other side. Boy did that hurt. I got up after a few minutes and started running towards the real gate. I saw the guards who had brought me to the king and apparently they also saw me because as soon as I got outside the gate they were chasing me. They were right behind me but instead of running faster I stopped, pulled an arrow out of my quiver, turned around and let one guard run into the arrow. I pulled out of his stomach and put it in my bow. I pulled back my arm and shot them one by one until they were all on the ground. I ran over to them and pulled the arrows out of there dead bodies. But when I looked back towards the city gate I saw there whole army advancing. I knew that they must have figured out that I killed the king and sprinted the other direction.
After what seemed hours of running I stopped to rest. I noticed a small door leading into a small dirt shack. I went over to it and opened the door. In front of me was a very long staircase that turned left about six yards down. I closed the door and slowly walked down the staircase with my bow ready. I peaked around the corner and I saw a small room with two furnaces, a crafting table and a chest. I walked in a little farther and saw a short man in wizard clothes. "Hello young traveler." He said not even turning around to look at me. "How did you know I was here?" I asked. "Oh when one is as old as me they begin to examine their senses a little better since one is usually gone bad." he replied. At this I had nothing to say so I just walked slowly towards him. He turned around pointing a staff at me and shouted the words "Et formam!"
Chapter 7: The Resistance
My bow flew out of my hand along with my quiver off my back. The man still stood with his staff pointed at me and mouth ready to curse my very existence, why? I don't know. After a few minutes of staring I charged him but it had no affect.
The Mun In The Mine
The Mun In The Mine
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Keep writing, you're good at it.
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if I should write now or tomorrow (er later today lol) Well if you actually care about this book than comment! So I know if anyone is actually reading this.
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would really annoy me. So if you could give me 10 seconds of your time and leave a comment I would appreciate it! Thanks!
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The Mun In The Mine
Thought the beginning was slightly confusing,
Your forshadowing is kinda irritating...
Keep up the good work
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Please tell me this actually means something.
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"Uincere uos daemonia clamávero"
I call upon the demons to vanquish you (latin)
"Jeg kommando Død over ramme dig"
i command Death to befall you (danish)
"Ser feriu inferno"
Be Smote with hell (Portugese)
Its always better when its real... (Usually)
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Exarmare proditor (Latin)
(Disarm the traitor)