I'm not sure if this was on purpose or accidental, but I just looked at Chapter 3 and it talks in a 1st person, the others are in a 3rd-person perspective.
Also, sometimes you use the present tense instead of past tense.
The picture of the dogs is posted twice as well.
Other than that, great story!
I'm 13 too! Either way, this story is shaping up quite nicely, and I think you have some pretty good potential. Do you hack in items and stuff for your screenshots, or did you incorporate this into your normal world? Because if you did this as part of your normal world, with enough people, you could probably make a video version of this and post it on Youtube.
I'm not sure if this was on purpose or accidental, but I just looked at Chapter 3 and it talks in a 1st person, the others are in a 3rd-person perspective.
Other than that, great story!
Chapter 3 wasn't in first person though...Ahhh the first sentence was on first person xD I fixed it
I'm 13 too! Either way, this story is shaping up quite nicely, and I think you have some pretty good potential. Do you hack in items and stuff for your screenshots, or did you incorporate this into your normal world? Because if you did this as part of your normal world, with enough people, you could probably make a video version of this and post it on Youtube.
I'm not sure if this was on purpose or accidental, but I just looked at Chapter 3 and it talks in a 1st person, the others are in a 3rd-person perspective.
Also, sometimes you use the present tense instead of past tense.
The picture of the dogs is posted twice as well.
Other than that, great story!
I said this. Two days later, my computer's motherboard melted down and I had to get a new one with Windows 8.
Irony in the first degree.
Haha! (:
Haha, XD Expect a bit of excitement in Chapter 5. Should be done by tonight:)
I'll be waiting.
I know that, I have asked a mod to move it.
Thanks(:
When you do post the link here, I would love to read it
Haha Loving your enthusiasm (:
Ganna write my own too
Epic stories.
Except theres a lack of words...
Yes Well I've found people like looking at the screenshots more than reading xD
Thanks(:
Other Miners: Oh whatever
At the funeral:
Priest: She was a go- I'm bored lets go eat some cake
Miners: yeah lets go.
Haha! xD This made me laugh
Go ahead and start your story! I can't wait to read it! (:
Cheers!
Also, sometimes you use the present tense instead of past tense.
The picture of the dogs is posted twice as well.
Other than that, great story!
Sorry to be such a schoolteacher...
Chapter 3 wasn't in first person though...Ahhh the first sentence was on first person xD I fixed it
Ah I started a new world ahah
Thanks for that
No ahah, I used TMI for alot of it as It would take a long time to gather the needed items.
Haha XD