(Hey guys sorry for being inactive I'm just here to help with this one)
Zaros25: Deffered
You missed one crucial fact and so your bio trailed after that mistake a bit. While it was true that an outstanding app gave some magic BEFORE the disaster, it does not apply anymore, as the disaster has passed and everyone is underground in the UnderCity, where only the Undergods have magic. In fact, I don't think magic is even discussed anymore that much. What confused me is that in your bio you said you moved, but you did not say anything about moving to the basin, or fleeing underground. The disaster did not just happen in one place either, the whole land was affected if I'm not mistaken. So magic in your bio might be a tricky thing. Another thing I did not understand is how you describe a scholar type, yet he resorts to violence when he gets mad? Like a sir one moment and then not the next? I was simply confused. If a character is two double sided without reason, no one will understand or like the character IC.
Finally, I felt your ICR was lacking. The responses were too over-done and predictable. For example: "there is an old man begging for food. *gives food*" It didn't seem to have any character depth to them if you understand me?
Take all this with a pinch of salt and try to fix up your app before applying again. Best of luck to you.
(Hey guys sorry for being inactive I'm just here to help with this one)
Zaros25: Deffered
You missed one crucial fact and so your bio trailed after that mistake a bit. While it was true that an outstanding app gave some magic BEFORE the disaster, it does not apply anymore, as the disaster has passed and everyone is underground in the UnderCity, where only the Undergods have magic. In fact, I don't think magic is even discussed anymore that much. What confused me is that in your bio you said you moved, but you did not say anything about moving to the basin, or fleeing underground. The disaster did not just happen in one place either, the whole land was affected if I'm not mistaken. So magic in your bio might be a tricky thing. Another thing I did not understand is how you describe a scholar type, yet he resorts to violence when he gets mad? Like a sir one moment and then not the next? I was simply confused. If a character is two double sided without reason, no one will understand or like the character IC.
Finally, I felt your ICR was lacking. The responses were too over-done and predictable. For example: "there is an old man begging for food. *gives food*" It didn't seem to have any character depth to them if you understand me?
Take all this with a pinch of salt and try to fix up your app before applying again. Best of luck to you.
-Issie
Thanks I'm going to fix it now. And I get where you're coming from, but what I meant to say about the scholarly thing was like Tybalt in Romeo and Juliet. He is a man of class, but he has a short temper. Just a little side note :).
Real-Life Age: I am 14, but shall be turning 15 in a matter of months.
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Ben Lempner
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yes, yes I do, and I shall abide by the decisions of the staff.
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing someone to RP without letting them respond, i.e. Chops "insert name here"'s head off.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using out of character information whilst in character, i.e. asking guard, how do I brew a potion of strength and he gives you the correct answer how to. Guards don't need to know how to brew potions of strength.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Creating a character and then acting a certain way, based on how you made that character.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: Nobody.
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: After both of you agree to role-play and the other person agrees to the death of a character.
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: If you need help with something.
Have you read the primary Server lore of our Server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yes, yes I have.
Who is allowed to use magic?: People who make outstanding applications involving the use or ownership of the knowledge of magic.
How did the Humans come to be in the Caves?: They were taking refuge in a town and had to flee after the apocalypse.
What are the Shrines?: They are the shrines that the Undergods store their loot and other stockpiles at.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: I have played on a few rp servers, but am fairly new to it and wish to increase my knowledge of it here.
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: I don't remember the names of them, but one was a Roman Empire server, and it became very boring very fast because nobody wanted to rp with me.
Character Information
Name: Zaros
Age: 19
Race or Nationality (Javil, Horium, Ragnau or Khazi-Un): Horium
Class: Herbalist
Physical description: Fair skinned man of Horium, which is umcommon, but also stands at 5' 11'' tall. Brown hair, blue eyes.
Screen capture of your skin: This is a link to the website where it is posted, because I cannot put it on the MC Forums. http://www.minecraft...kin-by-zaros25/ click this link to view my skin. Sorry for all of the extra trouble you may have to go through.
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.):
Zaros' life began in the simple town of Ghreenfields. His parents loved him dearly and taught him many things about the world around him. He had many friends growing up and also got into a bit of trouble. He attended school and was at the top of his class. He learned about alchemy, and how to read and write. Life was good for him. He grew up to the age of fourteen and was sent to college. The college that he attended was called Yellowroot University. There he studied alchemy and potion brewing. He attended all of his classes. He became one of the top students in all of his classes.
Zaros had completed his studies at the University and went back home. Because he did not make notes of the magic he learned he had forgotten what he had learned, but it didn't matter anyways. He spent his seventeenth and eighteenth years back at Ghreenfields with his parents. They told each other stories of what they had seen, or heard, or done while Zaros was at college. Zaros shared some, but not all, of his knowledge with his parents. Then when he turned 19 he moved to Horium. He originally thought it a mistake because of the apocalypse which had recently occured there, and proceeded to flee to the Underground City. He continued to help people whenever they needed it.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): Create potions and research ways to make new potions to better mankind. Maybe some day to become a great scholar and also be involved in the government.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Strong-willed, Smart, Brave, Strong, Good at talking and interacting with others, Fairly attractive, Good at ending confrontations without violence, Charitable (To an extent).
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality): Thinks that others view him as not good, Not the best with a sword, Can become over enthusiastic, Short tempered, Has a hard time agreeing with new ideas, Struggles with making new friends and acquaintances, Can sometimes do the wrong thing if his temper is broken.
Will your character likely join an existing faction? If so, which? If not, why not?: No, simply because none of these factions represent who I am as a character and I don't want to be a part of a group of murderers. I may consider joining Vespero Scath but hopefully can manage on my own.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Possibly, we will have to see if he happens to "bump into" some "family" or "friends" later on.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Undercity, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
*(Zaros (Me)): Hello sirs, what is the meaning of this.
*(Man #1): *Looks at Zaros* What are you talking about. You best be on your way laddy.
*(Me): Listen sir, this girl hasn't done anything to you has she *Says last line looking at girl*
*(Girl): Yeah I haven't.
*(Man #2): Well this doesn't concern you. Leave, or this will turn violent.
*(Me): Listen, if I give you this here ruby, will you let her be?
*(Man #1): If you give us that ruby, you can leave here with your life. *Draws sword but doesn't make a move on Zaros*
*(Me): Okay, okay I will give it to you but can you please let her go?
*(Man #2): She's not worth the time. Just give us the ruby and we will be on our way.
*(Me): Okay. *Hands Man #2 the ruby* Come on now miss, lets go.
You’ve been lost in the tunnels for nearly a week without food, and come across a small independent settlement.
*(Me): Hello, does anyone have any food? I will work off whatever you give me.
*(Farmer): I have some salt-pork if you would like.
*(Me): Thank you, thank you, a thousand times thank you. How may I repay you?
*(Farmer): You can start by tilling my fields for me. It is hard work but you can stay in my spare room for the night when you're done.
*(Me): Okay. *Works all day, and then retires to the spare bedroom of the house*
*(Farmer): I see that you have tilled my fields for me. Now all thats left is planting. Plant these seeds and you can be on your way. I'll even give you some water for the road.
*(Me): Thank you sir. *Works until 6 p.m. in the field, then with his new food in hand, sets off to find his home again*
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
*(Old Man): Hello good sir, do you have any food for an old beggar?
*(Me): *Thinks for a second*
*(Old Man): Please kind sir, I am starving.
*(Me): *Hands the Old Man a slice of bread*
*(Old Man): Thank you, kind sir.
*(Me): Thou art welcome.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
*(Drunk): Hey...urh mudder ish a s-s-stupid, whorelady.
*(Me): Why I say, sir if you do not take that back I shall deal a blow to you which shall knock you back a fortnight.
*(Drunk): I dun't caare wh-what y-you say.
*(Me): *Throws a punch at the drunk*
*(Drunk): *Because of his impaired state, cannot dodge it and gets his front tooth knocked out*
*(Drunk): *Smashes his bottle on the bar and attempts to stab Zaros*
*(Me): *Dodges the stabbing and hits him in his nose, causing him to fall over unconscious*
*(Me): Sorry about the mess. *Throws a tip down on the bar* Don't forget to take out the trash.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
*(Me): Why excuse me madam, I spied your necklace and it tickled my fancy. Where does one acquire a necklace like that?
*(Lady): This is a special necklace given to me by the Duke of Lorikstearn.
*(Me): Wouldst I be able to purchase that necklace from you? I have a lady-friend who might like that.
*(Lady): Good heavens no, this is a priceless, one of a kind piece which I wouldn't dare part with.
*(Me): Would five-hundred dollars be enough to make you part with it?
*(Lady): Six-hundred and you have a deal.
*(Me): Alright. *Thinks: She better like this necklace when she gets it.*
Do you have any questions about the Server or our lore? No, no I do not.
Other notes: I know that rule #2 says no offensive or sexist remarks, but I only used the word "whorelady" to show how Zaros became angry by the insult of his mother. Also, Rule #7 is my favorite rule.
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Please note that my parents are divorced and I have not got minecraft at my father's house so if I am inactive for multiple days it is because I am at his house. Other than that I will be on regularly at my mother's house.
Everything posted in red is what I changed on my first redo.
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"All we need is each other, and a couple of chocolate bars," - Zaros25
I did this again because you didn't take my advice in your ICR section. I used the old man part as an example for ALL of them, you only changed one and one line on the last one. ICRs are rewarded on effort and creativity here. Commonly they are the easiest way to get accepted or get rejected. And to be honest I am highly disappointed in yours overall. With the old man part, all you did was make him shakespearian! The others did not change much at all. Here is some advice: Think about the fact that the NPC characters in the ICRs have minds of their own. Whose to say that the farmer will trust you with food and work? Is there a more interesting and creative way to trick the thugs when IG they would have probably torn you to pieces and taken the ruby anyway. THINK before posting again because your chances are running out. Best of luck, and remember: EFFORT and CREATIVITY.
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): I'd rather not throw it in the MCF. PM me if you need it.
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: I do.
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: It's Godmoding, being overpowered, doing things you should not be capable of doing.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: using OOC knowledge IC.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Acting a character in an invented world.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: Nobody.
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: when the other actually wants death.
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: With Parenthesies, in PMs or using the OOC channel.
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yeah.
Who is allowed to use magic?: Sages, and people who actually got it through a really good bio.
How did the Humans come to be in the Caves?: Divine intervention, or mabye it was just a really powerful searchlite fired from orbit...
What are the Shrines?: Trading stations, religion and worshipping for food, it's a fair deal if you ask me.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: LARPed for 3 years, 2 years of minecraft roleplay
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: TJRP, it died, Skalas, the successor to TJRP, it also died, AR-547, that died too.
Character Information
Name: Anatalia Rose (I will be saying Anna during this bio because I'm too lazy to write the full name every single time.)
Age: 23
Race or Nationality (Javil, Horium, Ragnau or Khazi-Un):Horium
Class:Artificer
Physical description: Red hair, green eyes, 5 feet 10, fairly thin. I'm really bad with physical descriptions.
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Anna lived in a quiet neighbourhood in the capital, her father was a successful merchant and her mother was a florist, the lived their quiet, boring life peacefully. Her father's wealth got her in a fairly nice school, where she would get average grades, except in her art classes, those went well.
Anna was lonely, it was her way of living. She had no friends, but it was perfectly fine, she had no love life, because most men only liked her because she looked nice, and Anna really disliked people who just wanted to wave a pretty girl around as a trophy. Eventually, some guy went too far, and got hurt pretty bad, which got her suspended for violence, such actions are not tolerated in a fancy school such as that one.
Now in a new school, there were rumours about the new girl, the new girl got the new student treatment, but it didn't really matter, things went on, maybe things would get better, only time will tell.
As life went on, miss Rose built up an interest in metal working, not the weapons kind though, the kind of metal crafting where you make nice things. She got her father to pay for her training, and then, when he died in a caravan incident, she got enough heritage money to setup shop.
Buisness was okay, she was making enough money to buy more working material and get food. Life was simple, it was quiet, it was nice, until the war started and she had to abandon shop and leave the capital. Now she's employed as a maid, living a pretty bad life, without the means to get a better one until she could find a decent shop that would not care about gender and just hire her, and Anna was confident that would happen, so she kept on living, hoping she could start doing what she enjoys doing again.
And then the apocalypse happened, and that changed everything.
Anna was lonely, it was her way of living. She had no friends, she didn't like
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): Getting her old life back.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Strength, she knows how to fight well enough to defend herself. Used to working hard for long periods of time, and she's used to heat and all that. she plays it safe, and smart. Since she's so quiet and reserved, she's quite patient. small levels of education, she reads, writes, and knows basic education, but that's it.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality): Rarely takes risks, no social skills whatsoever, unreasonably likes men who hits on her. talks a little too quietly most of the time. Clumsy.
Will your character likely join an existing faction? If so, which? If not, why not?: No, no need.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Nope
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Undercity, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl. *Anna quietly walks past guards, seeing this, she looks for a nearby weapon* *Anna comes back, and hits the first guard in the back of the head, hard enough to knock him out* Thug2: "Woah! so you're going to be a hero huh? well go on! kill me! save the girl!" *Goes in a combat stance* Anna: No, I will not fight you, I have brought the guards over, I just felt like hitting one of you first. *Guards come out of the corner and surround the thugs as anna leaves.*
You’ve been lost in the tunnels for nearly a week without food, and come across a small independent settlement.
[*Enters the settlement and goes to the nearest inn, asking for food and directions*
[Bartender: "Haha, you got pretty far out from your original home huh!"
[Anna: "I know, i've been out for a week. *Looks in wallet* umm, bartender?"
[Bartender: "What is it dear?"
[Anna: "I can't pay for all this, *Hands over pouch of money* This is all I have, I hope this can cover most of it"
[Bartender:"Don't worry dear, you're going back home anyway right? just walk over that way, it should take
you a day or two, but the directions on the map should help."
[Anna: "Thank you, I wish I could pay you back." *Walks away*
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
I'm sorry, I don't have much, *Hand over some money and keep going*
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother. [Drunkard: Oy! you! You don't look like a married woman's child! [Anna: What do you mean? [Drunkard: I'm jus' saying your mother's pro'lly a ***** is all! [Anna: My mother was a married accomplished florist, please go away. *finished drink, asks for another one" [Drunkard: Yeah RIGHT! like YOU would be daughter of a FLORIST! *Laughs* [Anna:Well, if i'm going to have to deal with someone like you, i'd rather just leave before I get into any trouble. *Finishes drink and leaves*
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
*Too shy to actually ask the woman where she got it, she just visits a bunch of jewelry stores to see if it's there*
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?: How does the shrine give ressources? does it just materialises it or something?
Other notes: If you get all mad because my bio's too short, well too bad, I hate writing bios, I'm bad at bios, I always was, I prefer actual RP than lore. Also, sorry about all those wierd font changes, used open office for the bio and these forums keep messing everything up, it's wierd.
Real-Life Age: I am 14, but shall be turning 15 in a matter of months.
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Ben Lempner
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yes, yes I do, and I shall abide by the decisions of the staff.
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing someone to RP without letting them respond, i.e. Chops "insert name here"'s head off.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using out of character information whilst in character, i.e. asking guard, how do I brew a potion of strength and he gives you the correct answer how to. Guards don't need to know how to brew potions of strength.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Creating a character and then acting a certain way, based on how you made that character.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: Nobody.
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: After both of you agree to role-play andthe other person agrees to the death of a character.
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: If you need help with something.
Have you read the primary Server lore of our Server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yes, yes I have.
Who is allowed to use magic?: People who make outstanding applications involving the use or ownership of the knowledge of magic.
How did the Humans come to be in the Caves?: They were taking refuge in a town and had to flee afterthe apocalypse.
What are theShrines?: They are theshrines that the Undergods store their loot and other stockpiles at.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: I have played on a few rp servers, but am fairly new to it and wish to increase my knowledge of it here.
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: I don't remember the names of them, but one was a Roman Empire server, and it became very boring very fast because nobody wanted to rp with me.
Character Information
Name: Zaros
Age: 19
Race or Nationality (Javil, Horium, Ragnau or Khazi-Un): Horium
Class: Herbalist
Physical description: Fair skinned man of Horium, which is umcommon, but also stands at 5' 11'' tall. Brown hair, blue eyes.
Screen capture of your skin: This is a link to the website where it is posted, because I cannot put it on theMC Forums. http://www.minecraft...kin-by-zaros25/ click this link to view my skin. Sorry for all of theextra trouble you may have to go through.
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.):
Zaros' life began in the simple town of Ghreenfields. His parents loved him dearly and taught him many things about the world around him. He had many friends growing up and also got into a bit of trouble. He attended school and was at the top of his class. He learned about alchemy, and how to read and write. Life was good for him. He grew up to the age of fourteen and was sent to college. the college that he attended was called Yellowroot University. There he studied alchemy and potion brewing. He attended all of his classes. He became one of the top students in all of his classes.
Zaros had completed his studies at the University and went back home. Because he did not make notes ofthe magic he learned he had forgotten what he had learned, but it didn't matter anyways. He spent his seventeenth and eighteenth years back at Ghreenfields with his parents. They told each other stories of what They had seen, or heard, or done while Zaros was at college. Zaros shared some, but not all, of his knowledge with his parents. Then when he turned 19 he moved to Horium. He originally thought it a mistake because of the apocalypse which had recently occured There, and proceeded to flee to theUnderground City. He continued to help people whenever They needed it.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): Create potions and research ways to make new potions to better mankind. Maybe some day to become a great scholar and also be involved in the government.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Strong-willed, Smart, Brave, Strong, Good at talking and interacting with others, Fairly attractive, Good at ending confrontations without violence, Charitable (To an extent).
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality): Thinks that others view him as not good, Not the best with a sword, Can become over enthusiastic, Short tempered, Has a hard time agreeing with new ideas, Struggles with making new friends and acquaintances, Can sometimes do the wrong thing if his temper is broken.
Will your character likely join an existing faction? If so, which? If not, why not?: No, simply because none of these factions represent who I am as a character and I don't want to be a part of a group of murderers. I may consider joining Vespero Scath but hopefully can manage on my own.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Possibly, we will have to see if he happens to "bump into" some "family" or "friends" later on.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Undercity, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
*(Zaros (Me)): Hello sirs, what is the meaning of this.
*(Man #1): *Looks at Zaros* What are you talking about. You best be on your way laddy.
*(Me): Listen sir, this girl hasn't done anything to you has she *Says last line looking at girl*
*(Girl): Yeah I haven't.
*(Man #2): Well this doesn't concern you. Leave, or this will turn violent.
*(Me): Listen, if I give you this here ruby, will you let her be?
*(Man #1): If you give us that ruby, you can leave here with your life. *Draws sword but doesn't make a move on Zaros*
*(Me): *Draws sword, and inconspicuously places hand on a bottle* Try me!!!
*(Man #1): *Lunges at Zaros, but barely misses, putting a tear in his new shirt.
*(Me): Hey man this is a new shirt!!
*(Man #2): *Pulls out axe and swings at Zaros' head* Arrgh!!!!!
*(Me): *Throws bottle down, which causes a cloud of thick smoke allowing Zaros to flee with the girl.
You’ve been lost in the tunnels for nearly a week without food, and come across a small independent settlement.
*(Me): Hello, does anyone have any food?
*(Farmer): I do, but it depends on who is asking.
*(Me): I am sir. I have been lost in the tunnels for almost a weeks time.
*(Farmer): Ahh, I can see by your face.
*(Me): Can you spare me some food please?
*(Farmer): Well obviously I have to feed my family. Is there anything that you can give to me that I need?
*(Me): I have this substance I created back at my home. *Pulls out white powder*
*(Farmer): *Stares at the powder, then Zaros, then the powder* What does it do?
*(Me): Watch! *Places the powder on the crops and they grow instantly*
*(Farmer): Wow!! You can have a loaf of bread and a pork chop if you tell me what that substance is and how to make it.
*(Me): Its called bonemeal. Here have the rest of mine. All you need to do is crush bones to make it.
*(Farmer): *Hands Zaros the food* Have a nice day sonny.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
*(Old Man): Hello good sir, do you have any food for an old beggar?
*(Me): *Thinks for a second*
*(Old Man): Please kind sir, I am starving.
*(Me): *Hands the man food*
*(Old Man): Thank you.
*(Me): Your Welcome.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
*(Drunk): *Says something about Zaros' mother that is insulting*
*(Zaros(Me)): I think that you should take that back.
*(Drunk): *Lashes out at Zaros knocking him unconscious*
*(Me): Ugh.
*(Drunk): *Goes through Zaros' pockets*
*(Me): *Grabs drunk and throws a potion of blindness in his face*
*(Drunk): Argh!!! I can't see!!!
*(Me): *Hits the drunk and takes back what is mine*
*(Me): Don't worry, it will wear off soon enough. *Leaves bar*
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
*(Me): Hello ma'am, where did you get that necklace?
*(Lady): I got it from the Duke of Pork.
*(Me): Ahh I see, I really do like that necklace.
*(Lady): Leave or I will call the guards.
*(Me): Alright, alright you win.
Do you have any questions about theServer or our lore? No, no I do not.
Other notes: Rule #7 is my favorite rule.
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Please note that my parents are divorced and I have not got minecraft at my father's house so if I am inactive for multiple days it is because I am at his house. other than that I will be on regularly at my mother's house.
I am sorry that my first redo was a horrible failure. I really did try to take it with a pinch of salt, and I hope that my second redo was good. I tried to incorporate my knowledge of potion making and farming to help out. I really do hope that you like it!!!! Thanks for taking the time to re-read my app twice, it really means alot to me.
Everything posted in red is what I changed on my first redo.
Everything posted in blue is what I changed on my second redo.
Well, I looked over your latest try and it is better, though I think your actual rp could be improved, but maybe it would be better to improve IG don't you think? I saw how you said that no one wanted to talk to you in your last server, and is there any reason for that? I suppose your app is now up to scratch to be accepted, but on the server be friendly, be understanding and considerate of others, follow the rules of course and it will go awesomely. Welcome to the server! I'll add you as soon as possible.
After some recent discussion in the "Fate of the Server" thread we've decided to wrap up the Under City storyline in preparation for a new world. This wrap up will likely take a few weeks or more. We are sorry for the wait, though over the next few weeks we will be asking for feedback and lore suggestions for the new world. Staff applications will be going back online over the next week or so as well.
We welcome all of the new players here and are sorry that we are in that state that we are in. Please stick around while we get everything back into gear.
Happy Holidays!
If you are yet to be accepted to the server, hop on the forums and make an account anyways. Lend your ideas and in the Server Suggestionst thread. Every person counts!
Zomgman: Deffered
Your application as a whole was decent. As you mentioned, your bio was a little short (345 words) and I found yours ICR's to be a little short as well. Go back through, make a couple of corrections (grammar), and next time you will most likely be accepted.
Amanwithaplan: Accepted
You were accepted by Jidek earlier but since then he has been a bit inactive. You have been added to the whitelist!
The_CavDubstep: Accepted
Once again, sorry for the wait! Your application looks very solid, welcome to the server!
Note:
If you believe that your application was skipped over, missed, or the whitelister handling it has become inactive, send me a pm. I will be able to get a whitelister on the job.
Silentstealth: Accepted
Once again, sorry for the wait! Your application looks very solid, welcome to the server! I loved the part about the melons. Your grammar and spelling is a bit off, so be careful. You've been added to the whitelist!
Well, I looked over your latest try and it is better, though I think your actual rp could be improved, but maybe it would be better to improve IG don't you think? I saw how you said that no one wanted to talk to you in your last server, and is there any reason for that? I suppose your app is now up to scratch to be accepted, but on the server be friendly, be understanding and considerate of others, follow the rules of course and it will go awesomely. Welcome to the server! I'll add you as soon as possible.
Thank you so much!!! You don't know what this means to me. I don't know why nobody talked to me. I tried to make friends but nobody wanted anything to do with me. I am certain that with some more experience on the server that my rp will increase and I will make alot of friends. Thank you again. I can begin to play on Sunday December, 23. See you on the server.
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"All we need is each other, and a couple of chocolate bars," - Zaros25
Yay! I'll be on soon
Zaros25: Deffered
You missed one crucial fact and so your bio trailed after that mistake a bit. While it was true that an outstanding app gave some magic BEFORE the disaster, it does not apply anymore, as the disaster has passed and everyone is underground in the UnderCity, where only the Undergods have magic. In fact, I don't think magic is even discussed anymore that much. What confused me is that in your bio you said you moved, but you did not say anything about moving to the basin, or fleeing underground. The disaster did not just happen in one place either, the whole land was affected if I'm not mistaken. So magic in your bio might be a tricky thing. Another thing I did not understand is how you describe a scholar type, yet he resorts to violence when he gets mad? Like a sir one moment and then not the next? I was simply confused. If a character is two double sided without reason, no one will understand or like the character IC.
Finally, I felt your ICR was lacking. The responses were too over-done and predictable. For example: "there is an old man begging for food. *gives food*" It didn't seem to have any character depth to them if you understand me?
Take all this with a pinch of salt and try to fix up your app before applying again. Best of luck to you.
-Issie
mehmeh3 - Thank you for bearing with us and changing what we asked you too. Welcome to the server!
IGN: Zaros25
Real-Life Age: I am 14, but shall be turning 15 in a matter of months.
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Ben Lempner
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yes, yes I do, and I shall abide by the decisions of the staff.
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing someone to RP without letting them respond, i.e. Chops "insert name here"'s head off.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using out of character information whilst in character, i.e. asking guard, how do I brew a potion of strength and he gives you the correct answer how to. Guards don't need to know how to brew potions of strength.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Creating a character and then acting a certain way, based on how you made that character.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: Nobody.
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: After both of you agree to role-play and the other person agrees to the death of a character.
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: If you need help with something.
Have you read the primary Server lore of our Server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yes, yes I have.
Who is allowed to use magic?: People who make outstanding applications involving the use or ownership of the knowledge of magic.
How did the Humans come to be in the Caves?: They were taking refuge in a town and had to flee after the apocalypse.
What are the Shrines?: They are the shrines that the Undergods store their loot and other stockpiles at.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: I have played on a few rp servers, but am fairly new to it and wish to increase my knowledge of it here.
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: I don't remember the names of them, but one was a Roman Empire server, and it became very boring very fast because nobody wanted to rp with me.
Character Information
Name: Zaros
Age: 19
Race or Nationality (Javil, Horium, Ragnau or Khazi-Un): Horium
Class: Herbalist
Physical description: Fair skinned man of Horium, which is umcommon, but also stands at 5' 11'' tall. Brown hair, blue eyes.
Screen capture of your skin: This is a link to the website where it is posted, because I cannot put it on the MC Forums. http://www.minecraft...kin-by-zaros25/ click this link to view my skin. Sorry for all of the extra trouble you may have to go through.
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.):
Zaros' life began in the simple town of Ghreenfields. His parents loved him dearly and taught him many things about the world around him. He had many friends growing up and also got into a bit of trouble. He attended school and was at the top of his class. He learned about alchemy, and how to read and write. Life was good for him. He grew up to the age of fourteen and was sent to college. The college that he attended was called Yellowroot University. There he studied alchemy and potion brewing. He attended all of his classes. He became one of the top students in all of his classes.
Zaros had completed his studies at the University and went back home. Because he did not make notes of the magic he learned he had forgotten what he had learned, but it didn't matter anyways. He spent his seventeenth and eighteenth years back at Ghreenfields with his parents. They told each other stories of what they had seen, or heard, or done while Zaros was at college. Zaros shared some, but not all, of his knowledge with his parents. Then when he turned 19 he moved to Horium. He originally thought it a mistake because of the apocalypse which had recently occured there, and proceeded to flee to the Underground City. He continued to help people whenever they needed it.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): Create potions and research ways to make new potions to better mankind. Maybe some day to become a great scholar and also be involved in the government.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Strong-willed, Smart, Brave, Strong, Good at talking and interacting with others, Fairly attractive, Good at ending confrontations without violence, Charitable (To an extent).
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality): Thinks that others view him as not good, Not the best with a sword, Can become over enthusiastic, Short tempered, Has a hard time agreeing with new ideas, Struggles with making new friends and acquaintances, Can sometimes do the wrong thing if his temper is broken.
Will your character likely join an existing faction? If so, which? If not, why not?: No, simply because none of these factions represent who I am as a character and I don't want to be a part of a group of murderers. I may consider joining Vespero Scath but hopefully can manage on my own.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Possibly, we will have to see if he happens to "bump into" some "family" or "friends" later on.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Undercity, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
*(Zaros (Me)): Hello sirs, what is the meaning of this.
*(Man #1): *Looks at Zaros* What are you talking about. You best be on your way laddy.
*(Me): Listen sir, this girl hasn't done anything to you has she *Says last line looking at girl*
*(Girl): Yeah I haven't.
*(Man #2): Well this doesn't concern you. Leave, or this will turn violent.
*(Me): Listen, if I give you this here ruby, will you let her be?
*(Man #1): If you give us that ruby, you can leave here with your life. *Draws sword but doesn't make a move on Zaros*
*(Me): Okay, okay I will give it to you but can you please let her go?
*(Man #2): She's not worth the time. Just give us the ruby and we will be on our way.
*(Me): Okay. *Hands Man #2 the ruby* Come on now miss, lets go.
You’ve been lost in the tunnels for nearly a week without food, and come across a small independent settlement.
*(Me): Hello, does anyone have any food? I will work off whatever you give me.
*(Farmer): I have some salt-pork if you would like.
*(Me): Thank you, thank you, a thousand times thank you. How may I repay you?
*(Farmer): You can start by tilling my fields for me. It is hard work but you can stay in my spare room for the night when you're done.
*(Me): Okay. *Works all day, and then retires to the spare bedroom of the house*
*(Farmer): I see that you have tilled my fields for me. Now all thats left is planting. Plant these seeds and you can be on your way. I'll even give you some water for the road.
*(Me): Thank you sir. *Works until 6 p.m. in the field, then with his new food in hand, sets off to find his home again*
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
*(Old Man): Hello good sir, do you have any food for an old beggar?
*(Me): *Thinks for a second*
*(Old Man): Please kind sir, I am starving.
*(Me): *Hands the Old Man a slice of bread*
*(Old Man): Thank you, kind sir.
*(Me): Thou art welcome.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
*(Drunk): Hey...urh mudder ish a s-s-stupid, whorelady.
*(Me): Why I say, sir if you do not take that back I shall deal a blow to you which shall knock you back a fortnight.
*(Drunk): I dun't caare wh-what y-you say.
*(Me): *Throws a punch at the drunk*
*(Drunk): *Because of his impaired state, cannot dodge it and gets his front tooth knocked out*
*(Drunk): *Smashes his bottle on the bar and attempts to stab Zaros*
*(Me): *Dodges the stabbing and hits him in his nose, causing him to fall over unconscious*
*(Me): Sorry about the mess. *Throws a tip down on the bar* Don't forget to take out the trash.
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
*(Me): Why excuse me madam, I spied your necklace and it tickled my fancy. Where does one acquire a necklace like that?
*(Lady): This is a special necklace given to me by the Duke of Lorikstearn.
*(Me): Wouldst I be able to purchase that necklace from you? I have a lady-friend who might like that.
*(Lady): Good heavens no, this is a priceless, one of a kind piece which I wouldn't dare part with.
*(Me): Would five-hundred dollars be enough to make you part with it?
*(Lady): Six-hundred and you have a deal.
*(Me): Alright. *Thinks: She better like this necklace when she gets it.*
Do you have any questions about the Server or our lore? No, no I do not.
Other notes: I know that rule #2 says no offensive or sexist remarks, but I only used the word "whorelady" to show how Zaros became angry by the insult of his mother. Also, Rule #7 is my favorite rule.
Secret Underground Melon Farms
Please note that my parents are divorced and I have not got minecraft at my father's house so if I am inactive for multiple days it is because I am at his house. Other than that I will be on regularly at my mother's house.
Everything posted in red is what I changed on my first redo.
YES I <3 YOU TIFFTIFF I'LL BE ON IMMEDIATELY!!!!!
I did this again because you didn't take my advice in your ICR section. I used the old man part as an example for ALL of them, you only changed one and one line on the last one. ICRs are rewarded on effort and creativity here. Commonly they are the easiest way to get accepted or get rejected. And to be honest I am highly disappointed in yours overall. With the old man part, all you did was make him shakespearian! The others did not change much at all. Here is some advice: Think about the fact that the NPC characters in the ICRs have minds of their own. Whose to say that the farmer will trust you with food and work? Is there a more interesting and creative way to trick the thugs when IG they would have probably torn you to pieces and taken the ruby anyway. THINK before posting again because your chances are running out. Best of luck, and remember: EFFORT and CREATIVITY.
I'll get Jidek to look at it as soon as I see him.
IGN: Evildude2000
Real-Life Age: 16
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): I'd rather not throw it in the MCF. PM me if you need it.
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: I do.
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: It's Godmoding, being overpowered, doing things you should not be capable of doing.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: using OOC knowledge IC.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Acting a character in an invented world.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: Nobody.
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: when the other actually wants death.
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: With Parenthesies, in PMs or using the OOC channel.
Have you read the primary server lore of our server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yeah.
Who is allowed to use magic?: Sages, and people who actually got it through a really good bio.
How did the Humans come to be in the Caves?: Divine intervention, or mabye it was just a really powerful searchlite fired from orbit...
What are the Shrines?: Trading stations, religion and worshipping for food, it's a fair deal if you ask me.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: LARPed for 3 years, 2 years of minecraft roleplay
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: TJRP, it died, Skalas, the successor to TJRP, it also died, AR-547, that died too.
Character Information
Name: Anatalia Rose (I will be saying Anna during this bio because I'm too lazy to write the full name every single time.)
Age: 23
Race or Nationality (Javil, Horium, Ragnau or Khazi-Un):Horium
Class:Artificer
Physical description: Red hair, green eyes, 5 feet 10, fairly thin. I'm really bad with physical descriptions.
Screen capture of your skin: http://www.planetminecraft.com/skin/middle-class-medieval-female/ Removed all the white stuff and made it into actual clothing and not white crap.
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.): Anna lived in a quiet neighbourhood in the capital, her father was a successful merchant and her mother was a florist, the lived their quiet, boring life peacefully. Her father's wealth got her in a fairly nice school, where she would get average grades, except in her art classes, those went well.
Anna was lonely, it was her way of living. She had no friends, but it was perfectly fine, she had no love life, because most men only liked her because she looked nice, and Anna really disliked people who just wanted to wave a pretty girl around as a trophy. Eventually, some guy went too far, and got hurt pretty bad, which got her suspended for violence, such actions are not tolerated in a fancy school such as that one.
Now in a new school, there were rumours about the new girl, the new girl got the new student treatment, but it didn't really matter, things went on, maybe things would get better, only time will tell.
As life went on, miss Rose built up an interest in metal working, not the weapons kind though, the kind of metal crafting where you make nice things. She got her father to pay for her training, and then, when he died in a caravan incident, she got enough heritage money to setup shop.
Buisness was okay, she was making enough money to buy more working material and get food. Life was simple, it was quiet, it was nice, until the war started and she had to abandon shop and leave the capital. Now she's employed as a maid, living a pretty bad life, without the means to get a better one until she could find a decent shop that would not care about gender and just hire her, and Anna was confident that would happen, so she kept on living, hoping she could start doing what she enjoys doing again.
And then the apocalypse happened, and that changed everything.
Anna was lonely, it was her way of living. She had no friends, she didn't like
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): Getting her old life back.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Strength, she knows how to fight well enough to defend herself. Used to working hard for long periods of time, and she's used to heat and all that.
she plays it safe, and smart.
Since she's so quiet and reserved, she's quite patient.
small levels of education, she reads, writes, and knows basic education, but that's it.
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality):
Rarely takes risks, no social skills whatsoever, unreasonably likes men who hits on her.
talks a little too quietly most of the time.
Clumsy.
Will your character likely join an existing faction? If so, which? If not, why not?: No, no need.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Nope
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Undercity, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
*Anna quietly walks past guards, seeing this, she looks for a nearby weapon*
*Anna comes back, and hits the first guard in the back of the head, hard enough to knock him out*
Thug2: "Woah! so you're going to be a hero huh? well go on! kill me! save the girl!" *Goes in a combat stance*
Anna: No, I will not fight you, I have brought the guards over, I just felt like hitting one of you first.
*Guards come out of the corner and surround the thugs as anna leaves.*
You’ve been lost in the tunnels for nearly a week without food, and come across a small independent settlement.
[*Enters the settlement and goes to the nearest inn, asking for food and directions*
[Bartender: "Haha, you got pretty far out from your original home huh!"
[Anna: "I know, i've been out for a week. *Looks in wallet* umm, bartender?"
[Bartender: "What is it dear?"
[Anna: "I can't pay for all this, *Hands over pouch of money* This is all I have, I hope this can cover most of it"
[Bartender:"Don't worry dear, you're going back home anyway right? just walk over that way, it should take
you a day or two, but the directions on the map should help."
[Anna: "Thank you, I wish I could pay you back." *Walks away*
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
I'm sorry, I don't have much, *Hand over some money and keep going*
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
[Drunkard: Oy! you! You don't look like a married woman's child!
[Anna: What do you mean?
[Drunkard: I'm jus' saying your mother's pro'lly a ***** is all!
[Anna: My mother was a married accomplished florist, please go away. *finished drink, asks for another one"
[Drunkard: Yeah RIGHT! like YOU would be daughter of a FLORIST! *Laughs*
[Anna:Well, if i'm going to have to deal with someone like you, i'd rather just leave before I get into any trouble.
*Finishes drink and leaves*
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
*Too shy to actually ask the woman where she got it, she just visits a bunch of jewelry stores to see if it's there*
Do you have any questions about the server or our lore?: How does the shrine give ressources? does it just materialises it or something?
Other notes: If you get all mad because my bio's too short, well too bad, I hate writing bios, I'm bad at bios, I always was, I prefer actual RP than lore.
Also, sorry about all those wierd font changes, used open office for the bio and these forums keep messing everything up, it's wierd.
I have used up up down down left right left right A B start select on life, i win.
IGN: Zaros25
Real-Life Age: I am 14, but shall be turning 15 in a matter of months.
Do you have a Skype? If so, what is your Skype Name? (This is by no means required and holds no weight on your acceptance. We just use Skype a lot): Ben Lempner
Have you read all of the rules, agree to abide by them, and by the decisions of our staff?: Yes, yes I do, and I shall abide by the decisions of the staff.
What is the definition of “Powergaming”?: Forcing someone to RP without letting them respond, i.e. Chops "insert name here"'s head off.
What is the definition of “Metagaming”?: Using out of character information whilst in character, i.e. asking guard, how do I brew a potion of strength and he gives you the correct answer how to. Guards don't need to know how to brew potions of strength.
What is the definition of “Roleplay”?: Creating a character and then acting a certain way, based on how you made that character.
Who can use flymod, X-ray and other such clientsided mods?: Nobody.
When are you allowed to cause the death of another character?: After both of you agree to role-play andthe other person agrees to the death of a character.
When are you allowed to speak out of character?: If you need help with something.
Have you read the primary Server lore of our Server and agree to roleplay in accordance with it?: Yes, yes I have.
Who is allowed to use magic?: People who make outstanding applications involving the use or ownership of the knowledge of magic.
How did the Humans come to be in the Caves?: They were taking refuge in a town and had to flee afterthe apocalypse.
What are the Shrines?: They are the shrines that the Undergods store their loot and other stockpiles at.
What previous roleplay experience have you had, if any?: I have played on a few rp servers, but am fairly new to it and wish to increase my knowledge of it here.
If you have played on other RP servers, please say which and why you left: I don't remember the names of them, but one was a Roman Empire server, and it became very boring very fast because nobody wanted to rp with me.
Character Information
Name: Zaros
Age: 19
Race or Nationality (Javil, Horium, Ragnau or Khazi-Un): Horium
Class: Herbalist
Physical description: Fair skinned man of Horium, which is umcommon, but also stands at 5' 11'' tall. Brown hair, blue eyes.
Screen capture of your skin: This is a link to the website where it is posted, because I cannot put it on theMC Forums. http://www.minecraft...kin-by-zaros25/ click this link to view my skin. Sorry for all of theextra trouble you may have to go through.
Biography (Minimum 400 words. Cannot include loved ones being killed, kidnapped, tortured, or the like, unless you can do it in a non-cliche manner.):
Zaros' life began in the simple town of Ghreenfields. His parents loved him dearly and taught him many things about the world around him. He had many friends growing up and also got into a bit of trouble. He attended school and was at the top of his class. He learned about alchemy, and how to read and write. Life was good for him. He grew up to the age of fourteen and was sent to college. the college that he attended was called Yellowroot University. There he studied alchemy and potion brewing. He attended all of his classes. He became one of the top students in all of his classes.
Zaros had completed his studies at the University and went back home. Because he did not make notes ofthe magic he learned he had forgotten what he had learned, but it didn't matter anyways. He spent his seventeenth and eighteenth years back at Ghreenfields with his parents. They told each other stories of what They had seen, or heard, or done while Zaros was at college. Zaros shared some, but not all, of his knowledge with his parents. Then when he turned 19 he moved to Horium. He originally thought it a mistake because of the apocalypse which had recently occured There, and proceeded to flee to theUnderground City. He continued to help people whenever They needed it.
What is your character’s main goal? (Motivation): Create potions and research ways to make new potions to better mankind. Maybe some day to become a great scholar and also be involved in the government.
Strengths (Both physical and personality): Strong-willed, Smart, Brave, Strong, Good at talking and interacting with others, Fairly attractive, Good at ending confrontations without violence, Charitable (To an extent).
Weaknesses (Both physical and personality): Thinks that others view him as not good, Not the best with a sword, Can become over enthusiastic, Short tempered, Has a hard time agreeing with new ideas, Struggles with making new friends and acquaintances, Can sometimes do the wrong thing if his temper is broken.
Will your character likely join an existing faction? If so, which? If not, why not?: No, simply because none of these factions represent who I am as a character and I don't want to be a part of a group of murderers. I may consider joining Vespero Scath but hopefully can manage on my own.
Does your character have any connections to currently-existing characters or characters yet to be accepted? If so, which? (See “Character Linking Aid”. Please post a link to the topic.): Possibly, we will have to see if he happens to "bump into" some "family" or "friends" later on.
In-Character-Responses (ICRs. For each scenario, write at least a paragraph describing entirely in-character how your character would respond to the situation.Your ICRs will be used to see how well you can RP. Please post them as if in IC chat. An example can be found after this form.)
Walking down the streets of the Undercity, you encounter a pair of heavily armed and armoured men harassing a young girl.
*(Zaros (Me)): Hello sirs, what is the meaning of this.
*(Man #1): *Looks at Zaros* What are you talking about. You best be on your way laddy.
*(Me): Listen sir, this girl hasn't done anything to you has she *Says last line looking at girl*
*(Girl): Yeah I haven't.
*(Man #2): Well this doesn't concern you. Leave, or this will turn violent.
*(Me): Listen, if I give you this here ruby, will you let her be?
*(Man #1): If you give us that ruby, you can leave here with your life. *Draws sword but doesn't make a move on Zaros*
*(Me): *Draws sword, and inconspicuously places hand on a bottle* Try me!!!
*(Man #1): *Lunges at Zaros, but barely misses, putting a tear in his new shirt.
*(Me): Hey man this is a new shirt!!
*(Man #2): *Pulls out axe and swings at Zaros' head* Arrgh!!!!!
*(Me): *Throws bottle down, which causes a cloud of thick smoke allowing Zaros to flee with the girl.
You’ve been lost in the tunnels for nearly a week without food, and come across a small independent settlement.
*(Me): Hello, does anyone have any food?
*(Farmer): I do, but it depends on who is asking.
*(Me): I am sir. I have been lost in the tunnels for almost a weeks time.
*(Farmer): Ahh, I can see by your face.
*(Me): Can you spare me some food please?
*(Farmer): Well obviously I have to feed my family. Is there anything that you can give to me that I need?
*(Me): I have this substance I created back at my home. *Pulls out white powder*
*(Farmer): *Stares at the powder, then Zaros, then the powder* What does it do?
*(Me): Watch! *Places the powder on the crops and they grow instantly*
*(Farmer): Wow!! You can have a loaf of bread and a pork chop if you tell me what that substance is and how to make it.
*(Me): Its called bonemeal. Here have the rest of mine. All you need to do is crush bones to make it.
*(Farmer): *Hands Zaros the food* Have a nice day sonny.
You pass an old man lying on the side of the street, begging for food.
*(Old Man): Hello good sir, do you have any food for an old beggar?
*(Me): *Thinks for a second*
*(Old Man): Please kind sir, I am starving.
*(Me): *Hands the man food*
*(Old Man): Thank you.
*(Me): Your Welcome.
In a tavern, a slightly inebriated fellow insults your mother.
*(Drunk): *Says something about Zaros' mother that is insulting*
*(Zaros(Me)): I think that you should take that back.
*(Drunk): *Lashes out at Zaros knocking him unconscious*
*(Me): Ugh.
*(Drunk): *Goes through Zaros' pockets*
*(Me): *Grabs drunk and throws a potion of blindness in his face*
*(Drunk): Argh!!! I can't see!!!
*(Me): *Hits the drunk and takes back what is mine*
*(Me): Don't worry, it will wear off soon enough. *Leaves bar*
You take a liking to a beautiful necklace a passing woman wears.
*(Me): Hello ma'am, where did you get that necklace?
*(Lady): I got it from the Duke of Pork.
*(Me): Ahh I see, I really do like that necklace.
*(Lady): Leave or I will call the guards.
*(Me): Alright, alright you win.
Do you have any questions about the Server or our lore? No, no I do not.
Other notes: Rule #7 is my favorite rule.
Secret Underground Melon Farms
Please note that my parents are divorced and I have not got minecraft at my father's house so if I am inactive for multiple days it is because I am at his house. other than that I will be on regularly at my mother's house.
I am sorry that my first redo was a horrible failure. I really did try to take it with a pinch of salt, and I hope that my second redo was good. I tried to incorporate my knowledge of potion making and farming to help out. I really do hope that you like it!!!! Thanks for taking the time to re-read my app twice, it really means alot to me.
Everything posted in red is what I changed on my first redo.
Everything posted in blue is what I changed on my second redo.
Well, I looked over your latest try and it is better, though I think your actual rp could be improved, but maybe it would be better to improve IG don't you think? I saw how you said that no one wanted to talk to you in your last server, and is there any reason for that? I suppose your app is now up to scratch to be accepted, but on the server be friendly, be understanding and considerate of others, follow the rules of course and it will go awesomely. Welcome to the server! I'll add you as soon as possible.
We welcome all of the new players here and are sorry that we are in that state that we are in. Please stick around while we get everything back into gear.
Happy Holidays!
If you are yet to be accepted to the server, hop on the forums and make an account anyways. Lend your ideas and in the Server Suggestionst thread. Every person counts!
Your application as a whole was decent. As you mentioned, your bio was a little short (345 words) and I found yours ICR's to be a little short as well. Go back through, make a couple of corrections (grammar), and next time you will most likely be accepted.
Amanwithaplan: Accepted
You were accepted by Jidek earlier but since then he has been a bit inactive. You have been added to the whitelist!
The_CavDubstep: Accepted
Once again, sorry for the wait! Your application looks very solid, welcome to the server!
Note:
If you believe that your application was skipped over, missed, or the whitelister handling it has become inactive, send me a pm. I will be able to get a whitelister on the job.
Once again, sorry for the wait! Your application looks very solid, welcome to the server! I loved the part about the melons. Your grammar and spelling is a bit off, so be careful. You've been added to the whitelist!