Spyro (Glorgan( I think that's how you spell it)), I could make you one if.. you Can't find a good one :unsure.gif: Unless... YOU HATE MY SKIN! (No Homo)
15 minutes later... Finished! How do I put it up on a post, so I can show you guys. It ain't great, but it's better.
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OMG OMG OMG I just saw a blue brick on a white building OMG OMG OMG!!!!!!
If anyone wants my own personal advice on writing a good background, or if you wanna comment on my advice as I take it myself and one major point is taking criticism, here's a link to the new thread I just posted so I don't have to re-post my advice for everyone's story I review (out of kindness, perhaps):
If anyone wants my own personal advice on writing a good background, or if you wanna comment on my advice as I take it myself and one major point is taking criticism, here's a link to the new thread I just posted so I don't have to re-post my advice for everyone's story I review (out of kindness, perhaps):
Give me your thoughts on my background, Took me roughly around 10 minutes to think this up.
Background: Since his childhood, Ratatosk was trained in the arts of stealth and assassination by his Father, Kranos. Though his Mother, Colette hated the fact that her son was becoming a cold blooded killer, Ratatosk was determined to carry on his family's legacy of Assassin's. Then one day, At the age of 15 his mother is murdered. And the murderer is none other than his Father. And from that day on, Ratatosk has made his goal to seek vengeance on his Father, No matter what the cost. (ooc; Yeah I know generic and what not but, That's the best I can come up with for an assassin's backgroung.)
Ram upgrade is complete, Echo4sierra is now working with Permissions. We're doing a test run of 60 slots: if it lags too much, we're going back down to 40.
Nether is enabled and being tested by Echo4sierra right now. With luck, it will all work out. Cross your fingers. If not, we'll still have a much smoother ride.
OOC: *** (not wanted on interwebs)
IGN: NarwalNinja
Sources: Yes, Jackamatack, as soon as he showed it to me I fell all over it.
Why do you want to join: I have looking for a roleplay server for some time now. If I was to get in, it would be a wonderful summer project. Also, I am a great actor and have been practicing for a role playing server for months, by pretending to be characters on SMP servers :tongue.gif:.
IC:
Name: Quynn Kelvhan
IC Age: Depending on life span. 18 in human years.
Race: Elf
Profession: Skirmisher, however I will be a Forager if enough Skirmish.
Background: I was born in the forest by parents, which I could never remember. I was found, and raised by foster dwarfs until age 10. I was taught by them about axes, hammers, and clubs, but always took interest into bow and arrow. I became a sharp shooter am I still am to this day. When I was there they offered me cooked pork and leather. I rejected and became a vegetarian. I would always be at the forest edge, playing with the animals such as cows and sheep. I LOVE mushroom soup. At age 7, my foster parents found out I was a elf and hid me from the rest of the dwarfs. I always wore a hat to cover my pointy ears. My foster parents taught me how to build, and the glory of gold. I still love gold, because it reminds me of my foster parents. 3 years later I was discovered, and I was kicked out of the clan and my parents were executed. I now despise dwarfs, and live with other elves. I am training right now to be a herbalist, I can heal people in wars or use my archery skills in war. I am also willing to do other odd jobs, such as repairing or building houses.I enjoy other species such as human, but I don't like dwarfs, bandits, and demons. I don't take much interest in vampires, but they can live without me. I am ALWAYS looking for an adventure.
Ram upgrade is complete, Echo4sierra is now working with Permissions. We're doing a test run of 60 slots: if it lags too much, we're going back down to 40.
Nether is enabled and being tested by Echo4sierra right now. With luck, it will all work out. Cross your fingers. If not, we'll still have a much smoother ride.
Ram upgrade is complete, Echo4sierra is now working with Permissions. We're doing a test run of 60 slots: if it lags too much, we're going back down to 40.
Nether is enabled and being tested by Echo4sierra right now. With luck, it will all work out. Cross your fingers. If not, we'll still have a much smoother ride.
OOC
IGN:Butamou
Sources: found this forum, while searching for servers on the minecraftforum.net
IC (In Character)
Why do you want to join: this server seem very interesting and i would like to play a serious rp'ing server. i want to try something new for once, and give RP'ing a try.
Name: Volke (if this is taken "Volug" will be the back up)
IC Age: ??? (Unknown, will get into detail in background)
Race: Bandit
Profession: The higher
Background: Volke ( or volug) was born deep in the woods, nearby but at the same time far away from a human settlement. he was abandon, left to die. He was picked up by wolves and was with his "family" until he was a young boy, becuase of this he has no knowledge of his age (becuase wolves are unable to talk or tell time) Volke knows nothing of his past nor has any clue of it. He was left with nothing, nude and left on the grass to rot or get eaten by on going animals passing by. The wolves raised him to be one of their own; Strong; fast; a good hunter; one of the pack, but yet distant from others. at an young age volke always decided to cover his face, to hide a scar across his entire head. which he got in a fight with the wolf pack leader. While hunting on his own volke was shot by an passing arrow, he notice, he ran right into a battle between hired bandits and the just defeated human army. the bandits treated the boy and decided to educate and train the boy becuase he showed amazing potential, due to how he was raised. Volke spent years with the bandits against his will, and learn a lot from them, especially how to make a living in this world. Now his story starts.. in the Kingdom of Aeonis, after returning from a trip, he decided to see if his old family, the wolves were still around, when he found them murdered, dead, killed by a poacher. After taking his revenge of the hunter and his family volke returns back to the bandits base.
OOC: Out of character
IGN: _Wesker_
Sources: Did anyone recommend this server to you? If so, who?
I'm guessing the forums? xD
Why do you want to join: 2-3 sentences about why you want to join
I've been looking for a reasonable, Serious role playing sever to join, But the only other one I saw you actually have to PAY to rank up in classes and what not, So this sever seem's like a great choice
IC (In Character)
Name: Ratatosk
IC Age: 27
Race: (ooc, Are Assassin's considered a race? Or a class?) Assassin's
Profession: Reinforces
Background: Since his childhood, Ratatosk was trained in the arts of stealth and assassination by his Father, Kranos. Though his Mother, Colette hated the fact that her son was becoming a cold blooded killer, Ratatosk was determined to carry on his family's legacy of Assassin's. Then one day, At the age of 15 his mother is murdered. And the murderer is none other than his Father. And from that day on, Ratatosk has made his goal to seek vengeance on his Father, No matter what the cost. (ooc; Yeah I know generic and what not but, That's the best I can come up with for an assassin's background.)
Ram upgrade is complete, Echo4sierra is now working with Permissions. We're doing a test run of 60 slots: if it lags too much, we're going back down to 40.
Nether is enabled and being tested by Echo4sierra right now. With luck, it will all work out. Cross your fingers. If not, we'll still have a much smoother ride.
but cant wait for nords to land i want to be allies with the dwarves but a certain dwarf almost ruined that *coughs*Valaya*coughs*******coughs*jk about the ***** thing*coughs*I still love you*coughs*but if you ****ING husban smart's off the allies is off*coughs*
Give me your thoughts on my background, Took me roughly around 10 minutes to think this up.
Background: Since his childhood, Ratatosk was trained in the arts of stealth and assassination by his Father, Kranos. Though his Mother, Colette hated the fact that her son was becoming a cold blooded killer, Ratatosk was determined to carry on his family's legacy of Assassin's. Then one day, At the age of 15 his mother is murdered. And the murderer is none other than his Father. And from that day on, Ratatosk has made his goal to seek vengeance on his Father, No matter what the cost. (ooc; Yeah I know generic and what not but, That's the best I can come up with for an assassin's backgroung.)
"Since his childhood, Ratatosk was trained in the arts of stealth and assassination by his Father, Kranos." This is actually not bad. Yes, true it may be a tad generic, but it's not awful either. Generic things are okay in moderation. Many assassins are trained from birth by a guild, however, to eliminate family ties, making their loyalty only to the guild. This is just historically speaking, however, and history and RP don't exactly always get along, so it's really fine.
"Though his Mother, Colette hated the fact that her son was becoming a cold blooded killer, Ratatosk was determined to carry on his family's legacy of Assassin's." I get this, but why (if she disliked it so much) did she marry his father? Perhaps it should rather be he trained him without his mother's knowledge, and even though he knew his mother disliked the idea, he was determined not to let his father down?
"Then one day, At the age of 15 his mother is murdered. And the murderer is none other than his Father. And from that day on, Ratatosk has made his goal to seek vengeance on his Father, No matter what the cost." This I really don't like - and I'll tell you why.
1) I find it odd that his father would kill his mother. You'll need a REALLY good reason to pull this off.
2) I think that it might be a little more impactful if the son himself were ordered to kill his own love, in which he denies and his father banishes him, so he goes to find assassins who will accept him, for it's all he knows. But that's just what I might do.
3) Honestly, I think this would just make him NOT want to be an assassin, because I find it would probably disgust him to see what he'll become. For this, I would personally re-write the story to make him trained in some OTHER faction, in which he is disgusted and turns to the assassin's to help him get back at his old teachers/father.
I hope you don't mind me posting this here, but I would like people to be able to learn from this as well.
* * * I am not now, nor have I ever been a part of this servers staff. I do not own, moderate or administrate, nor am I an operator. This is purely my opinion and in no way are you obligated to even acknowledge my existence, much less take this advice. It is exactly that - advice. These are not rules, nor will they directly affect your being accepted on this server. Thank you for your time and patience.
15 minutes later... Finished! How do I put it up on a post, so I can show you guys. It ain't great, but it's better.
Naw your stuff only makes up a portion of it :wink.gif:
http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/380735-yipiyips-how-to-write-proper-backgrounds-for-rp-servers/page__p__5434846#entry5434846
Give me your thoughts on my background, Took me roughly around 10 minutes to think this up.
Background: Since his childhood, Ratatosk was trained in the arts of stealth and assassination by his Father, Kranos. Though his Mother, Colette hated the fact that her son was becoming a cold blooded killer, Ratatosk was determined to carry on his family's legacy of Assassin's. Then one day, At the age of 15 his mother is murdered. And the murderer is none other than his Father. And from that day on, Ratatosk has made his goal to seek vengeance on his Father, No matter what the cost. (ooc; Yeah I know generic and what not but, That's the best I can come up with for an assassin's backgroung.)
Ram upgrade is complete, Echo4sierra is now working with Permissions. We're doing a test run of 60 slots: if it lags too much, we're going back down to 40.
Nether is enabled and being tested by Echo4sierra right now. With luck, it will all work out. Cross your fingers. If not, we'll still have a much smoother ride.
IGN: NarwalNinja
Sources: Yes, Jackamatack, as soon as he showed it to me I fell all over it.
Why do you want to join: I have looking for a roleplay server for some time now. If I was to get in, it would be a wonderful summer project. Also, I am a great actor and have been practicing for a role playing server for months, by pretending to be characters on SMP servers :tongue.gif:.
IC:
Name: Quynn Kelvhan
IC Age: Depending on life span. 18 in human years.
Race: Elf
Profession: Skirmisher, however I will be a Forager if enough Skirmish.
Background: I was born in the forest by parents, which I could never remember. I was found, and raised by foster dwarfs until age 10. I was taught by them about axes, hammers, and clubs, but always took interest into bow and arrow. I became a sharp shooter am I still am to this day. When I was there they offered me cooked pork and leather. I rejected and became a vegetarian. I would always be at the forest edge, playing with the animals such as cows and sheep. I LOVE mushroom soup. At age 7, my foster parents found out I was a elf and hid me from the rest of the dwarfs. I always wore a hat to cover my pointy ears. My foster parents taught me how to build, and the glory of gold. I still love gold, because it reminds me of my foster parents. 3 years later I was discovered, and I was kicked out of the clan and my parents were executed. I now despise dwarfs, and live with other elves. I am training right now to be a herbalist, I can heal people in wars or use my archery skills in war. I am also willing to do other odd jobs, such as repairing or building houses.I enjoy other species such as human, but I don't like dwarfs, bandits, and demons. I don't take much interest in vampires, but they can live without me. I am ALWAYS looking for an adventure.
I WUV YOU!
Ill fill a slot
IGN:Butamou
Sources: found this forum, while searching for servers on the minecraftforum.net
IC (In Character)
Why do you want to join: this server seem very interesting and i would like to play a serious rp'ing server. i want to try something new for once, and give RP'ing a try.
Name: Volke (if this is taken "Volug" will be the back up)
IC Age: ??? (Unknown, will get into detail in background)
Race: Bandit
Profession: The higher
Background: Volke ( or volug) was born deep in the woods, nearby but at the same time far away from a human settlement. he was abandon, left to die. He was picked up by wolves and was with his "family" until he was a young boy, becuase of this he has no knowledge of his age (becuase wolves are unable to talk or tell time) Volke knows nothing of his past nor has any clue of it. He was left with nothing, nude and left on the grass to rot or get eaten by on going animals passing by. The wolves raised him to be one of their own; Strong; fast; a good hunter; one of the pack, but yet distant from others. at an young age volke always decided to cover his face, to hide a scar across his entire head. which he got in a fight with the wolf pack leader. While hunting on his own volke was shot by an passing arrow, he notice, he ran right into a battle between hired bandits and the just defeated human army. the bandits treated the boy and decided to educate and train the boy becuase he showed amazing potential, due to how he was raised. Volke spent years with the bandits against his will, and learn a lot from them, especially how to make a living in this world. Now his story starts.. in the Kingdom of Aeonis, after returning from a trip, he decided to see if his old family, the wolves were still around, when he found them murdered, dead, killed by a poacher. After taking his revenge of the hunter and his family volke returns back to the bandits base.
IGN: _Wesker_
Sources: Did anyone recommend this server to you? If so, who?
I'm guessing the forums? xD
Why do you want to join: 2-3 sentences about why you want to join
I've been looking for a reasonable, Serious role playing sever to join, But the only other one I saw you actually have to PAY to rank up in classes and what not, So this sever seem's like a great choice
IC (In Character)
Name: Ratatosk
IC Age: 27
Race: (ooc, Are Assassin's considered a race? Or a class?) Assassin's
Profession: Reinforces
Background: Since his childhood, Ratatosk was trained in the arts of stealth and assassination by his Father, Kranos. Though his Mother, Colette hated the fact that her son was becoming a cold blooded killer, Ratatosk was determined to carry on his family's legacy of Assassin's. Then one day, At the age of 15 his mother is murdered. And the murderer is none other than his Father. And from that day on, Ratatosk has made his goal to seek vengeance on his Father, No matter what the cost. (ooc; Yeah I know generic and what not but, That's the best I can come up with for an assassin's background.)
Any time estimate on when the server will be up?
Don't threaten Valaya bro...
Nope. The permissions can be tricky. And its best he makes sure it totally work, or we will be unable to do just about anything.
Daaaawwww, thanks. :-P
One, you can always look at my post:
http://www.minecraftforum.net/topic/380735-yipiyips-how-to-write-proper-backgrounds-for-rp-servers/page__p__5434846#entry5434846
Because I tried to make it as generic as possible to be used with as many people as possible. That being said, I don't want to repeat anything there, so I'll do a personal review instead.
"Since his childhood, Ratatosk was trained in the arts of stealth and assassination by his Father, Kranos." This is actually not bad. Yes, true it may be a tad generic, but it's not awful either. Generic things are okay in moderation. Many assassins are trained from birth by a guild, however, to eliminate family ties, making their loyalty only to the guild. This is just historically speaking, however, and history and RP don't exactly always get along, so it's really fine.
"Though his Mother, Colette hated the fact that her son was becoming a cold blooded killer, Ratatosk was determined to carry on his family's legacy of Assassin's." I get this, but why (if she disliked it so much) did she marry his father? Perhaps it should rather be he trained him without his mother's knowledge, and even though he knew his mother disliked the idea, he was determined not to let his father down?
"Then one day, At the age of 15 his mother is murdered. And the murderer is none other than his Father. And from that day on, Ratatosk has made his goal to seek vengeance on his Father, No matter what the cost." This I really don't like - and I'll tell you why.
1) I find it odd that his father would kill his mother. You'll need a REALLY good reason to pull this off.
2) I think that it might be a little more impactful if the son himself were ordered to kill his own love, in which he denies and his father banishes him, so he goes to find assassins who will accept him, for it's all he knows. But that's just what I might do.
3) Honestly, I think this would just make him NOT want to be an assassin, because I find it would probably disgust him to see what he'll become. For this, I would personally re-write the story to make him trained in some OTHER faction, in which he is disgusted and turns to the assassin's to help him get back at his old teachers/father.
I hope you don't mind me posting this here, but I would like people to be able to learn from this as well.
* * * I am not now, nor have I ever been a part of this servers staff. I do not own, moderate or administrate, nor am I an operator. This is purely my opinion and in no way are you obligated to even acknowledge my existence, much less take this advice. It is exactly that - advice. These are not rules, nor will they directly affect your being accepted on this server. Thank you for your time and patience.
Did it work? Sorry, i'm new at this.