The Meaning of Life, the Universe, and Everything.
Join Date:
9/2/2011
Posts:
93
Minecraft:
Scorpi15
Member Details
((CDM you can control my character be the time being because I will be having computer problems. No severe damage/death or stuff like that, but yeah.))
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In the beginning the universe was created. This has made a lot of people very angry and has been widely regarded as a bad move.
-Douglas Adams, Restaurant at the End of the Universe
We all start running deeper into the cave. I look around to see if everyone had made it. Everyone except a Private who had taken a needle to the leg had gotten away.
"The cave entrance was too small for a Hunter to get in." I tell the others "But there is still a problem. I have no idea if this cave has another exit. Captain, I want you and Warrant Officer Jackson to search this cave for another exit; the rest of you stay with me. We're going to make sure no Covenant follow us."
"Yessir!" the Captain replies, before walking away.
I tell everyone to reload their guns and get ready for some more fighting.
name: alexander(or alex)
age:25
rank: corporal 3rd class
occupation:assault
branch:marine
bio:alexander joined the military the day he became eligible, and has gained a good reputation among other marines, he participated in many battles with covenant on kholo, but his tendency to crack under pressure made it rare that he got promotions, and that is why he is a corporal third class, his 7 years of experience meant that he was to be tested to become an odst, but unfortunately, the covenant attack on reach came before his testing could begin.
name: Alexander(or Alex)
age: 25
rank: Corporal 3rd class
occupation: Assault
branch: Marine
bio: Alexander joined the military the day he became eligible, and has gained a good reputation among other marines, he participated in many battles with Covenant on Kholo, but his tendency to crack under pressure made it rare that he got promotions, and that is why he is a Corporal third class, his 7 years of experience meant that he was to be tested to become an ODST, but unfortunately, the Covenant attack on Reach came before his testing could begin.
((That's just no. Just no. Okay lets put up the list.
1. Bad grammar. (No capital letters = bad grammar. The whole bio is one long sentence = Not a proper paragraph, and epic grammar fail.)
2. It don't make no sense your bio. (If you did not catch that it means that your whole bio does not make sense.)
3. You may have good spelling, but you suck at correcting your grammar.
4. I had to go through your bio and fix all the non existent capitals.
Overall, that is a big fat DENIED!))
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Absol | Professional Artist
#359; The Disaster Pokemon
Swift as the wind, Absol races through fields and mountains.
Its curved, bow-like horn is acutely sensitive to the
1.Fixable
2.Grammar wise or lore wise? I am guessing grammar wise, That is again fixable. If it is lore wise though, then how?
3.I get that sometimes
4.Why? I could do it myself if you just asked me to.
I am usually not very concerned with my grammar(I dont type like a five your old though.) but all you need to do is tell me and ill be more careful about it. If you are going to give me another chance, great, if not, goodbye.
Name:Alexander
Age:25
Rank:Corporal
Occupation: Assault
Branch: Marine
Bio:Corporal Alexander joined the marines at age 20, and would have climbed the ranks quickly. The only thing that kept him from making sergeant was his tendency to crack under pressure. Alexander fought several battles on the planet Kholo, and was one of the few that escaped. His 5 years of experience make him a reliable soldier.
(If you have never heard of planet Kholo. Watch 'halo the return' on halo waypoint or on youtube if you can find it, it will explain a lot.)
((Okay! Now, just one more thing before you can start roleplaying, you'll need to have at least 11 posts so you don't have the ten post a day restriction.))
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Absol | Professional Artist
#359; The Disaster Pokemon
Swift as the wind, Absol races through fields and mountains.
Its curved, bow-like horn is acutely sensitive to the
The Meaning of Life, the Universe, and Everything.
Join Date:
4/9/2012
Posts:
44
Minecraft:
BaneofSnails
Member Details
((sorry about having a terrible app, I'm really bad at summaries.))
Name: Ōkuno Kurasshu (Ōkuno)
Rank: Minor
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Race: Sangheili
Occupation: Air Assault
Bio: Ōkuno joined the military as a pilot, but there never seemed to be enough aircraft in the ship that he was stationed on, so he would often fight as a foot soldier.
Whenever there were ships open, Ōkuno would be sent on high threat level missions and the eventually crash which, even though he's a good pilot, didn't sit well with his commanding officer.
Ōkuno was on foot during the battle of reach, due to a lack of aircraft, and was in a group mixed between elites and some brutes that they had taken command of.
The elites numbers were thinned from a skirmish and the brutes, in their hatred of the elites, attacked the elites killing them all except for Ōkuno.
He had escaped into a nearby cave.
What the hell is a Corporal third class? Only Petty Officers get third classes.
((I got messed up, but if you play Halo 3, there is corporal 2nd class, or corporal grade 2. But i messed up and assumed that there was a corporal grade 3, like an idiot. Also, can you guys approve(I am assuming approve means to like, or press the green upward arrow in the bottom corner.) my comments so i can get the 11 approved comments so that i can post more than 10 times a day?))
-Douglas Adams, Restaurant at the End of the Universe
We all start running deeper into the cave. I look around to see if everyone had made it. Everyone except a Private who had taken a needle to the leg had gotten away.
"The cave entrance was too small for a Hunter to get in." I tell the others "But there is still a problem. I have no idea if this cave has another exit. Captain, I want you and Warrant Officer Jackson to search this cave for another exit; the rest of you stay with me. We're going to make sure no Covenant follow us."
"Yessir!" the Captain replies, before walking away.
I tell everyone to reload their guns and get ready for some more fighting.
Cpt Jake
age:25
rank: corporal 3rd class
occupation:assault
branch:marine
bio:alexander joined the military the day he became eligible, and has gained a good reputation among other marines, he participated in many battles with covenant on kholo, but his tendency to crack under pressure made it rare that he got promotions, and that is why he is a corporal third class, his 7 years of experience meant that he was to be tested to become an odst, but unfortunately, the covenant attack on reach came before his testing could begin.
((That's just no. Just no. Okay lets put up the list.
1. Bad grammar. (No capital letters = bad grammar. The whole bio is one long sentence = Not a proper paragraph, and epic grammar fail.)
2. It don't make no sense your bio. (If you did not catch that it means that your whole bio does not make sense.)
3. You may have good spelling, but you suck at correcting your grammar.
4. I had to go through your bio and fix all the non existent capitals.
Overall, that is a big fat DENIED!))
Cpt Jake
2.Grammar wise or lore wise? I am guessing grammar wise, That is again fixable. If it is lore wise though, then how?
3.I get that sometimes
4.Why? I could do it myself if you just asked me to.
I am usually not very concerned with my grammar(I dont type like a five your old though.) but all you need to do is tell me and ill be more careful about it. If you are going to give me another chance, great, if not, goodbye.
Cpt Jake
Age:25
Rank:Corporal
Occupation: Assault
Branch: Marine
Bio:Corporal Alexander joined the marines at age 20, and would have climbed the ranks quickly. The only thing that kept him from making sergeant was his tendency to crack under pressure. Alexander fought several battles on the planet Kholo, and was one of the few that escaped. His 5 years of experience make him a reliable soldier.
(If you have never heard of planet Kholo. Watch 'halo the return' on halo waypoint or on youtube if you can find it, it will explain a lot.)
Name: Ōkuno Kurasshu (Ōkuno)
Rank: Minor
Age: 32
Gender: Male
Race: Sangheili
Occupation: Air Assault
Bio: Ōkuno joined the military as a pilot, but there never seemed to be enough aircraft in the ship that he was stationed on, so he would often fight as a foot soldier.
Whenever there were ships open, Ōkuno would be sent on high threat level missions and the eventually crash which, even though he's a good pilot, didn't sit well with his commanding officer.
Ōkuno was on foot during the battle of reach, due to a lack of aircraft, and was in a group mixed between elites and some brutes that they had taken command of.
The elites numbers were thinned from a skirmish and the brutes, in their hatred of the elites, attacked the elites killing them all except for Ōkuno.
He had escaped into a nearby cave.
What the hell is a Corporal third class? Only Petty Officers get third classes.
((I got messed up, but if you play Halo 3, there is corporal 2nd class, or corporal grade 2. But i messed up and assumed that there was a corporal grade 3, like an idiot. Also, can you guys approve(I am assuming approve means to like, or press the green upward arrow in the bottom corner.) my comments so i can get the 11 approved comments so that i can post more than 10 times a day?))