Story
There was a plane over an island heading somewhere. Until the captain rushed up to a person named Bryce. As the captain said in a panic "SIR! SOMETHINGS GONE WRONG WITH THE PLANE!" everyone started panicing. "Captain, take me to the cockpit!" Said Bryce in a panic. The whole plane was covered in darkness. Then suddenly, the plane was forced to the ground! CRASH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Not many survived.
Rules:
1. No Godmodding
2. Stay in Charater. When speaking out of character (OOC) use () between your chat like this: (Im awesome in rl)
3. XXX is aloud but dont share the details
4. When you die you die. No coming back to life. When you die you can make a new character though!
5. No cursing
6. No saying someone dies. Only I can do that.
7. Obey the rules at all time if you don't. You will get banned from the roleplay
Races
Human: You know what a Human is!
Demon: A creature that lives in hell.
Sprilog: A slender creature that has green skin. They also act like humans.
Dragon: A giant beast that can shoot fire.
Classes
Pastor: A person that teaches people about God and Jesus
Citizen: A person that regulary lives in a village
Farmer: A person who works at a farm
Warrior: A person who is trained to fight
Bandit: A person who steals and breaks the law on purpose
Other: If you choose other you have to make up your own race. (If its good enough I may put it on here!)
Application
Name:
Race:
Class:
Power (Optional) (Dont Choose an Overpowered Power or You Wont be Accepted):
Good or bad:
Backstory (Optional):
My Application
Name: Alex
Race: Human
Class: Pastor
Power (Optional) (Dont Choose an Overpowered Power or You Wont be Accepted): Holy Light
I was preaching in a church when I felt a demons power under the floor. I stopped preaching for a second. "Everyone get out of the church there is a demon hiding under the floor," I seriously said. As everyone left I used my holy light power to drag the demon out of the ground. I battled the demon and I figured out that it was a weak demon.
Then I killed the demon. So I left the church and went back home.
Suddenly, black clouds formed. Black lightning shot from the sky. At the village someone said "Oh no darkness lightning everyone get inside!!!" So everyone evacuated into there house.
((woa... Just woa... I think if you are going to have "a very serious roleplay" You need to get rid of all of the grammatical errors, loosen up on the no cursing (most serious rpers I know like to curse...), and most importantly, LENGTHEN THE FRICKEN STORY!
Also, here's some more tips:
1) Where are we? An island? Clear that up
2) What is the significance of this flight? Where are they going?
3) Needs a lot more atmosphere. Was the plane squeaky clean? Is this a steam punk rp? What was the weather like? What time was it? Stuff like that
4)Where the hell did the demons and stuff come from?! This is modern, not fantasy. If you want to make a combo, give us a description of the world. What's the name of this planet? It certainly isn't earth...
5) Classes are generally unrealistic. That section should be changed to strengths and weaknesses
Let's move onto the app...
6) WAIT! wait... Where the hell did powers come from?
7) Good or bad? Are you kidding me? That should become apparent through rping. Also, WHY would they turn against their friends? No one is just "bad", everyone has reasons.
8) Back story should NEVER be optional!
Hmm... I think that's everything I can help you with... You should probably try other people for help too...))
Story
There was a plane over an island heading somewhere. Until the captain rushed up to a person named Bryce. As the captain said in a panic "SIR! SOMETHINGS GONE WRONG WITH THE PLANE!" everyone started panicing. "Captain, take me to the cockpit!" Said Bryce in a panic. The whole plane was covered in darkness. Then suddenly, the plane was forced to the ground! CRASH!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Not many survived.
Rules:
1. No Godmodding
2. Stay in Charater. When speaking out of character (OOC) use () between your chat like this: (Im awesome in rl)
3. XXX is aloud but dont share the details
4. When you die you die. No coming back to life. When you die you can make a new character though!
5. No cursing
6. No saying someone dies. Only I can do that.
7. Obey the rules at all time if you don't. You will get banned from the roleplay
Races
Human: You know what a Human is!
Demon: A creature that lives in hell.
Sprilog: A slender creature that has green skin. They also act like humans.
Dragon: A giant beast that can shoot fire.
Classes
Pastor: A person that teaches people about God and Jesus
Citizen: A person that regulary lives in a village
Farmer: A person who works at a farm
Warrior: A person who is trained to fight
Bandit: A person who steals and breaks the law on purpose
Other: If you choose other you have to make up your own race. (If its good enough I may put it on here!)
Application
Name:
Race:
Class:
Power (Optional) (Dont Choose an Overpowered Power or You Wont be Accepted):
Good or bad:
Backstory (Optional):
My Application
Name: Alex
Race: Human
Class: Pastor
Power (Optional) (Dont Choose an Overpowered Power or You Wont be Accepted): Holy Light
Good or bad: Good
Backstory (Optional):
Then I killed the demon. So I left the church and went back home.
Also, here's some more tips:
1) Where are we? An island? Clear that up
2) What is the significance of this flight? Where are they going?
3) Needs a lot more atmosphere. Was the plane squeaky clean? Is this a steam punk rp? What was the weather like? What time was it? Stuff like that
4)Where the hell did the demons and stuff come from?! This is modern, not fantasy. If you want to make a combo, give us a description of the world. What's the name of this planet? It certainly isn't earth...
5) Classes are generally unrealistic. That section should be changed to strengths and weaknesses
Let's move onto the app...
6) WAIT! wait... Where the hell did powers come from?
7) Good or bad? Are you kidding me? That should become apparent through rping. Also, WHY would they turn against their friends? No one is just "bad", everyone has reasons.
8) Back story should NEVER be optional!
Hmm... I think that's everything I can help you with... You should probably try other people for help too...))
I would join,but not untill you change somethings.
Extreme Christian overtones. If you want to make religion play such a massive part, try to make it equal.
Grammar and spelling. Learn English.
MAKE AN ACTUAL PLOT.
Explain the setting.
Nothing is clear. In fact, it's about as clear as severely cracked glass slathered with mud and feces.