This is a tale of Ancient Times, an Era before the Human and Non-Human worlds were forever divided. Long ago, Holy Knights wielded strong magical abilities to keep barbarians and vagabonds in check in the kingdom of Liones. But an order of knights reign above all of them, even above the Grandmasters. They are known as the Seven Deadly Sins. Escanor, the Lion sin of Pride. Merlin, the Boar sin of Gluttony. Diane, the Serpent sin of Envy. Ban, the Fox sin of Greed. King, the Grizzly sin of Sloth. Gowther, the Ram sin of Lust. And their captain, Meliodas, the Dragon sin of Wrath.
By some divine prank, the Sins have all gone missing. The Holy Knights have been flung into chaos, as the power-hungry knights seek the political power the Sins had. Others are trying to fulfill their duties, uncaring of who takes control. And a third set seek to stop those who would seize the power that which does not belong to them. This has created three factions of Holy Knights- they are called the Knights of Power, (Those that would seek power), the Knights of Order (Those who wish to stop the Knights of Power), and the Knights of the People (Those who tend to their duties as Holy Knights, uncaring of the political situation). This struggle has come to be called the Second Holy War.
Unbeknownst to them, the Sins have been reborn into new vessels by the power of the Goddesses. The new Sins have been distributed to different races- Human, Giant, Fairy, Doll, Witch, Druid, and Demon. The new vessels have gained new powers and abilities that surpass those of the Holy Knights. The new sins must unite in order to bring peace back to Liones and unite the factions. But will their sudden power overwhelm them? Or will they manage to unite and take control of the situation?
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Rules:
1. No Godmodding etc.
2. Standard Forum rules
3. Be nice, especially if you're correcting or complaining.
4. 1 Character per user
5. You can't win every battle. Expect to lose every now and then.
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Explanation of Holy Knights, the Sins and their abilities:
Each Holy Knight is extremely powerful- capable of taking out dozens of humans with ease. Usually with their unique power, which could be almost anything. Examples include Explosion, Rising Tornado, control over insects- it can be nearly anything. It doesnt even have to be lethal- 1 Holy Knight has the ability Link, which allows them to borrow physical strength, durability and the powers of whoever gives them to him willingly. If you want to play as a Holy Knight, you'll have to make our own powers. But powers aren't limited to just one technique- take Explosion. It has variations- Shot Bomb, which makes a line of explosive projectiles and fires them, Chain Explosion, which surrounds the target with many stationary explosive projectiles that go off in a chain, and Brilliant Detonation, which is dozens, if not hundreds of explosive projectiles being fired at once after a short charge time. Often times, your personality also reflects on your power- or vice versa. Though not always. The Holy Knight with the Explosion power is usually monotone, calm, cool and collected- the exact opposite of what the power would imply.
The 7 Deadly Sins, (Wrath, Envy, Greed, Sloth, Lust, Gluttony, and Pride) or the Sins for short, are extremely powerful Holy Knights. Each is branded with a beast on a different place on their body that represents their sin. Their sin is usually appropriate or ironic. Ban's sin, Greed is appropriate because his ability is based on taking an opponent's equipment as well as draining their stamina, power and speed. Gowther's sin, Lust is ironic because he strangely has no emotions whatsoever. Each Sin also has a Sacred Treasure, which is best explained by a quote. "Look at this lake. This represents all the magical power available to a Holy Knight or Sin at any time. Now, with your hands, how much could you take out at once?... With a Sacred Treasure, you're able to take out extraordinary amounts of magical energy in one go." Some of you can have your Sacred Treasures right off the bat, but i want some of you to have to find or make your treasure. You can tell me what it will be, but if you've yet to obtain it, specify that.
Also, if you're a sin, your background should include why you are that particular sin. For instance, King's sin is Sloth. He spent 700 years away from his kingdom after getting amnesia. In the meantime, a demon came around and burned down the Fairy King's Forest. He was charged with Sloth- failing to protect his kingdom- and received the mark of the Grizzly.
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Races:
Demon: Usually very large, unintelligent beasts who crave destruction. A very few can actually take human form as a child (around 10-12 in appearence), and act very much like humans. These versions live for thousands of years. Little is known about the Demon race otherwise.
Druid: Very similar to humans, but their tears can heal grievous wounds and possibly revive the dead. They're also direct counters to people with Demonic powers.
Humans: Standard humans. They must train in order to gain a connection to magic and become Holy Knights.
Witches: Very little is known about witches. They're a sub-race of Humans, and have an inherit connection to magic similar to Holy Knight's magic, but thats it.
Fairies: They look like little kids (8-12 in appearence) and don't age (Also, possibly immune to death via old age. Unsure). They also MIGHT have an innate connection to SOME magic, but this isn't concrete. Also, they can float and fly at will without wings.
Giants: Develop extremely slowly and have a slight magical connection to the earth and rocks, being able to create golem servants while children. (Avg. height ~30 ft.)
Doll: A very unique and rare race, little is known. They're artificial, but resemble humans (have organs and such) and can revive from wounds fatal to humans (A stab to the heart, decapitation (The only Doll in 7DS literally carried his severed head in search of his glasses.).).
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Application:
Name: (Full name, aliases and nicknames)
Age: (Both in age and appearance)
Gender: (Male or female)
Race: (Choose one from the above list)
Appearance: (What you look like + Height. Pictures and a height reference are acceptable.)
Personality: (How you act)
Sin or Holy Knight?:
If Sin, which sin, What beast is your mark, and where is the mark located?:
If Holy Knight, Which faction?:
Equipment: (Armor, weapons, anything you keep on you (For the Sins, this includes your Sacred Treasure, even if you haven't obtained it.).)
Power/Ability: (In it's most basic form and a good description)
Variations?: (I recommend at least 2 variations)
History: (Your life until the start of the RP. For the Sins, this is until you get your beast mark- the sign that you've become a sin- and slightly after.)
Other: (Anything that is worth mentioning but wouldn't fit in any other category.)
Appearance: Richard stands at around 5'11'' feet tall, and weighs around 175 lbs. He has an unassuming frame, as he's quite thin and wiry. In reality, he's quite capable of handling his own in physical combat. He has a few scars from combat, mostly on his chest and arms. Richard has long, silvery-white hair that extends to about shoulder level, though it is occasionally trimmed to prevent it from obscuring his vision. His eyes are a deep blue.
Personality: Richard is very down-to-earth and realistic. He does have aspirations, but reasonable ones that he can reach with enough work and time. He is also quite humble, preferring to do what is asked of him, then leaving. In battle, he is usually silent, only speaking the incantations and such that powers his ability.
Sin or Holy Knight?: Holy Knight, Knight of the People
Equipment: Richard prefers wearing a set of enchanted clothing that provides a good amount of slashing protection, but does nothing to protect against stabbing. It also protects against basic spells and minor abilities, though more powerful strikes will bypass this protection. It does, however, give him complete freedom of movement that regular armor would not provide.
Power/Ability: Stardust - At the core, all of his abilities rely on stardust, that is produced by some attacks, and used up by others. Stardust is a fine, white, glowing dust that lingers in the air for around 10 minutes, after which, it settles onto the ground and loses its properties. It is unclear from where this stardust originates, but it seems to be a magical construct that he uses to channel his power.
Ephermis Edge: The most basic ability in his arsenal. Richard enchants his blade, and causes it to glow white. This increases its cutting power, and causes a trail of stardust to be left in the air. After this, he can use the stardust in the air for his other abilities.
Ring on the Horizon: A similar ability to Ephermis Edge. Richard speaks the incantation and causes his blade to extend up to double its reach. This allows him to surprise opponents during combat, oftentimes catching two or three more opponents in one swing. The blade then retracts to its original size.
Guardian Sign: A defensive ability. Richard uses the stardust in the air to quickly erect a barrier, which he can use to block strikes that he can't otherwise dodge. Since the barrier only lasts for as long as he focuses on it, and because the barrier can be broken with sufficient force, it is best used as a last-second shield, than anything else.
Star Line Orrery: This ability uses all the stardust in the air near Richard to activate. It causes the stardust to compact, then rotate around him, using him as a fixed point. With each rotation and spin, the rate at which it rotates picks up speed. After several rotations, the stardust perforates enemies if they are caught in its path.
Meteor Wing: A pair of wings form on Richard's back, which he then uses to propel himself forward at great speeds, leaving a trail of stardust behind. This ability is best used to charge into enemy ranks and sow discord. The problem with this ability is that it has little maneuverability, so while it can be used for flight, it is best used for short bursts of movement.
History: Richard was born to a rich, noble family. From a young age, he practiced his swordsmanship and combat skills with the tutors and teachers that was provided for him. His parents wanted him to become a Holy Knight, so he did not have too much choice in the matter. In reality, he feels like it's unnecessary, but he doesn't really care too much about it. Despite his apathetic demeanor, he does care for people, as shown when he helped defend a small village in his family's lands.
When he was old enough, he joined the Holy Knights, where he remained at the base rank for a while, due to his satisfaction at a low rank. When the First Holy War began, he simply continued his duties that were expected of him as a Holy Knight. Eventually, he found that to make a real difference, he'd have to work for it, so he begrudgingly did so. When the Second Holy War began, Richard saw that the Holy Knights were neglecting their original tasks, so he took it upon himself to make up for their mistakes. The people needed protecting, so he would help them.
Other: Apologies for the short history. I've felt rather uninspired lately, so if there's anything I've done wrong, feel free to point it out.
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Appearance: Richard stands at around 5'11'' feet tall, and weighs around 175 lbs. He has an unassuming frame, as he's quite thin and wiry. In reality, he's quite capable of handling his own in physical combat. He has a few scars from combat, mostly on his chest and arms. Richard has long, silvery-white hair that extends to about shoulder level, though it is occasionally trimmed to prevent it from obscuring his vision. His eyes are a deep blue.
Personality: Richard is very down-to-earth and realistic. He does have aspirations, but reasonable ones that he can reach with enough work and time. He is also quite humble, preferring to do what is asked of him, then leaving. In battle, he is usually silent, only speaking the incantations and such that powers his ability.
Sin or Holy Knight?: Holy Knight, Knight of the People
Equipment: Richard prefers wearing a set of enchanted clothing that provides a good amount of slashing protection, but does nothing to protect against stabbing. It also protects against basic spells and minor abilities, though more powerful strikes will bypass this protection. It does, however, give him complete freedom of movement that regular armor would not provide.
Power/Ability: Stardust - At the core, all of his abilities rely on stardust, that is produced by some attacks, and used up by others. Stardust is a fine, white, glowing dust that lingers in the air for around 10 minutes, after which, it settles onto the ground and loses its properties. It is unclear from where this stardust originates, but it seems to be a magical construct that he uses to channel his power.
Ephermis Edge: The most basic ability in his arsenal. Richard enchants his blade, and causes it to glow white. This increases its cutting power, and causes a trail of stardust to be left in the air. After this, he can use the stardust in the air for his other abilities.
Ring on the Horizon: A similar ability to Ephermis Edge. Richard speaks the incantation and causes his blade to extend up to double its reach. This allows him to surprise opponents during combat, oftentimes catching two or three more opponents in one swing. The blade then retracts to its original size.
Guardian Sign: A defensive ability. Richard uses the stardust in the air to quickly erect a barrier, which he can use to block strikes that he can't otherwise dodge. Since the barrier only lasts for as long as he focuses on it, and because the barrier can be broken with sufficient force, it is best used as a last-second shield, than anything else.
Star Line Orrery: This ability uses all the stardust in the air near Richard to activate. It causes the stardust to compact, then rotate around him, using him as a fixed point. With each rotation and spin, the rate at which it rotates picks up speed. After several rotations, the stardust perforates enemies if they are caught in its path.
Meteor Wing: A pair of wings form on Richard's back, which he then uses to propel himself forward at great speeds, leaving a trail of stardust behind. This ability is best used to charge into enemy ranks and sow discord. The problem with this ability is that it has little maneuverability, so while it can be used for flight, it is best used for short bursts of movement.
History: Richard was born to a rich, noble family. From a young age, he practiced his swordsmanship and combat skills with the tutors and teachers that was provided for him. His parents wanted him to become a Holy Knight, so he did not have too much choice in the matter. In reality, he feels like it's unnecessary, but he doesn't really care too much about it. Despite his apathetic demeanor, he does care for people, as shown when he helped defend a small village in his family's lands.
When he was old enough, he joined the Holy Knights, where he remained at the base rank for a while, due to his satisfaction at a low rank. When the First Holy War began, he simply continued his duties that were expected of him as a Holy Knight. Eventually, he found that to make a real difference, he'd have to work for it, so he begrudgingly did so. When the Second Holy War began, Richard saw that the Holy Knights were neglecting their original tasks, so he took it upon himself to make up for their mistakes. The people needed protecting, so he would help them.
Other: Apologies for the short history. I've felt rather uninspired lately, so if there's anything I've done wrong, feel free to point it out.
I actually have a few problems with this, but they stem from my mistakes. Sorry. One, i forgot to include the Race category in the application. I assume you're human, though. Second, i failed to specify- the first Holy war happened thousands of years ago- there's no way you could've experienced both unless you're a Fairy, Demon or Giant and got really lucky.
I do have one legitimate concern- Star Line Orrery. The way you word it makes it sound like an insta-kill, even to Holy Knights. I'd very much appreciate clarification to the damage possible with the attack or nerfing it to causing the hits to just sting and be annoying. Also, though i do like seeing a Holy Knight, i'd very much like to have at least a few Sin slots filled. You dont have to, but i'd like it if you changed from a Knight to a Sin.
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Alright, noted. Richard is human, and I'll remove the bits about the first Holy War. I'll make it so that Star Line Orrery functions similarly to a AoE DoT spell for anyone that stays in its radius. It will probably only kill unlucky mooks, but its true purpose would be distracting focus from enemies(it's hard to ignore a shining projectile that constantly tears at your flesh, after all).
As for being a Sin, I can rewrite it so that Richard is a Sin, but I've got a few questions about it. How is one branded a Sin? I know that they're declared that by the Holy Order, but how does this happen? The original post says that the power of the goddesses have been reborn into new vessels, but how so? Do a few Holy Knights just wake up as a vessel, or does the Holy Order brand someone as a Sin, then they get their power?
I'll rewrite after these questions are answered. On a side note, I've been meaning to watch Seven Deadly Sins for a while now, but it's just kinda on my list of animes that I need to sift through at some point.
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Alright, noted. Richard is human, and I'll remove the bits about the first Holy War. I'll make it so that Star Line Orrery functions similarly to a AoE DoT spell for anyone that stays in its radius. It will probably only kill unlucky mooks, but its true purpose would be distracting focus from enemies(it's hard to ignore a shining projectile that constantly tears at your flesh, after all).
As for being a Sin, I can rewrite it so that Richard is a Sin, but I've got a few questions about it. How is one branded a Sin? I know that they're declared that by the Holy Order, but how does this happen? The original post says that the power of the goddesses have been reborn into new vessels, but how so? Do a few Holy Knights just wake up as a vessel, or does the Holy Order brand someone as a Sin, then they get their power?
I'll rewrite after these questions are answered. On a side note, I've been meaning to watch Seven Deadly Sins for a while now, but it's just kinda on my list of animes that I need to sift through at some point.
One is arrested for a crime, and their crime is put under one of the Seven Deadly Sins, and that's what they're arrested for- For instance, killing someone because you're jealous of them, that would fall under Envy. And "Branding" doesnt happen unless the crime they committed is especially heinous. If you do get branded, the mark of a beast is forever on you. I've decided to let the players customize what beast their symbol is, as well as where it is on their body, because all of the Sins' marks in the anime are in different spots. However, If you didn't have the mark beforehand and you become one of the Sins, it will appear on your body. At the same time, you will either gain magical powers or have your powers enhanced to be much more powerful. As for becoming one of the Sins, yes, most of them will just wake up overnight as one of them- and probably not know it. But not all will be holy knights at first, as most Knights are Human, and aside from the Sins, there's only one exception- but they disguised themselves.
I hope this helps.
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Appearance: 6'2 (skin down below) Fit, Strong, if ever takes his armor off, has a six pack, and bulging muscles. but they don't show (Never takes his Armor off in public)
Personality: Over Confident, Cocky, Clever (Acts much like his Father)
Sin or Holy Knight?: Holy Knight
Equipment: Weapon: Arthur's Long Sword Sequence and Golden Armor (Given to him by his Adoptive Father: Arthur Pendragon)
Power/Ability: Full counter:
Counter Vanish: Stops any magic directed at Peter
Counter Revenge: The User turns off his abilities so that he can take damage. After the user has taken enough damage, he charges his blade with power and strikes his enemy with it. This is considered to be the users ultimate attack and has an average survival rate of 0.2%
History: Son of Arthur Pendragon. Peter Always Trained with King Arthur, following his dream to become stronger than his Father. After Arthur Retired, Peter Decided to leave Camelot and go to Liones to full fill his dream of becoming a Holy Knight so that if Arthur ever died he could become King, this happened at the age of 10. Arthur gave Peter his Golden Armor and His Long Sword, Sequence. Peter Ended up full filling his goal of becoming a Holy Knight when he was 13 and was 1 step closer to achieving his dream. Peter becomes a big fan of the Seven Deadly Sins, and always requests to go on missions with them to learn to become stronger. At the age of 16, the king of Liones made him a honorary member of the 7 deadly sins. He Joins them only when they are in need of help.
Other: Learned Full Counter Magic from Meliodas, who was helping him full fill his goal of becoming more powerful than Arthur
Appearance: 6'2 (skin down below) Fit, Strong, if ever takes his armor off, has a six pack, and bulging muscles. but they don't show (Never takes his Armor off in public)
Personality: Over Confident, Cocky, Clever (Acts much like his Father)
Sin or Holy Knight?: Holy Knight
Equipment: Weapon: Arthur's Long Sword Sequence and Golden Armor (Given to him by his Adoptive Father: Arthur Pendragon)
Power/Ability: Full counter:
Counter Vanish: Stops any magic directed at Peter
Counter Revenge: The User turns off his abilities so that he can take damage. After the user has taken enough damage, he charges his blade with power and strikes his enemy with it. This is considered to be the users ultimate attack and has an average survival rate of 0.2%
History: Son of Arthur Pendragon. Peter Always Trained with King Arthur, following his dream to become stronger than his Father. After Arthur Retired, Peter Decided to leave Camelot and go to Liones to full fill his dream of becoming a Holy Knight so that if Arthur ever died he could become King, this happened at the age of 10. Arthur gave Peter his Golden Armor and His Long Sword, Sequence. Peter Ended up full filling his goal of becoming a Holy Knight when he was 13 and was 1 step closer to achieving his dream. Peter becomes a big fan of the Seven Deadly Sins, and always requests to go on missions with them to learn to become stronger. At the age of 16, the king of Liones made him a honorary member of the 7 deadly sins. He Joins them only when they are in need of help.
Other: Learned Full Counter Magic from Meliodas, who was helping him full fill his goal of becoming more powerful than Arthur
Denied.
This is a completely different universe from the anime. It is also NOT minecraft. You also just copy/pasted Meliodas' abilities, and the history is just plain bad.
I'm sorry if i sound mean, but there was no other way to put it. Take tips from CloakedShadow's application before applying again.
I read it again and I agree, its not very good, I respect your decision.
(sorry for the inconvenience)
(this is not me trying to argue with you, sorry if it sounds that way)
I am going to take my time to rewrite the second application, also, I see no one is a sin, except the other guy, would you like me to be a sin? (if I do not see a response, I will write 2 histories and factions and all that little stuff)
Appearance: Fit, looks in his late 20's, no muscles to be seen, short brown hair, 6'4, weighs 250 lb, arms and legs are unusually long, Caucasian
Personality: Over Confident, big ego, Clever, tries to be the best at everything
Sin or Holy Knight?:
Sin: Beast Mark is a Lion (I don't know if the beast marks have to be the same as the anime, so I put a Lion as mine) Located on his Shoulder
Holy Knight: Platinum ranked Holy Knight
Equipment: Holy Knight Gear: Full platinum colored Armor with white trimming, that is not heavy, and a long sword with a silver handle
Sin Gear: Black armor, that is not big, or heavy, allowing Peter to move faster. Along with a sword with a enormously long, with a black handle with white trimming. He obtained it from a druid, who he had faced in battle, and took it as a trophy from battle, then he had a mage
Power/Ability: Foresight: The ability to see your opponents next move before he makes it, it is not automatic, Peter has to do it on will or he can't see it.
Copy Cat: The ability to copy what your enemy is going to do, and make the attack 10x stronger and send the attack at the enemy, although this skill takes up all your energy and makes you temporarily blind, so Peter uses it as his trump card
Amnesia: The ability to see what your enemy is going to do next, and make the enemy forget it, causing the enemy to mess up, leaving the enemy open for a attack
History: Sin History: As a Child, Peter was always the top of his class in everything in his academy: Archery, sword dual-ling, hand-to-hand combat, even in his intellect. Peter always strives to be perfect in everything, since he came from a poor family, he needed all those skills to make money for his family. Once Peter was strong enough, he became a holy knight apprentice, from there, he kept getting stronger and stronger until he became a full fledged holy knight. After 3 years of being a Holy knight, his parents were killed by a group of bandits. Peter was enraged by the incidents, and killed each and every bandit, until everyone who was linked to his parents death were killed. He was sentenced to 10 years of imprisonment, after he was released, the king let him be a holy knight again, as long as he was watched over 24/7. 2 years of being watched over, he was promoted to a Diamond ranked Holy Knight. After promotion, the king made him an offer: Join the sins, and his watch would be over, or continue as a Holy Knight, and be watched for the rest of his life. Peter took the kings offer and became a sin
Holy Knight History: Peter woke up by a river in a different kingdom (not sure if were doing the same kingdoms or not, please be more specific in the future), 5 years ago, with no memory, except he remembered his powers and how to use them. On his wake Peter was outraged and went on a killing spree, seriously injuring 4 diamond ranked holy knights. After that he went to prison for 5 years, then was exiled from that kingdom and came to the kingdom we are based in, and became a holy knight.
Other: I put 2 different histories, 1 is as a sin, the other is me being a holy knight. Sorry the holy knight history was so short, I couldn't think of anything so I put down whatever I could think of. I guess you could use the sin's history and put it as a holy knight instead of a sin.
Denied. From what i can tell, you're trying to apply as two different characters that are the exact same person. This is made even worse by the history- it is extremely stereotypical, and it makes your character seem like a Mary Sue (Mary Sue/Gary Stu characters are characters that have no flaws whatsoever and have no difficulty with anything.). In addition, the lore of this RP is ENTIRELY different than what it seems you think it is. And lastly, the "Sin Gear" is for your current weapons and your Sacred Treasure.
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Denied. From what i can tell, you're trying to apply as two different characters that are the exact same person. This is made even worse by the history- it is extremely stereotypical, and it makes your character seem like a Mary Sue (Mary Sue/Gary Stu characters are characters that have no flaws whatsoever and have no difficulty with anything.). In addition, the lore of this RP is ENTIRELY different than what it seems you think it is. And lastly, the "Sin Gear" is for your current weapons and your Sacred Treasure.
if you saw my different post, I put 2 different histories just in case you wanted me to be a sin instead of a holy knight, sorry for the misunderstanding.
And for the lore, I am still not sure what you are talking about.
if you saw my different post, I put 2 different histories just in case you wanted me to be a sin instead of a holy knight, sorry for the misunderstanding.
And for the lore, I am still not sure what you are talking about.
The thing is, i would like you to be a sin, but you have to apply as either a sin OR a holy knight. Not both. In any case, both applications will be denied. (You can keep the ability you made- i think its very good and origonal, but nerf Copycat to 2x-5x damage please.)
This is set in an alternate universe of the anime. It's similar, but not the same. Re-read the first three paragraphs of the first post to get the lore.
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The thing is, i would like you to be a sin, but you have to apply as either a sin OR a holy knight. Not both. In any case, both applications will be denied. (You can keep the ability you made- i think its very good and origonal, but nerf Copycat to 2x-5x damage please.)
This is set in an alternate universe of the anime. It's similar, but not the same. Re-read the first three paragraphs of the first post to get the lore.
OH ok, I get it now how would you feel about me keeping the character, and what he looks like and his personality but changing the history and the other things you want me to change?
OH ok, I get it now how would you feel about me keeping the character, and what he looks like and his personality but changing the history and the other things you want me to change?
That would be good.
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Appearance: Fit, looks in his late 20's, no muscles to be seen, short brown hair, 6'4, weighs 250 lb, arms and legs are unusually long, Caucasian
Personality: Over Confident, big ego, Clever, tries to be the best at everything
Sin or Holy Knight?:
Sin: Beast Mark is a Lion Located on his right shoulder
Holy Knight: Platinum ranked Holy Knight
Equipment: Black armor, that is not big, or heavy, allowing Peter to move faster. His Sacred Treasure is a sword with a enormously long blade, with a black handle with white trimming.
Power/Ability: Foresight: The ability to see your opponents next move before he makes it, it is not automatic, Peter has to do it on will or he can't see it.
Copy Cat: The ability to copy what your enemy is going to do, and make the attack 5x stronger and send the attack at the enemy, although this skill takes up all your energy and makes you temporarily blind, so Peter uses it as his trump card
Amnesia: The ability to see what your enemy is going to do next, and make the enemy forget it, causing the enemy to mess up, leaving the enemy open for a attack
History:
As a Child, Peter was always the top of his class in everything in his academy: Archery, sword dual-ling, hand-to-hand combat, even in his intellect. Peter always strives to be perfect in everything, since he came from a poor family, he needed all those skills to make money for his family. Once Peter was strong enough, he became a holy knight apprentice, from there, he kept getting stronger and stronger until he became a full fledged holy knight. After 3 years of being a Holy knight, his parents were killed by a group of bandits. Peter was enraged by the incidents, and killed each and every bandit, until everyone who was linked to his parents death were killed. He was sentenced to 10 years of imprisonment, after he was released, the king let him be a holy knight again, as long as he was watched over 24/7. 2 years of being watched over, he was promoted to a Diamond ranked Holy Knight. After promotion, the king made him an offer: Join the sins, and his watch would be over, or continue as a Holy Knight, and be watched for the rest of his life. Peter took the kings offer and became a sin.
History:
As a Child, Peter was always the top of his class in everything in his academy: Archery, sword dual-ling, hand-to-hand combat, even in his intellect. Peter always strives to be perfect in everything, since he came from a poor family, he needed all those skills to make money for his family. Once Peter was strong enough, he became a holy knight apprentice, from there, he kept getting stronger and stronger until he became a full fledged holy knight. After 3 years of being a Holy knight, his parents were killed by a group of bandits. Peter was enraged by the incidents, and killed each and every bandit, until everyone who was linked to his parents death were killed. He was sentenced to 10 years of imprisonment, after he was released, the king let him be a holy knight again, as long as he was watched over 24/7. 2 years of being watched over, he was promoted to a Diamond ranked Holy Knight. After promotion, the king made him an offer: Join the sins, and his watch would be over, or continue as a Holy Knight, and be watched for the rest of his life. Peter took the kings offer and became a sin.
Appearance: Fit, looks in his late 20's, no muscles to be seen, short brown hair, 6'4, weighs 250 lb, arms and legs are unusually long, Caucasian
Personality: Over Confident, big ego, Clever, tries to be the best at everything
Sin or Holy Knight?:
Sin: Beast Mark is a Lion Located on his right shoulder
Holy Knight: Platinum ranked Holy Knight
Equipment: Black armor, that is not big, or heavy, allowing Peter to move faster. His Sacred Treasure is a sword with a enormously long blade, with a black handle with white trimming.
Power/Ability: Foresight: The ability to see your opponents next move before he makes it, it is not automatic, Peter has to do it on will or he can't see it.
Copy Cat: The ability to copy what your enemy is going to do, and make the attack 5x stronger and send the attack at the enemy, although this skill takes up all your energy and makes you temporarily blind, so Peter uses it as his trump card
Amnesia: The ability to see what your enemy is going to do next, and make the enemy forget it, causing the enemy to mess up, leaving the enemy open for a attack
History:
As a Child, Peter was always the top of his class in everything in his academy: Archery, sword dual-ling, hand-to-hand combat, even in his intellect. Peter always strives to be perfect in everything, since he came from a poor family, he needed all those skills to make money for his family. Once Peter was strong enough, he became a holy knight apprentice, from there, he kept getting stronger and stronger until he became a full fledged holy knight. After 3 years of being a Holy knight, his parents were killed by a group of bandits. Peter was enraged by the incidents, and killed each and every bandit, until everyone who was linked to his parents death were killed. He was sentenced to 10 years of imprisonment, after he was released, the king let him be a holy knight again, as long as he was watched over 24/7. 2 years of being watched over, he was promoted to a Diamond ranked Holy Knight. After promotion, the king made him an offer: Join the sins, and his watch would be over, or continue as a Holy Knight, and be watched for the rest of his life. Peter took the kings offer and became a sin.
Other: Nothing coming to mind
This is the EXACT SAME history as your previous application, and therefore it is denied. Sorry, but any more applications by you will be ignored.
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Puella Magi Madoka Magicka is an awesome, feel-good, cutesy anime. You should watch it!
what? I thought this history would be fine, I just did 1 application this time.
As i stated in an earlier response, "...the history- it is extremely stereotypical, and it makes your character seem like a Mary Sue (Mary Sue/Gary Stu characters are characters that have no flaws whatsoever and have no difficulty with anything.)." Having two histories is one problem- a poorly written history is another.
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Puella Magi Madoka Magicka is an awesome, feel-good, cutesy anime. You should watch it!
Mood music:
This is a tale of Ancient Times, an Era before the Human and Non-Human worlds were forever divided. Long ago, Holy Knights wielded strong magical abilities to keep barbarians and vagabonds in check in the kingdom of Liones. But an order of knights reign above all of them, even above the Grandmasters. They are known as the Seven Deadly Sins. Escanor, the Lion sin of Pride. Merlin, the Boar sin of Gluttony. Diane, the Serpent sin of Envy. Ban, the Fox sin of Greed. King, the Grizzly sin of Sloth. Gowther, the Ram sin of Lust. And their captain, Meliodas, the Dragon sin of Wrath.
By some divine prank, the Sins have all gone missing. The Holy Knights have been flung into chaos, as the power-hungry knights seek the political power the Sins had. Others are trying to fulfill their duties, uncaring of who takes control. And a third set seek to stop those who would seize the power that which does not belong to them. This has created three factions of Holy Knights- they are called the Knights of Power, (Those that would seek power), the Knights of Order (Those who wish to stop the Knights of Power), and the Knights of the People (Those who tend to their duties as Holy Knights, uncaring of the political situation). This struggle has come to be called the Second Holy War.
Unbeknownst to them, the Sins have been reborn into new vessels by the power of the Goddesses. The new Sins have been distributed to different races- Human, Giant, Fairy, Doll, Witch, Druid, and Demon. The new vessels have gained new powers and abilities that surpass those of the Holy Knights. The new sins must unite in order to bring peace back to Liones and unite the factions. But will their sudden power overwhelm them? Or will they manage to unite and take control of the situation?
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Rules:
1. No Godmodding etc.
2. Standard Forum rules
3. Be nice, especially if you're correcting or complaining.
4. 1 Character per user
5. You can't win every battle. Expect to lose every now and then.
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Explanation of Holy Knights, the Sins and their abilities:
Each Holy Knight is extremely powerful- capable of taking out dozens of humans with ease. Usually with their unique power, which could be almost anything. Examples include Explosion, Rising Tornado, control over insects- it can be nearly anything. It doesnt even have to be lethal- 1 Holy Knight has the ability Link, which allows them to borrow physical strength, durability and the powers of whoever gives them to him willingly. If you want to play as a Holy Knight, you'll have to make our own powers. But powers aren't limited to just one technique- take Explosion. It has variations- Shot Bomb, which makes a line of explosive projectiles and fires them, Chain Explosion, which surrounds the target with many stationary explosive projectiles that go off in a chain, and Brilliant Detonation, which is dozens, if not hundreds of explosive projectiles being fired at once after a short charge time. Often times, your personality also reflects on your power- or vice versa. Though not always. The Holy Knight with the Explosion power is usually monotone, calm, cool and collected- the exact opposite of what the power would imply.
The 7 Deadly Sins, (Wrath, Envy, Greed, Sloth, Lust, Gluttony, and Pride) or the Sins for short, are extremely powerful Holy Knights. Each is branded with a beast on a different place on their body that represents their sin. Their sin is usually appropriate or ironic. Ban's sin, Greed is appropriate because his ability is based on taking an opponent's equipment as well as draining their stamina, power and speed. Gowther's sin, Lust is ironic because he strangely has no emotions whatsoever. Each Sin also has a Sacred Treasure, which is best explained by a quote. "Look at this lake. This represents all the magical power available to a Holy Knight or Sin at any time. Now, with your hands, how much could you take out at once?... With a Sacred Treasure, you're able to take out extraordinary amounts of magical energy in one go." Some of you can have your Sacred Treasures right off the bat, but i want some of you to have to find or make your treasure. You can tell me what it will be, but if you've yet to obtain it, specify that.
Also, if you're a sin, your background should include why you are that particular sin. For instance, King's sin is Sloth. He spent 700 years away from his kingdom after getting amnesia. In the meantime, a demon came around and burned down the Fairy King's Forest. He was charged with Sloth- failing to protect his kingdom- and received the mark of the Grizzly.
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Races:
Demon: Usually very large, unintelligent beasts who crave destruction. A very few can actually take human form as a child (around 10-12 in appearence), and act very much like humans. These versions live for thousands of years. Little is known about the Demon race otherwise.
Druid: Very similar to humans, but their tears can heal grievous wounds and possibly revive the dead. They're also direct counters to people with Demonic powers.
Humans: Standard humans. They must train in order to gain a connection to magic and become Holy Knights.
Witches: Very little is known about witches. They're a sub-race of Humans, and have an inherit connection to magic similar to Holy Knight's magic, but thats it.
Fairies: They look like little kids (8-12 in appearence) and don't age (Also, possibly immune to death via old age. Unsure). They also MIGHT have an innate connection to SOME magic, but this isn't concrete. Also, they can float and fly at will without wings.
Giants: Develop extremely slowly and have a slight magical connection to the earth and rocks, being able to create golem servants while children. (Avg. height ~30 ft.)
Doll: A very unique and rare race, little is known. They're artificial, but resemble humans (have organs and such) and can revive from wounds fatal to humans (A stab to the heart, decapitation (The only Doll in 7DS literally carried his severed head in search of his glasses.).).
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Application:
Name: (Full name, aliases and nicknames)
Age: (Both in age and appearance)
Gender: (Male or female)
Race: (Choose one from the above list)
Appearance: (What you look like + Height. Pictures and a height reference are acceptable.)
Personality: (How you act)
Sin or Holy Knight?:
Equipment: (Armor, weapons, anything you keep on you (For the Sins, this includes your Sacred Treasure, even if you haven't obtained it.).)
Power/Ability: (In it's most basic form and a good description)
History: (Your life until the start of the RP. For the Sins, this is until you get your beast mark- the sign that you've become a sin- and slightly after.)
Other: (Anything that is worth mentioning but wouldn't fit in any other category.)
Name: Richard Sternennacht
Age: 27
Appearance: Richard stands at around 5'11'' feet tall, and weighs around 175 lbs. He has an unassuming frame, as he's quite thin and wiry. In reality, he's quite capable of handling his own in physical combat. He has a few scars from combat, mostly on his chest and arms. Richard has long, silvery-white hair that extends to about shoulder level, though it is occasionally trimmed to prevent it from obscuring his vision. His eyes are a deep blue.
Personality: Richard is very down-to-earth and realistic. He does have aspirations, but reasonable ones that he can reach with enough work and time. He is also quite humble, preferring to do what is asked of him, then leaving. In battle, he is usually silent, only speaking the incantations and such that powers his ability.
Sin or Holy Knight?: Holy Knight, Knight of the People
Equipment: Richard prefers wearing a set of enchanted clothing that provides a good amount of slashing protection, but does nothing to protect against stabbing. It also protects against basic spells and minor abilities, though more powerful strikes will bypass this protection. It does, however, give him complete freedom of movement that regular armor would not provide.
Power/Ability: Stardust - At the core, all of his abilities rely on stardust, that is produced by some attacks, and used up by others. Stardust is a fine, white, glowing dust that lingers in the air for around 10 minutes, after which, it settles onto the ground and loses its properties. It is unclear from where this stardust originates, but it seems to be a magical construct that he uses to channel his power.
History: Richard was born to a rich, noble family. From a young age, he practiced his swordsmanship and combat skills with the tutors and teachers that was provided for him. His parents wanted him to become a Holy Knight, so he did not have too much choice in the matter. In reality, he feels like it's unnecessary, but he doesn't really care too much about it. Despite his apathetic demeanor, he does care for people, as shown when he helped defend a small village in his family's lands.
When he was old enough, he joined the Holy Knights, where he remained at the base rank for a while, due to his satisfaction at a low rank. When the First Holy War began, he simply continued his duties that were expected of him as a Holy Knight. Eventually, he found that to make a real difference, he'd have to work for it, so he begrudgingly did so. When the Second Holy War began, Richard saw that the Holy Knights were neglecting their original tasks, so he took it upon himself to make up for their mistakes. The people needed protecting, so he would help them.
Other: Apologies for the short history. I've felt rather uninspired lately, so if there's anything I've done wrong, feel free to point it out.
If I do not reply to my posts, I either have no internet connection, or am busy with college work. Alternatively, I may be writing up the post now. It all depends on the situation.
I actually have a few problems with this, but they stem from my mistakes. Sorry. One, i forgot to include the Race category in the application. I assume you're human, though. Second, i failed to specify- the first Holy war happened thousands of years ago- there's no way you could've experienced both unless you're a Fairy, Demon or Giant and got really lucky.
I do have one legitimate concern- Star Line Orrery. The way you word it makes it sound like an insta-kill, even to Holy Knights. I'd very much appreciate clarification to the damage possible with the attack or nerfing it to causing the hits to just sting and be annoying. Also, though i do like seeing a Holy Knight, i'd very much like to have at least a few Sin slots filled. You dont have to, but i'd like it if you changed from a Knight to a Sin.
Alright, noted. Richard is human, and I'll remove the bits about the first Holy War. I'll make it so that Star Line Orrery functions similarly to a AoE DoT spell for anyone that stays in its radius. It will probably only kill unlucky mooks, but its true purpose would be distracting focus from enemies(it's hard to ignore a shining projectile that constantly tears at your flesh, after all).
As for being a Sin, I can rewrite it so that Richard is a Sin, but I've got a few questions about it. How is one branded a Sin? I know that they're declared that by the Holy Order, but how does this happen? The original post says that the power of the goddesses have been reborn into new vessels, but how so? Do a few Holy Knights just wake up as a vessel, or does the Holy Order brand someone as a Sin, then they get their power?
I'll rewrite after these questions are answered. On a side note, I've been meaning to watch Seven Deadly Sins for a while now, but it's just kinda on my list of animes that I need to sift through at some point.
If I do not reply to my posts, I either have no internet connection, or am busy with college work. Alternatively, I may be writing up the post now. It all depends on the situation.
One is arrested for a crime, and their crime is put under one of the Seven Deadly Sins, and that's what they're arrested for- For instance, killing someone because you're jealous of them, that would fall under Envy. And "Branding" doesnt happen unless the crime they committed is especially heinous. If you do get branded, the mark of a beast is forever on you. I've decided to let the players customize what beast their symbol is, as well as where it is on their body, because all of the Sins' marks in the anime are in different spots. However, If you didn't have the mark beforehand and you become one of the Sins, it will appear on your body. At the same time, you will either gain magical powers or have your powers enhanced to be much more powerful. As for becoming one of the Sins, yes, most of them will just wake up overnight as one of them- and probably not know it. But not all will be holy knights at first, as most Knights are Human, and aside from the Sins, there's only one exception- but they disguised themselves.
I hope this helps.
Interested, reserved this spot for my application.
P.s. I have included a Gender section in my application, maybe you forget to put it on the template, if it was intended then I’ll edit my post.
Wow, i cant believe i forgot that too. Ive been away too long. I'll edit that in.
Name: Peter Pendragon
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Appearance: 6'2 (skin down below) Fit, Strong, if ever takes his armor off, has a six pack, and bulging muscles. but they don't show (Never takes his Armor off in public)
Personality: Over Confident, Cocky, Clever (Acts much like his Father)
Sin or Holy Knight?: Holy Knight
Equipment: Weapon: Arthur's Long Sword Sequence and Golden Armor (Given to him by his Adoptive Father: Arthur Pendragon)
Power/Ability: Full counter:
History: Son of Arthur Pendragon. Peter Always Trained with King Arthur, following his dream to become stronger than his Father. After Arthur Retired, Peter Decided to leave Camelot and go to Liones to full fill his dream of becoming a Holy Knight so that if Arthur ever died he could become King, this happened at the age of 10. Arthur gave Peter his Golden Armor and His Long Sword, Sequence. Peter Ended up full filling his goal of becoming a Holy Knight when he was 13 and was 1 step closer to achieving his dream. Peter becomes a big fan of the Seven Deadly Sins, and always requests to go on missions with them to learn to become stronger. At the age of 16, the king of Liones made him a honorary member of the 7 deadly sins. He Joins them only when they are in need of help.
Other: Learned Full Counter Magic from Meliodas, who was helping him full fill his goal of becoming more powerful than Arthur
Denied.
This is a completely different universe from the anime. It is also NOT minecraft. You also just copy/pasted Meliodas' abilities, and the history is just plain bad.
I'm sorry if i sound mean, but there was no other way to put it. Take tips from CloakedShadow's application before applying again.
if this is not minecraft, what is it?
also, you should probably explain that better.
I read it again and I agree, its not very good, I respect your decision.
(sorry for the inconvenience)
(this is not me trying to argue with you, sorry if it sounds that way)
I am going to take my time to rewrite the second application, also, I see no one is a sin, except the other guy, would you like me to be a sin? (if I do not see a response, I will write 2 histories and factions and all that little stuff)
Denied. From what i can tell, you're trying to apply as two different characters that are the exact same person. This is made even worse by the history- it is extremely stereotypical, and it makes your character seem like a Mary Sue (Mary Sue/Gary Stu characters are characters that have no flaws whatsoever and have no difficulty with anything.). In addition, the lore of this RP is ENTIRELY different than what it seems you think it is. And lastly, the "Sin Gear" is for your current weapons and your Sacred Treasure.
if you saw my different post, I put 2 different histories just in case you wanted me to be a sin instead of a holy knight, sorry for the misunderstanding.
And for the lore, I am still not sure what you are talking about.
The thing is, i would like you to be a sin, but you have to apply as either a sin OR a holy knight. Not both. In any case, both applications will be denied. (You can keep the ability you made- i think its very good and origonal, but nerf Copycat to 2x-5x damage please.)
This is set in an alternate universe of the anime. It's similar, but not the same. Re-read the first three paragraphs of the first post to get the lore.
OH ok, I get it now how would you feel about me keeping the character, and what he looks like and his personality but changing the history and the other things you want me to change?
That would be good.
Name: Peter Quiby
Age: 35
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Appearance: Fit, looks in his late 20's, no muscles to be seen, short brown hair, 6'4, weighs 250 lb, arms and legs are unusually long, Caucasian
Personality: Over Confident, big ego, Clever, tries to be the best at everything
Sin or Holy Knight?:
Equipment: Black armor, that is not big, or heavy, allowing Peter to move faster. His Sacred Treasure is a sword with a enormously long blade, with a black handle with white trimming.
Power/Ability: Foresight: The ability to see your opponents next move before he makes it, it is not automatic, Peter has to do it on will or he can't see it.
History:
As a Child, Peter was always the top of his class in everything in his academy: Archery, sword dual-ling, hand-to-hand combat, even in his intellect. Peter always strives to be perfect in everything, since he came from a poor family, he needed all those skills to make money for his family. Once Peter was strong enough, he became a holy knight apprentice, from there, he kept getting stronger and stronger until he became a full fledged holy knight. After 3 years of being a Holy knight, his parents were killed by a group of bandits. Peter was enraged by the incidents, and killed each and every bandit, until everyone who was linked to his parents death were killed. He was sentenced to 10 years of imprisonment, after he was released, the king let him be a holy knight again, as long as he was watched over 24/7. 2 years of being watched over, he was promoted to a Diamond ranked Holy Knight. After promotion, the king made him an offer: Join the sins, and his watch would be over, or continue as a Holy Knight, and be watched for the rest of his life. Peter took the kings offer and became a sin.
Other: Nothing coming to mind
History:
As a Child, Peter was always the top of his class in everything in his academy: Archery, sword dual-ling, hand-to-hand combat, even in his intellect. Peter always strives to be perfect in everything, since he came from a poor family, he needed all those skills to make money for his family. Once Peter was strong enough, he became a holy knight apprentice, from there, he kept getting stronger and stronger until he became a full fledged holy knight. After 3 years of being a Holy knight, his parents were killed by a group of bandits. Peter was enraged by the incidents, and killed each and every bandit, until everyone who was linked to his parents death were killed. He was sentenced to 10 years of imprisonment, after he was released, the king let him be a holy knight again, as long as he was watched over 24/7. 2 years of being watched over, he was promoted to a Diamond ranked Holy Knight. After promotion, the king made him an offer: Join the sins, and his watch would be over, or continue as a Holy Knight, and be watched for the rest of his life. Peter took the kings offer and became a sin.
This is the EXACT SAME history as your previous application, and therefore it is denied. Sorry, but any more applications by you will be ignored.
what? I thought this history would be fine, I just did 1 application this time.
As i stated in an earlier response, "...the history- it is extremely stereotypical, and it makes your character seem like a Mary Sue (Mary Sue/Gary Stu characters are characters that have no flaws whatsoever and have no difficulty with anything.)." Having two histories is one problem- a poorly written history is another.